Failure..

its a shame..always
tryed to succeed, to fill up my needs..
and even though i fought and fought .. still i always concede
but i cant help it, noone is there too reach out
even when my heart is open, i still struggle with eich doubt
i cant comprehend, or understand whats wrong..
and my tears cant stay in, when i hear that song
its so intense, its eats me alive from inside
and noo im not facing it, if it happend i`ll act dumb & i`ll hide
even if it hurts my pride, cause nothing is really left anyway
and if i talk about solutions, its just a theft of cliche's
so yea, itll always be like this ...
my emotions sprayed.. but i always striked the bliss
failure runs thru my vains, always playing those shy games
that`ll just be me forever, trying to imply names for myself..
i tryed to but i was lacking in intensity being abnormally deficient
my own truths lieyed too me .. al it did was inefficient
feeling inadequate in amounts, feeling merchandise in a discount sale
my life on the streets, my heart and emotions ..proved me i always fail..
so fuck the prescribed norm, the ways ive been formed are an outrage
it might amaze you but .. i always feld like a disgrace..
feeling omnipotent, but without any go at all..
the weakening turned stronger ..and every step took me closer too fall.

word?

replyed too fgee, and to Baron mynd.

i liked the structure of this piece it flowed great
and the 4 rymes at the beginning cool start

yea this piece was nice, the beginning was really good and if you kept the same rhythm and flow the whole verse this shit would have been mind-numbing. 7/10

nice shit

haha@unique

that used be my name way back in the day on another site around '00 and such..

but nevertheless this was a pretty solid drop..flow was simplistic but not choppy...made some good points throughout your verse too...made me think a little bit..content was solid throughout the piece...overall this was nothing great, but nothing either..solid shit..

pz

its a shame..always
tryed to succeed, to fill up my needs..
and even though i fought and fought .. still i always concede


if you worded this better could of been real iLL, i think your flow was off in some cases maybe if you changed your structure but keep writing

oo1

alright, didn't really like some parts

Nice

this was pretty decent was feeling it...flow was a little bit off in parts but solid drop keep it up homie

Solid decent drop.. Nothing amazing about it, Rhyme sceme was tyte.
Overall decent peice, nothing really bad about it, just need up yo game in all aspects, But you still nice.

Str8.

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Originally Posted by .Nique.

nice shit

haha@unique

that used be my name way back in the day on another site around '00 and such..

but nevertheless this was a pretty solid drop..flow was simplistic but not choppy...made some good points throughout your verse too...made me think a little bit..content was solid throughout the piece...overall this was nothing great, but nothing either..solid shit..

pz

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havent wrote an OM in like 4 yrs maybe? haha.. i had this name since 00' aswell :^)

thnx, upper

yea that was ill son