Thank you dude... lol... Why have you got a new alias ?...Quote:
Originally Posted by ..:D.Realist:..
And no i don't belong in text, it depresses my interlect lol. :)
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Thank you dude... lol... Why have you got a new alias ?...Quote:
Originally Posted by ..:D.Realist:..
And no i don't belong in text, it depresses my interlect lol. :)
why because i think its good for a change and i think the name is catchy lol dont you? lol
Real deep man...
not only was it deep, the wordplay within each line was damn near exceptional..
As I begin to rise to my feet, I sense the sorrow had found its escape…
I walk a little, with him by my mind side, not seduced by Lucifer…
I am celibate to animosity, free from atrocities, love with-in…
The doors slam open, the sun renders me temporarily blinded.
those 4 lines In particular, loved the highlighted line...''celibate to animosity''...feeling that part, I Just liked the concept of it..
Your a creative writer, man...quit ya day job and keep writin'....Really enjoyable and deep peice....Stay up..
clean style of writing...................keep it up...you emotion was felt.beleive that.....................................7/10
Okay... upping for people who know what poetry is...
The amount of people in which verses i've fed on, and only this many on mine ?
I mean like wtf lol.
But word thanks to the people who bothered to feed.
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Originally Posted by Verbal Insanity.
sorry for tha late feed babe.. but chea this had some real vivid imagery.. all the stanzas went very well one after thee other.. the wordin in this was great 2.. this is one of them type of poems that leave u their 2 really think about it all.. i was feelin this verbal.. i should watch out more o.ms from u..
i liked this piece i havent gave feed on a poem before but i liked ur use of vocabulary it gave it a more distinguished or however that words spelled look i like how u put emotion into this piece
Thanks, upping.
go leave feed in one of my o.ms in my sig please :love:
Done :love:
thanx babe :love: :love: :love:
another impressive piece verbal you have talent.... this was a very well thought out piece not really emotional but well emotional in an happy way ( if you catch my drift) i loved this one a religious piece thats whaz go0ood keep it up
Thank you.
Very nice piece bro.It was very deep and knew what you were talking about.Some fantastic lines were used in this piece
The windows to my soul free the pain, released into vapour…
My being is complete in his word, peace at-last is my saviour…
My sin confession, the chains loosen their grip on my heart…
Memories fade away onto the golden words of his grace.
The Imagert in that was brilliant and you did show emoyion in it even though you said the piece wasnt ment to be emotional.Overall it was a fantastic drop and I really enjoyed reading it.Look foward to your next piece
p.s send it to somebody I KNOW you will be taken in