The Mind of a Poet (Complete)

The mind of a poet
Is clearer than the cleanest water,
That trickles through your mind
Like a stream of thoughts,
Until it builds
Into a waterfall of emotions,
And collects
In a lake of blood,
Surrounding the hole
I put in my head…

The mind of a poet
Is crowded with ideas,
Scratching to get out
Until they burn a passage
Through your right hand
Bleed onto the page
And formulate the letters
That didn’t make sense
When I thought them…
The rough draft of imagination

The mind of a poet
Is obscured by blurs
Of occurrences never heard
The shadow you walk on
And the one that hides you
In the darkness you shiver
But fail to realize
That it is the lone cloud
That rains down the tears
You didn’t know how to cry

The mind of a poet
Is a sponge for opportunity
Seeping up the things
You never knew you knew
Until you can process
The illogical systems
Oil your wheels that
Never stopped turning
And keep in mind
What is on the outside

The mind of a poet
Is the birthplace of creation,
The origin of the ideals
You press upon yourself
And when you feel trapped
Like your space is caving in
Always remember your goal
Of what is yet to come
And that your wish is only,
A mark on the page away

The mind of a poet
Is crowded with ideas,
Scratching to get out
Until they burn a passage
Through your right hand
Bleed onto the page
And formulate the letters
That didn’t make sense
When I thought them…The rough draft of imagination
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liked this line cus it being true and the feeling i got from it being very percise.

the way you wrote your lines and the flow i got out of it with great depth in emotion was really nice...seeing this as being true also really helped out alot


The mind of a poet
Is the birthplace of creation,
The origin of the ideals
You press upon yourself
And when you feel trapped
Like your space is caving in
Always remember your goal
Of what is yet to come
And that your wish is only,
A mark on the page away
^^
painted a nice picture..the image in this was greatly outputted. nice do laureate..really well done in wording and structure and emotion dude. feeling this well done...nice.

RTF if so.

thanks

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Originally Posted by Laureate

The mind of a poet
Is clearer than the cleanest water,
That trickles through your mind
Like a stream of thoughts,
Until it builds
Into a waterfall of emotions,
And collects
In a lake of blood,
Surrounding the hole
I put in my head…

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I don't know, but there was something about this part that was an ironic and clever wording passage. I loved this whole thing, s o deep and real, about what's happening to poets today. I loved it man, it was great and a nice, easy and relaxing read on the eyes. Very emotional, and the irony in it was great, just the depression and IMPRESSION it put on the reader was so good. Nice one man.

This needs serious revision. Which isn't a bad thing.

It tends to have it's low points. Especially the beginning. It's too... simplistic that it makes me want to spoon out my eyeballs and throw them at bats.

But this piece does have it's high points though too.

Just remember, simplicity has it's place in art. And I value it a lot. But when you make something with such simplicity that a fellow like me ends up cringing, you definitly aint got a winner.

LW