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imma maniac gun down animaniacs yakko Wacko and dot dies
fucking herb, fish fry a cannabis til ya redman red eyes
Wack if ya girl stacked i fuck her, do her mother n drug her
ya bitch bled when the dick's fed, i whip it out she smoothered
i see you pussy,cunt, solo roll on the kid backpacked in a hallway
Not getting a ipad half price, when i copped a steel on black friday
Rip ya tongue out..cat, if you want the win bad enough to taste it
fact!! pull more elect tricks then samsung n you still last placin it
listen u poverty commodity, the 1, 2 will bring MR to an end period
you win,as imppossible as baby lisa having her first period
Check, my bad busy at work. I'll drop right naaa
your just an alternate, i'll beat you coming older than fuck
i could drop a retro verse, you'll never throwback a punch..
Pete's a sucker for the girls, can't do shit without his bitch
& fuck sayin she's abused him cause we know that pistol's whipped
your just a pussy in your household, genetics on some other shit
you'll never grow to be a man, atleast the one your mother is
i'll keep it blunt, i've seen you win... but barely by a hit
won by a millimeter peter,
.....................i'm not talkin bout your dick
so yeah i heard of you before, it's so coincidental chump
that people sayin pete is whack, and oh my fuckin god, he sucks
key.
Up... Posting links in morning
Pistols Pete
imma maniac gun down animaniacs yakko Wacko and dot dies
fucking herb, fish fry a cannabis til ya redman red eyes
nah yo, wasnt feelin this really. set up was weird and there wasnt much of a punch
Wack if ya girl stacked i fuck her, do her mother n drug her
ya bitch bled when the dick's fed, i whip it out she smoothered
once again, nah man. u showin some multi usage but its really meaningless if ur not goin anywhere with it. basically, form a punch w/multies.
i see you pussy,cunt, solo roll on the kid backpacked in a hallway
Not getting a ipad half price, when i copped a steel on black friday
nah b. that steel wp is played. woulda worked if somehow u flipped it in some dope nd orginal concept...but u didnt
Rip ya tongue out..cat, if you want the win bad enough to taste it
fact!! pull more elect tricks then samsung n you still last placin it
not feelin this, same reasons as above
listen u poverty commodity, the 1, 2 will bring MR to an end period
you win,as imppossible as baby lisa having her first period
first off, i dont know who this "baby lisa" supposed to be. but seein how you rhymed period w/period ill just say this closer wasnt solid.
Mr.Wack
your just an alternate, i'll beat you coming older than fuck
i could drop a retro verse, you'll never throwback a punch..
nah man, didnt even rhyme son.
Pete's a sucker for the girls, can't do shit without his bitch
& fuck sayin she's abused him cause we know that pistol's whipped
[COLOR="white"]ok..ok. ill give this to u. reason bein its the most creativity nd wit i've seen used..yet. coulda delivered it smoother with the "without his bitch" nd "pistols whipped". but still the concept is clear enough to understand it without goin back over COLOR]
your just a pussy in your household, genetics on some other shit
you'll never grow to be a man, atleast the one your mother is
ehh, did better on the rhymin i was just talkin about. still tho, punchwise..coulda been alot stronger. i guess it could be taken as a funny bar but the thing is these typa lines been used hella times already. try bein a lil more creative
i'll keep it blunt, i've seen you win... but barely by a hit
won by a millimeter peter,
.....................i'm not talkin bout your dick
no..no..no.
so yeah i heard of you before, it's so coincidental chump
that people sayin pete is whack, and oh my fuckin god, he sucks
weeeeeak. close it out better than that b.
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imma start off with PP.
yo, u might be new to the site nd text battlin altogether but u gotta learn how to deliver ya thoughts on paper direct and smooth. better the delivery the harder a punch will be too. just addin that extra bit of complexity by perfectin ur flow and execution can help u out.
as for ya punches tho, i wasnt likin em to be real with u.
