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Krucial th1rt3en
FUK wat yuh Networth! Tek bursts prove dude a weakling
I'm bout to champ W/Front Lines... U wish sum one could write a verse for U to beat me!
On ur comeback? U dumb wack! Ppl know this mans gay
Vs Spitzo u left an empty space between each bar...Voters'll leave them the same way!
Ur Gun bars is fake shit! Fukin rapist! Watch bomb rip a lame
When I say Fuck, Bitch Th1rt3en! I ain't talk'n bout how this Krucial dick get laid!
Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)
Bomb punches be fire... S'why I lace'em W/welts
FL on the GROUND,Champ! & I'll put u 6 feet under that for thinkin bout takin the belt
he talking all that Smoke, but aint nothing Fire that he said,Quote:
Originally Posted by Bomb Bard
thinks he's good......'Twisted Metal', this 'Clowns' only 'Fire in his head'.
he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'.
i gotta reach for u, cuz your pen is too trash for me to be fair against,
im 'Cocky', bcuz this 'Ego'/Eagle sends flying whatever it air against/'arrogance'.
i Sharp Shoot, youll know were to find evil watchin me paralyze people,
'Pin Point' accuracy, i take a 'Cleaner Shot' than 'Sterilized Needle'.
he holds 2 Titles, but all i see in your verseis excessive ramblings,
fuck awards, i 'AM' (a.m) 'Eating your Food', this a 'Breakfast of Champions'.
Dead
Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)
vs
he talking all that Smoke, but aint nothing Fire that he said,
thinks he's good......'Twisted Metal', this 'Clowns' only 'Fire in his head'.
he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'.
i Sharp Shoot, youll know were to find evil watchin me paralyze people,
'Pin Point' accuracy, i take a 'Cleaner Shot' than 'Sterilized Needle'.
+1 krucial th1rt3en
up...
Krucial thirteen easily won this! His punches were perfectly executed matched with great rhymes.
Bombards had basic rhymes like weakling, beat me? gay and way is real basic.
he talking all that Smoke, but aint nothing Fire that he said,
thinks he's good......'Twisted Metal', this 'Clowns' only 'Fire in his head'.
he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'.
i Sharp Shoot, youll know were to find evil watchin me paralyze people,
'Pin Point' accuracy, i take a 'Cleaner Shot' than 'Sterilized Needle'.
he holds 2 Titles, but all i see in your verseis excessive ramblings,
fuck awards, i 'AM' (a.m) 'Eating your Food', this a 'Breakfast of Champions'.
Vs
Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)
+1 krucial th1rt3en
"FUK wat yuh Networth! Tek bursts prove dude a weakling
I'm bout to champ W/Front Lines... U wish sum one could write a verse for U to beat me!"
This was weak!
"On ur comeback? U dumb wack! Ppl know this mans gay
Vs Spitzo u left an empty space between each bar...Voters'll leave them the same way!"
First half is weak, second half you got a decent punch in.
"Ur Gun bars is fake shit! Fukin rapist! Watch bomb rip a lame
When I say Fuck, Bitch Th1rt3en! I ain't talk'n bout how this Krucial dick get laid!"
You got another decent punch in, but this bar is the same quality as the last bar: first half weak, second half saved it.
"Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)"
This was an okay bar, its a tier above all the previous ones. Its got a good punchline, the first half works with the second. This bar shined, but again its just okay.
"Bomb punches be fire... S'why I lace'em W/welts
FL on the GROUND,Champ! & I'll put u 6 feet under that for thinkin bout takin the belt"
I'm missing some context here or something, cuz at first glance this bar looks way too basic. So I don't see this one shine. Nice multi syllables, but they didn't have much effect. Not much of a diss here.
Overall I'm barely feeling this verse.
vs.
"he talking all that Smoke, but aint nothing Fire that he said,
thinks he's good......'Twisted Metal', this 'Clowns' only 'Fire in his head'."
That was a nice punch, actually made me laugh. Nice opener
"he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'."
i had to look up what you meant by Alpine box... hey that was nice, took a jab at him in the first half, and damn it made the "amped" wordplay in the second line work. This is a good bar.
"i gotta reach for u, cuz your pen is too trash for me to be fair against,
im 'Cocky', bcuz this 'Ego'/Eagle sends flying whatever it air against/'arrogance'."
I'm not sure what you meant by reaching for him, but that second line was almost a reach. It's nice wordplay and works with the idea of the first half, and the whole bar looks nice at first glance. But the Ego/Arrogance meanings could've been better executed. This bar passes though.
"i Sharp Shoot, youll know were to find evil watchin me paralyze people,
'Pin Point' accuracy, i take a 'Cleaner Shot' than 'Sterilized Needle'."
That's solid for a gun bar, your verse has been consistently skillful so far. No direct diss here though.
"he holds 2 Titles, but all i see in your verseis excessive ramblings,
fuck awards, i 'AM' (a.m) 'Eating your Food', this a 'Breakfast of Champions'."
