Freestyle ( Punch Lines)

You want to battle
I instill the fear
It not nelly it's ur beathe thats hot in here
Beat a asian
homeboy u better get ur gun
I eat fish
but ur ass smell like one
A hot asian thats blazin to the game u better beg
Damn u got a pussy
"It stank!"
Close ur legs.
nuthin to me u a mc i cant see
Im the king of the world
Im like god i rule heaven
u cant close ur legs cause they open 24-7
u a bitch
man u ho!
Hold it down for Cali
Killia rep Frisco
Harder then hard
im a pimp let me give u some tips.
Dont fuck wit me cuz my game is bigger then jay z's damn lips
hot boy dropin dimes
with ryhmes
that make the bitchs log off of windows 99
so dont battle me if u dont have a pucnh line
cuz i can win in my chair
seat back
and Recline
:shoot: it's over.....battle me

newbie drop. i didnt like it. your structure really stunk. shouldnt have 2 words then another line. work on extending ur lines and throwing a punch with every bar. also, dont try glorifying urself in a battle, the object is to diss the other guy.
keep working at it tho
pz

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.