"Wack if ya girl stacked i fuck her, do her mother n drug her
ya bitch bled when the dick's fed, i whip it out she smoothered"
with this u coulda changed it just a lil bit. maybe say some shit like
tappin ya girl as i fuck her, do the same to ur mother n drug her
she choked the chicken, as her mouth open wide as she smothered
eh, iunno...jus brainstormin some shit. u get what im tryna do tho.
ayo Wack, u werent that good but not as bad neither so ill give this vote to u.
Why?..cause from the verses although both of em bein weak, i seen a better thought process in ya bars that atleast showed me ur capable of formin some punches.
i dont be really readin ur battles nd shit so iunno if this is u at ya A game or just a throw a way verse, either or, stll think u should work on rhymin consistently first off. secondly, be direct, get personal on a nigga and clown him. dont throw everyone off with multi's that lead nowhere, thus bein 2 lines of filler nahmean?
anyhow, thats enough to say. for a slightly better verse with some sign of complexity that i particularly like, imma rock with Wack on this one and give him my vote.
jus keep battlin nd workin on ya craft gentlemen, peace.
Vote-> Mr.Wack
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-PEACE
Pistols Pete
imma maniac gun down animaniacs yakko Wacko and dot dies
fucking herb, fish fry a cannabis til ya redman red eyes
Nah man I didnt like this
Wack if ya girl stacked i fuck her, do her mother n drug her
ya bitch bled when the dick's fed, i whip it out she smoothered
Nah man I didnt like this either
i see you pussy,cunt, solo roll on the kid backpacked in a hallway
Not getting a ipad half price, when i copped a steel on black friday
^^nah man didnt like this
Rip ya tongue out..cat, if you want the win bad enough to taste it
fact!! pull more elect tricks then samsung n you still last placin it
^^nah man I didnt like this either
listen u poverty commodity, the 1, 2 will bring MR to an end period
you win,as imppossible as baby lisa having her first period
^^nah man I didnt like this either
Wack
your just an alternate, i'll beat you coming older than fuck
i could drop a retro verse, you'll never throwback a punch..
^^good wp nice punch
Pete's a sucker for the girls, can't do shit without his bitch
& fuck sayin she's abused him cause we know that pistol's whipped
^^good wp but this punch isnt very insulting shouldve went another way
with this
your just a pussy in your household, genetics on some other shit
you'll never grow to be a man, atleast the one your mother is
^^ok decent
i'll keep it blunt, i've seen you win... but barely by a hit
won by a millimeter peter,
.....................i'm not talkin bout your dick
^^naw missdirection failed here
so yeah i heard of you before, it's so coincidental chump
that people sayin pete is whack, and oh my fuckin god, he sucks
^^nah the set up made this punch bad it just seems random
Overall I wasnt feeling anything in pistols verse no hate it just wasnt
hard hitting or didnt make sense Wack had a couple of decent punch and some that fell off or missed but it more than enough to put pistol away
Vote Mr.Wack
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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...254/index.html
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...329/index.html
Up .
welcome to the slaughter house ;)
First off my vote clearly goes to Mr. Wack
the reasons are pretty obvious. this one was a total blowout. Pistol didn't have one line that's worth a quotation. dog I seen better lines from you. right here Mr. Wack just had the harder punches, the better wordplay, similies and creativity. felt like every punch hit.
Mr. Wack I liked how you set your punches up and executed nicely, well done.
Thanks guys. UP!
Up. This is dumb
ehhh
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your just a pussy in your household, genetics on some other shit
you'll never grow to be a man, atleast the one your mother is
Wack had som decent shots that woulda been nice if worded better but the one i quoted was a cool misdirection. Pete had some aight attempts but failed to land any of them. execution needs some work.
v. wack
Thanks. Last up
i'll keep it blunt, i've seen you win... but barely by a hit
won by a millimeter peter,
.....................i'm not talkin bout your dick
alright punch, delt some damage.
vs.
Rip ya tongue out..cat, if you want the win bad enough to taste it
fact!! pull more elect tricks then samsung n you still last placin it
ehhh, weak punch.
Pete, your flow was nice. Good use of multis and inters, but you had no punches. If you incorperated some insults or wordplay, you would have won my vote. But Wack had punches.
V - Wack