damn girl......but ay i aint tryin ta pack my thread wit jus talkin in general so hit me up in a pmQuote:
Originally Posted by *Peaches*
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damn girl......but ay i aint tryin ta pack my thread wit jus talkin in general so hit me up in a pmQuote:
Originally Posted by *Peaches*
It's good you manage to write about shit like this cause some people would find it hard to do so you know. I'm not gonna talk about creativity or concept, seeing how this is a real life experience and clearly written from the heart.
The emotion was the best aspect without a doubt, told the story with real emotion pouring out of your lines. Imagery was not really there, more of an emotional piece. The flow was good even though some rhyming words didn't work such as daily and clearly or living and sinning, didn't work for me. Vocab could be improved on maybe but overall it was solid.
Keep it up!
thanks for the feed....uppin dis
Yo i liked diz piece a lot. Had a lot of emotion n errything. Sorry bout wut happened n all. Good luck wit dat. U got skills yo keep da OM's comin. Keep writin. 1
uppin 4 my hommie feedback on this
elemental...my homie, that was nice, deep, damn, i was feelin that....kinda like poetry 2....nice emotion...im kinda speechless 4 1nce homie...keep it up
ayo thanks fam
..................... wut da fuck u doin havin a baby at 16, lol jk, good shit, i can see u put alot of feeling into it, lettin everbody in yo personal lyfe, real ballsy, good flow, dont really like dat kinda structure but it still worked fo me, if u can, keep puttin out good shit like dis, but ull be strait if u dont, this a 1 hit wonder, good luck homie
uppin for some feedback plz
again uppin