10lines/bars
lets get it in by tonight, if your unable to, tomorows fine
good luck bro bro
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10lines/bars
lets get it in by tonight, if your unable to, tomorows fine
good luck bro bro
Check in in, I’ll get at it tonight. Let me get a few votes in real quick too
oh, we gotta vote on 2 battles?Quote:
Originally Posted by SpitZo
It’s about to get Krucial in this bitch...he must’ve bought his skills in a DIME STORE// he wasn’t “ready for these bars” like he did a crime he wasn’t ready to do the TIME FOR// calls himself “The Beast P4P” when we know he AINT THE BEST// he’s a “sick puppy,” the way he “tucks his tail” when it’s time to “FACE A VET”// he has an 8-12 record and he’s in the forums tryina GIVE IT A GO// dawg, you “shouldn’t be calling out” like “ur cell plan MINUTES WERE LOW”// your mom and bitch call me Nascar, I been known to RIDE HARD// how ironic he “underestimated me” when my lines are “over his head” like his name in the SIDE BAR// this battle was predetermined, with unlucky 13 in his name he was DESTINED TO MEET FATE// plus, his bars stink like Limburger, since he’s REPPIN THE CHEESE STATE//
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idk shit bout u, but ill have this fagget soakin in blood wen the matic smokin,
'Tom Brady', '40 throwin bullets', everytime i 'TouchDown' these 'Cannons blowing'.
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ya whole hood know u shaky, youd 'turn on the set'... like the 'show is starting',
ill have a 'pipe singing' at this 'snake in the hood'... like im 'Cobra Charming'.
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blow his stomach out wit the gage wen i break in his crib,
that mf plays God, 'adam n eve', 'bring the bitch out him' wen it 'takes out a rib'.
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i 'Master ya Mind', like how the 'CIA Control ya',
i keep a Blade, put the 'Butterfly Across His Mouth' like 'MK Ultra'.
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all that "Haarpin' u doin only to have your 'reign/rain' stopped,
'Taurus'(Torahs) 'filling his head with bullshit', 'better believe' u get ya 'brain washed.'
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why is this site so fuckin dead? 80+ views and no feedback on a battle, wtf
It’s about to get Krucial in this bitch...he must’ve bought his skills in a DIME STORE// he wasn’t “ready for these bars” like he did a crime he wasn’t ready to do the TIME FOR//
nice opening line
calls himself “The Beast P4P” when we know he AINT THE BEST// he’s a “sick puppy,” the way he “tucks his tail” when it’s time to “FACE A VET”//
lol cool
he has an 8-12 record and he’s in the forums tryina GIVE IT A GO// dawg, you “shouldn’t be calling out” like “ur cell plan MINUTES WERE LOW”//
awesome
your mom and bitch call me Nascar, I been known to RIDE HARD// how ironic he “underestimated me” when my lines are “over his head” like his name in the SIDE BAR//
meh not the strongest
this battle was predetermined, with unlucky 13 in his name he was DESTINED TO MEET FATE// plus, his bars stink like Limburger, since he’s REPPIN THE CHEESE STATE//
nice
vs
idk shit bout u, but ill have this fagget soakin in blood wen the matic smokin,
'Tom Brady', '40 throwin bullets', everytime i 'TouchDown' these 'Cannons blowing'.
decent
ya whole hood know u shaky, youd 'turn on the set'... like the 'show is starting',
ill have a 'pipe singing' at this 'snake in the hood'... like im 'Cobra Charming'.
? ok rhymes but i dont get it
blow his stomach out wit the gage wen i break in his crib,
that mf plays God, 'adam n eve', 'bring the bitch out him' wen it 'takes out a rib'.
lol creative line genius
i 'Master ya Mind', like how the 'CIA Control ya',
i keep a Blade, put the 'Butterfly Across His Mouth' like 'MK Ultra'.
vicious
all that "Haarpin' u doin only to have your 'reign/rain' stopped,
'Taurus'(Torahs) 'filling his head with bullshit', 'better believe' u get ya 'brain washed.'
nice
great battle both came with good lines
2 lines from krucial th1rt3en really stood out to me
+1 krucial th1rt3en
It’s about to get Krucial in this bitch...he must’ve bought his skills in a DIME STORE// he wasn’t “ready for these bars” like he did a crime he wasn’t ready to do the TIME FOR//
nice opening line
calls himself “The Beast P4P” when we know he AINT THE BEST// he’s a “sick puppy,” the way he “tucks his tail” when it’s time to “FACE A VET”//
lol cool
he has an 8-12 record and he’s in the forums tryina GIVE IT A GO// dawg, you “shouldn’t be calling out” like “ur cell plan MINUTES WERE LOW”//
awesome
your mom and bitch call me Nascar, I been known to RIDE HARD// how ironic he “underestimated me” when my lines are “over his head” like his name in the SIDE BAR//
meh not the strongest
this battle was predetermined, with unlucky 13 in his name he was DESTINED TO MEET FATE// plus, his bars stink like Limburger, since he’s REPPIN THE CHEESE STATE//
nice
vs
idk shit bout u, but ill have this fagget soakin in blood wen the matic smokin,
'Tom Brady', '40 throwin bullets', everytime i 'TouchDown' these 'Cannons blowing'.
decent
ya whole hood know u shaky, youd 'turn on the set'... like the 'show is starting',
ill have a 'pipe singing' at this 'snake in the hood'... like im 'Cobra Charming'.
