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A rose this day.
I saw a rose this day
it wasn't withered away.
it wasn't filthy or weathered
it shown bright in the day
i took sight this display
of this site on the grave
a fallen hero?
maybe a slave
maybe one in the same
i saw a rose this day
it needed no name
stood tall with dignity
and apparently no shame
where it grows as arranged
with purpose through rain
you could take it away
place it back on the pane
but no it stays on the plane
so i gaze. i fear what awaits
i draw a tear on my face
i stay all night
and i stay awake
its gone for a while
while i sit and pray
the blessing is gone
one id like to stay
a sky full of rays
i saw arose on this day
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Re: A rose this day.
Good little poem. Simple but effective. Repetition of that line helped. Solid use of the image of a rose as metaphor for a person's 'life after death'.
Fix up the grammar, etc., and you have a nice piece.
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Re: A rose this day.
thank you for that feedback. It is truly much appreciated