Alright back to dissing...That "i AM (a.m)" part is a bit of a reach in pronouncing it... The concept was good, but it lacked good execution. Bar was just okay, wordplay was good, this bar wasn't hardhitting.
Yo...I'm voting Krucial on this one.
"i gotta reach for u, cuz your pen is too trash for me to be fair against,Quote:
Originally Posted by Onceawhile
im 'Cocky', bcuz this 'Ego'/Eagle sends flying whatever it air against/'arrogance'."
I'm not sure what you meant by reaching for him, but that second line was almost a reach. It's nice wordplay and works with the idea of the first half, and the whole bar looks nice at first glance. But the Ego/Arrogance meanings could've been better executed. This bar passes though.
it was a blatant reach, thats what i meant by 'i got a reach for u, bcuz your pen is too trash for me to be fair against'.
just showing i can do a bit of everything.
i think alot of URL battlers reach, and i try em out sometime lol
i appreciate the feedback bro, really means alot, glad u fucked with my shit
Bomb not one good bar I seen better battles from you
Kruical took punchlines, opener, & wordplay
Vote. Kruical for a better verse
You going to have to explain this betterQuote:
Originally Posted by Brilliant
Krucial verse is nice
Punchlines connected better compare to bomb
I felt like bomb verse lacking of punches so I don't like it
Vote does not count as she doesn't know how to explain anything she ever votes on
-Staff
Lmfaooooooooo
Quote:
Originally Posted by Bomb Bard
Quote:
Originally Posted by Krucial Th1rt3en
I don't know what these idiots are doing for 13 but Bom took this easily. He didn't have many bangers but he was consistent. 13 had shitty setups, played material, and indirect bars.
v- Bom
Not sure what you were doing here.Quote:
Originally Posted by Bomb Bard
Quote:
Originally Posted by Krucial Th1rt3en
S'ok I got bomb taking this. Both need to upgrade their vocabulary to produce better rhyme schemes. Both need more creative angles and concepts. I mean bomb you write like a 12 year old lol. Crucial you're trying too hard to be complex. When nothing your using is cunning or witty.
V/ bomb for being able to land something.
2-2 Uppin
Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)
vs
he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'.
Bar completely dumbed down his skill this match. Seen him spar with vets way better than this. didnt like the inconsistent np and lazy concepts in this battle. K13 got that live battle flow that doenst really translate well to text but that alpine bar was crisp as to me. a couple other bars we aight but too indirect. THat sterilized needle joint would of been flames had it been more direct linked with a personal. hard one to call here tho.
v. k13
Bomb bard
On ur comeback? U dumb wack! Ppl know this mans gay
Vs Spitzo u left an empty space between each bar...Voters'll leave them the same way
Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)
Krucial 13
he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'.
A lot of ur shit was close but u gotta lose the '''''' and work on ur wording so ur shit has better impact and readability
V. Bomb. He getting robbed hard
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And 'alpine box em' doesnt even make sense. Work on ur wp too
Krucial gets my vote.Quote:
Originally Posted by Krucial Th1rt3en
4-3 krucial
Bomb
FUK wat yuh Networth! Tek bursts prove dude a weakling
I'm bout to champ W/Front Lines... U wish sum one could write a verse for U to beat me!
Too simple of a hit basic flip
On ur comeback? U dumb wack! Ppl know this mans gay
Vs Spitzo u left an empty space between each bar...Voters'll leave them the same way!
Ok flip
Ur Gun bars is fake shit! Fukin rapist! Watch bomb rip a lame
When I say Fuck, Bitch Th1rt3en! I ain't talk'n bout how this Krucial dick get laid!
No
Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)
Nah
Bomb punches be fire... S'why I lace'em W/welts
FL on the GROUND,Champ! & I'll put u 6 feet under that for thinkin bout takin the belt
Basic flip.again
13
Krucial
he talking all that Smoke, but aint nothing Fire that he said,
thinks he's good......'Twisted Metal', this 'Clowns' only 'Fire in his head'.
Good wordplay nice flip creative
he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'.
Dont explain ur fucking bars we get the wordplay this was a nice creative flip on finish
i gotta reach for u, cuz your pen is too trash for me to be fair against,
im 'Cocky', bcuz this 'Ego'/Eagle sends flying whatever it air against/'arrogance'.
Forced af stop explaining ur shit too
i Sharp Shoot, youll know were to find evil watchin me paralyze people,
'Pin Point' accuracy, i take a 'Cleaner Shot' than 'Sterilized Needle'.
More self hype but dope metaphore
he holds 2 Titles, but all i see in your verseis excessive ramblings,
fuck awards, i 'AM' (a.m) 'Eating your Food', this a 'Breakfast of Champions'.
The A M wp didnt work for me in this concept
V/Krucial definitely more creative in this one
good lookin for all the votes, 5-3 my W?Quote:
Originally Posted by Joe Boston
If krucial wins I quit fl