Me, Myself, and I

A six year bid doing an involuntary assignment
Sit in here steady locked in solitary confinement
Sickness appeared, an act of expression, added obssesion
A practice, a section, became established during my adolesence
An action embellished, turned into seductive notes
Then a corruptive flow turned into a productive growth
So abrupt, and slow...and through a visionary atonement
Saw God..and was giving a gift through literary components
So I sit and in zone with...my prophecies during this period
Illogical as the theories get.. had an out of body experience
Is it even that serious? As I got near an objective..
Piercing subjects with...everything in a different perspective
Nearing respect IF...only I'd confide in the majority
But unfortanetly, more importantly, I became a minority
During time accordingly... I ain't enter to improvise
I was energized, because my gender caused kids to generalize
And in the eyes of a few, but really none to mention
I dumbed it down, became futile for their comprehension
For some attention...but now, it triggers my dominance
I'm a figure, from some descent..for bigger, accomplishments
I lingered, for some distance..but now I'm back to master it
The tactics, wit, with massive hits craving, like barbaric savages
I'm above that average shit...far from being an embarassment
Respect's been a establishment...the torch, I ain't passing it
So try to capture this...so quiet, a miraculous silence
No bias, you see what you want through an imaginative iris
It's like a bacterial virus...alive, fucking with every fighter
An igniter...feeling so right, and touching every writer
But I'm a rider, and this makes it worth advancing..
The wait, the planning, the weight under these circumstances
So I re-surface, standing...to win, the birth, to try hard
Six years in the Pen, with words right behind bars

Metaphor..

Me, Myself, and I

This also had a picture, but I don't feel like posting it.

-Nique

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=243457

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...89#post3363089

whoa...whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa.. this was an excellent piece, the vocab on this was a 10/10. the multi's were also very good. i really havent seen this topic used before.. but i only have been on this site for a month lol.. getting back to the point, the structure was there, the flow was deff. there. this was a great piece.. i think it deserves to be in the OM HOF.

drop feed on the om in my sig if u get a chance, thanks. :)

This Is A Nice Piece.....the Vocab Painted The Scenery And The Imagery To A "t"...if This Was A Example Drop For People To Follow, I Would Disagree With The Choice...shit Got Me Steppin Up My Shit. Fuckin Nice....peace

Rise.

Nice......nice multies...vocab.....overall metas....and shit like that.........Probably one of the most overall displays of skill ive seen dropped in OM since Ive been back....nice....some more vvid imagery would of been nice...sometimes it seemed u sacrificed that for the multies, structure and vocab

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A six year bid doing an involuntary assignment
Sit in here steady locked in solitary confinement

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I like how you opened up with that. Then you started goin` away from it. In a way that seemed like u was doin` sumthin` different. Then brought it back in the end. Cuz when you think about it after readin` the last 2 lines. It`s like you never left that concept at all. Nah mean? lol prolly sounds confusin`. This was a nice drop. Keep doin` ur thing.

This was the dopest Om ive read for a while, the opening two lines just drew me into the verse and you kept my attention from beggining to end.
The concept was original so from the start the piece was gonna be good but unlike a lot of writers on OM you did justice to a really good concept.
Your vocab was very impressive you didnt overuse it to the point of me not being able to understand it so you get props for that. I hate pieces that have overused vocab it just makes the whole piece too crptic.
Your imagery was also impressive very dark and very descriptive you described a range of different emotions and that really shined through to me.
And to top it all off your flow was also nice, ive noticed that most dope Om topicals are nice imagery and vocab wise but the flow is normally weak. But in this piece the flow was real nice a lot of multies and internals in the verse and with the vocab you used in this piece that was real impressive.
Overall i cant complain or criticise fuck all in this piece, Concept, Story, Vocab, Imagery, Flow was all on point. Very good post i'll be looking out for your Om's from now on.
Return the feed on my new OM:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=244305

Nice job Nique... That was a great piece, there's not much I can say. Everything has been said. The vocab, flow, imagery was all perfect. You described everything flawlessly to the point I could see it happening in my head. Keep it up bro... AI Rep.

pz

Rise.

Aight Pimpett I finally got round to it and I'm glad I did now.
Solid OM. I did enjoy last weeks RSTL verse a lot more but this
still a good read. It was your opening 8 lines that got me wanting to read on
really. you gave a powerfull first person person account that
was vivid and drawn at the same time. You didn't give too much away
at the beginning which I found cool.

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A six year bid doing an involuntary assignment
Sit in here steady locked in solitary confinement
Sickness appeared, an act of expression, added obssesion
A practice, a section, became established during my adolesence
An action embellished, turned into seductive notes
Then a corruptive flow turned into a productive growth
So abrupt, and slow...and through a visionary atonement
Saw God..and was giving a gift through literary components

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I loved the corruptive growth line. That was illin.
For the piece as a whole I was diggin it but I just felt
ins ome places I'd read it before. . not literally
but in theory. Dope drop nether the less.

-Brix

:-)