Thanx Foreshadow!.. Ima take the advise...
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Thanx Foreshadow!.. Ima take the advise...
In all honesty.....it was good that you wanted to express what happened. I could see what you wanted to say but I think there were a few things that needed worked on.
I'm not going to say anything about the spelling (like Foreshadow said nobody's perfect), the flow could have been smoother and structure should have been a lil more set up.
Besides that, your vision and ideas were definetly there and it helped make up where you dropped in other places. Keep it up though, emotions are great for pieces but make sure they don't write the piece for you...cause sometimes it will overwhelm the reader.
Keep up the good work!
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gee guys
the feedbacks just a bit DELAYED
this shit is older than my RB career
ROFL
Ey Lady D
wut up?
Illusions that was good feedback and I appreciate the fact that you understand my emotions, thank you!
Synistar at least its getting feedback now, dont matter how old it was.
nice poem I was feelin the emotion!!!!!!!!!!!!!!great job!!!!!