? ok rhymes but i dont get it
blow his stomach out wit the gage wen i break in his crib,
that mf plays God, 'adam n eve', 'bring the bitch out him' wen it 'takes out a rib'.
lol creative line genius
i 'Master ya Mind', like how the 'CIA Control ya',
i keep a Blade, put the 'Butterfly Across His Mouth' like 'MK Ultra'.
vicious
all that "Haarpin' u doin only to have your 'reign/rain' stopped,
'Taurus'(Torahs) 'filling his head with bullshit', 'better believe' u get ya 'brain washed.'
nice
great battle both came with good lines
2 lines from krucial th1rt3en really stood out to me
+1 krucial th1rt3en
up...
nothin hard
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blow his stomach out wit the gage wen i break in his crib,
that mf plays God, 'adam n eve', 'bring the bitch out him' wen it 'takes out a rib'.
i 'Master ya Mind', like how the 'CIA Control ya',
i keep a Blade, put the 'Butterfly Across His Mouth' like 'MK Ultra'.
okish bars from 13 at the end but most of his punches were light work thug bars. Spitzo has the concept and idea of droppin a punchline, but all were pretty basic and nothing really attacked his opponent hard imo.
v. k13
Spitzo
It’s about to get Krucial in this bitch...he must’ve bought his skills in a DIME STORE//
he wasn’t “ready for these bars” like he did a crime he wasn’t ready to do the TIME FOR//
decent flow, the punch bar kinda ran away from the set up though, ie 20 syllables in the first line, 23 in the second.
The punch isn't original, the whole bars thing is played and the wording was kinda corny
calls himself “The Beast P4P” when we know he AINT THE BEST//
he’s a “sick puppy,” the way he “tucks his tail” when it’s time to “FACE A VET”//
Another unoriginal punch, the animal vet thing has definitely seen better days and better executions, you threaten to make him tuck his tail, most vet lines are about putting dogs to sleep etc
so it seems less hard. If you're using a common metaphor you need to bring it harder or more original than other people have.
he has an 8-12 record and he’s in the forums tryina GIVE IT A GO//
dawg, you “shouldn’t be calling out” like “ur cell plan MINUTES WERE LOW”//
Probably your best bar, the setup and punch link in, share a common theme & are more personal, the flows/ mutli's are better and even though i've seen many similar concepts it still works decently
The culmination of the above make a punch hit harder.
your mom and bitch call me Nascar, I been known to RIDE HARD//
how ironic he “underestimated me” when my lines are “over his head” like his name in the SIDE BAR//
first line is a throwaway, they could be calling you that because only rednecks like you, or the best nascar line I saw was about no right lines or never right etc.
second line, not original, but I respect the concept it's just that i've seen it plenty before.
the flow is also way off, 12 syllables in the 1st line and 27 in the 2nd, I'll let you off with ride hard side bar rhyming.
this battle was predetermined, with unlucky 13 in his name he was DESTINED TO MEET FATE//
plus, his bars stink like Limburger, since he’s REPPIN THE CHEESE STATE//
Good multi-coupling, still a little too long in terms of syllables, unless you throw a rhyme in the middle, turn it to a triplet etc
Limburger does stink, but the line is just as unfresh and not really hard hitting. I like how you tried to put 2 punches in the last bar to go out on a high though, neither really slammed.
Krucial Th1rt3en
idk shit bout u, but ill have this fagget soakin in blood wen the matic smokin,
'Tom Brady', '40 throwin bullets', everytime i 'TouchDown' these 'Cannons blowing'.
the qb bullet thing is kinda smack dvd/ url.
But, as TB is 40 that adds to the line and the triplets multi shows better flow and complexity, along with the way you worded it.
ya whole hood know u shaky, youd 'turn on the set'... like the 'show is starting',
ill have a 'pipe singing' at this 'snake in the hood'... like im 'Cobra Charming'.
decent first line, kept the theme into the second, so solid set up as well,
another gun line but sharper and more creative than your first. best line of your verse as it was the smartest and most cohesive.
blow his stomach out wit the gage wen i break in his crib,
that mf plays God, 'adam n eve', 'bring the bitch out him' wen it 'takes out a rib'.
not much with this line, i've seen too many flips of this but i guess even though you are still referencing guns you're changing the principle of each punch and trying yo be creative.
i 'Master ya Mind', like how the 'CIA Control ya',
i keep a Blade, put the 'Butterfly Across His Mouth' like 'MK Ultra'.
same theme set up to punch, i've seen the butterfly lines often, but at least i've not seen it with mkultra before
all that "Haarpin' u doin only to have your 'reign/rain' stopped,
'Taurus'(Torahs) 'filling his head with bullshit', 'better believe' u get ya 'brain washed.'
i get the tauras bullshit line, and any religion being bullshit, but i don't think there's a good enough link to make this work. I'm assuming that's the relevance of the reign/ rain line to brain washed? It just feels patchy and forced.
But sometimes you gotta try some shit
You both threw punches in every bar and showed some decent rhyme structure.
I vote Krucial because he showed better flow, rhyme structure and punches. He seemed like the more experienced battler, way more consistency and showed more skills and hunger.
I hope you take my criticism as constructive, as i took time out to give it in hopes that it helps.
Krucial wins by KO
Clos BG this because it's been open for a month