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@Smog
Word hood luck my man
Ready when u r @Letterman
The path uve takin has u shakin, tons of self hype without givin proof..
Ur skills took such a dip... U mastered that dance move better than bitches do..
When I heard he'd suck a dick for an acomp....i died a brief murder...
Came back to say "take that shit to illunatic...." ill supply the cheeseburgers..
Wordz said u dr. Sues'd ya last drop, I laughed dawg cuz he said it well..
I mean this fuckin clown'll come plain.. Then do that after every L..
Since ur concepts r played..ull need fresher flips if u want voters to like..
I mean dem joints got such awful twists... Bob Marley woulda rather loaded a pipe..
I noticed ur wife jockin my Johnson, so I planted a seed sooo deep within..
N while ur stressin financially id suggest don't trip, let......its only some twins..
Wack battler but at driving trucks you're dope, b
We can tell you got big rigs, from the way you screwed KnowP
You're wack & your style's been weird AF as of recent
But I'm not saying you're odd...because we all know he's actually decent
He's in love with his hand. It's got him thru many nights of scorn
So if we ever see Smog animate...he's just jacking off to cartoon porn
My verses are polished. Your choppy flows could never soil these
You got so many holes in your verse, Shia Lebouf might sue you for royalties
He keeps a pic in the truck, mad that he can't see his girl but Letter engage
Cuz I see your chick & driver crazy...when you see her, you just have road rage
The path uve takin has u shakin, tons of self hype without givin proof..
Ur skills took such a dip... U mastered that dance move better than bitches do..
Kind of like the Half Assed concept you dropped recently. Don't remember who it was against, but close, IMO.
When I heard he'd suck a dick for an acomp....i died a brief murder...
Came back to say "take that shit to illunatic...." ill supply the cheeseburgers..
What?
This was a solid personal, IMO. I liked it...Quote:
Wordz said u dr. Sues'd ya last drop, I laughed dawg cuz he said it well..
I mean this fuckin clown'll come plain.. Then do that after every L..
Since ur concepts r played..ull need fresher flips if u want voters to like..
I mean dem joints got such awful twists... Bob Marley woulda rather loaded a pipe..
Concept dope, execution was dull, IMO.
This was cool, I think you could have tied the set up a little more and better, tho.Quote:
I noticed ur wife jockin my Johnson, so I planted a seed sooo deep within..
N while ur stressin financially id suggest don't trip, let......its only some twins..
OVERALL: You are definitely getting nicer, Smog, considering I haven't read a verse from you since, we battled, I think. Wording has improved and your choice of concepts as well. I think you pretty much got the concept of battling, finally lol. Overall, seems to me you took an easy here, maybe rushed and/or can careless about this battle but this didn't seem as you went hard and or tried to rip Let's face off, some light work, I suppose. Decent drop, tho. I enjoyed the read and wtf were you talkin about in your 2nd bar?
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Wack battler but at driving trucks you're dope, b
We can tell you got big rigs, from the way you screwed KnowP
I was the Originator of the whole truck concepts against Smog, this was cool and some what close to the concept PG dropped against him, I believe. You just added the name KnowP, lol.
You're wack & your style's been weird AF as of recent
But I'm not saying you're odd...because we all know he's actually decent
This concept is so old. Using an RB's member name and comparing to talent. I've done this concept several times and I remember miracle using pretty much the same concept and execution, with the member "Clout" but I don't know who he was battling. It was in FL, tho.
He's in love with his hand. It's got him thru many nights of scorn
So if we ever see Smog animate...he's just jacking off to cartoon porn
The animate wp is played as well. And your execution wasn't fresh at all, IMO. Typical execution for the wp.
Eh, this was ok,ish. Think you could have used more of a harsher execution but w/e.Quote:
My verses are polished. Your choppy flows could never soil these
You got so many holes in your verse, Shia Lebouf might sue you for royalties
He keeps a pic in the truck, mad that he can't see his girl but Letter engage
Cuz I see your chick & driver crazy...when you see her, you just have road rage
This wasn't much of an insult? Unless I'm missing something here? When he sees his chick he has road rage? Ok... And??? You see where I'm getting at? This bar was wayyyyy to open ended. I Know where you tried to go but your execution on a some what decent concept was terrible. This may of had potential to be a haymaker.
OVERALL: IDK if it's me or just I don't know you well enough or read some of your battles, but I thought you were a lot better then this. I mean, I know you tend to drop a played concept or 2, which we all do but every verse, man? I believe I've stated this previously in a battle that I voted in, which you were a part of. Just because you use a current event and/or new member and add it to a really played/outdated concept, it doesn't mean it's going to be "FRESH" bro. Try and stray away from those shits. Try and take a personal approach. Your likely to drop something thats fresh, man. I think your a decent writer, but as of late from the last 2 drops I've peeped from you, you haven't impressed me at all. Not one bar.
Ok, I think this was a fairly close battle here. I got Smog with the Complain personal and the Triplets bar, which IMO could have been set up better, but I still enjoyed the bar. And I got Letterman w/ the cliched "You got so many holes in your verse" concept. Even tho he could have used more of a harsher execution, I think it was one of his better bars. With that being said...
v/Smog - More effective misses and consistent.
since ur concepts r played..ull need fresher flips if u want voters to like..
I mean dem joints got such awful twists... Bob Marley woulda rather loaded a pipe..
I noticed ur wife jockin my Johnson, so I planted a seed sooo deep within..
N while ur stressin financially id suggest don't trip, let......its only some twins..
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He's in love with his hand. It's got him thru many nights of scorn
So if we ever see Smog animate...he's just jacking off to cartoon porn
V/smog, this was a ok one was expecting more from letterman, he came reallly played
even the bar i quoted was old as fuck lol, ur wordings clean but work on ur concepts bro
smog had some misses but those to i quoted were cool he was more consistent w/ solid hits.
Voted on Joe/Schiz
Ill get another
Voted on champ match
The path uve takin has u shakin, tons of self hype without givin proof..
Ur skills took such a dip... U mastered that dance move better than bitches do..
Wordz said u dr. Sues'd ya last drop, I laughed dawg cuz he said it well..
I mean this fuckin clown'll come plain.. Then do that after every L..
Since ur concepts r played..ull need fresher flips if u want voters to like..
I mean dem joints got such awful twists... Bob Marley woulda rather loaded a pipe..
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You're wack & your style's been weird AF as of recent
But I'm not saying you're odd...because we all know he's actually decent
He's in love with his hand. It's got him thru many nights of scorn
So if we ever see Smog animate...he's just jacking off to cartoon porn
letterman had a better verse against miracle imo. that knowp bar coulda been dope but missed the connect. and the final bar was therebut didnt feel the sting either. smog just had a better overall verse. the twins n cheesburger punches were wack but the rest was pretty decent.
v. smog
Smog: opener could have been better, Cheeseburgers was wack, liked the complain wp..nice, bob Marley was dope, triplet was nice as well.
Letterman: big rigs was ight, odd was ok, cartoon porn wasn't that good, holes was ok but wasn't too harsh ya know, closer was wack n lazy.
Vote: Smog. This was a good read but Smog came more consistent n all around better.
