morning keystyle..feed appr.

Just woke up 10 min keystyle
Feed is apreciated/ remember this is
10min key so feed on that
First post..

Minds always flowin like water/
Raised myself-no mothr or father//
Prayed for a girl-
God blessed me with 2 sons-no daughter/
No-job-no-money-25-no-notta!/
Still heart as gold-need help..I gotch ya//
Bailey be einstein-mathmatecian
Problem-solva/
Learned wisdom from the streats/
How to take words an mix em wita beat//
Like my women-i know I have rythm in the sheets/
A viciouse lyrical beast/
Made a lot of mistakes-fell on my face/
Learned at a young age-
Pick myselfe up-and get on in a rage//
Big time sinna/
pussie for breakfest-lunch-an dinna/
New beginna/
Always get shit for being white/
More or less for being so nice/
Banged my ex-yesterday-twice/
Big mistake-now I have feelings come back/
Need an out-a nice pussie to get back on track/


P.s (-) are pauses either brief or slow

Eh, certainly a modest effort. You have stuff to talk about. OK writing/wording through out. The subject isn't half bad. Something that'd be more appreciated in audio. Decent structure. Alright wording and material overall. Keep elevating...

thanks my man!
And ya everyone says I'm better on audio
That's why I'm tryin to get into good writing

you suck