Stars? :|

It’s lasting
The stars
The bars
That we create
Appreciate our flaws will you
Mediate our dirty paws
Our curtly causes
We not here forever
Never settle
With peddling
And realize there it’s a time
Where errors are irrelevant
Malevolence is the imminent
Diligence is the dividend
Flip the script and take the nights
From getting tips to
Taking trips
From getting fits
To making lists

Yooooo, what up. Its my first post on this websiteeee

What's good ZanyMechanism? I see ur new here and I not sure if youre an alias or not, but this seemed like a bunch of babble. Not hating. Um, id say go look in the OM Hall of Fame to see how to elevate ur skills. This piece seems to me more like an audio piece than an actual written piece. Looking at your flow, it deffinately seems to me that this would be better suited to be an audio verse. This isnt bad....but there aint nany direction where this is going. Add some concepts and some structure to ur piece to make an actual topic/story to where u want to go with this piece. But, yeah man, do you, and just keep writing....

Hey Zany, welcome. I think this is something that would be more suited in the cypher section.
There's a certain amount of lines needed for om drops and your work here is interesting but its more along the cypher line i think
as opposed to om.
That aside, you've got some crafty lines, but from line to line, they don't always make complete sense,
not that written work has to make complete sense but...yeah....I think the guts of this is missing, the core.
You've got some nice descriptions but I'd like to see you
delve deeper and give us more imagery, more description, more depth and more story line in an om drop .
Looking forward to reading more from you.

Nice attempt but I Believe You should work on your Concept a Lil More. You left that "Whats going on" Type in my mind when reading through. You will get it, Practice make "Greatness"