RULES
Verses due Monday by midnight PST
Winner is FL Champ
1st rnd 4 bars min 5 bars max
2nd rnd 5 bars min 6 bars max
final round is max 20 bars
@GrimmZReaper
@Basic M
Printable View
RULES
Verses due Monday by midnight PST
Winner is FL Champ
1st rnd 4 bars min 5 bars max
2nd rnd 5 bars min 6 bars max
final round is max 20 bars
@GrimmZReaper
@Basic M
@GrimmZReaper my 20 is done
Nice shit.... I'll have shit done by Tommorow afternoon..
this dude is the biggest bitch, n he's always on simp shit
the way he killed fl with pride, i bet he'd want a billboard for winnin the special olympics
n i feel bad for ya dude, when u drop we know its a spoof
its funny how u color ur lines n still suck, i know 3rd graders better than u
these guns hit hard dawg, when i load up it means im preparin to kill'em
the way this sawed off'll split his face, u'd think his name was either terrance or phillip
get ready to face the pain, everything this joker writes is lame
the way spree sent this little man to the king, u'd think my name was lebron james
ur the biggest faggot alive dude, the league probably surprised u
i mean the way u ducked letterman, we know u didnt play sports in high school
n stop frontin like u dont see vets, ur always on some sly shit
the only time u've got tunnel vision, is when i point this shotgun right in ur eye bitch
now ur challenging a real threat, n i know u aint ready for the next level
not only do i have a leg up in this battle, im knocking u out with a booker T special
n the forum hates this guy, every loss this faggot sits n cries
the only time u made waves in the league, was when the vets bullied u n u said ur goodbyes
dont act all cocky as if ur pimpin, ur just a pedo thats on a mission
the last time he's seen a lotta open vag, was at his daughters cheerleading competition
u disrespect the board with those drops bitch, so please stop all the nonsense
those verses r such a slap to the face, u'd think the whole damn site was unconcious
Quote:
Originally Posted by GrimmZReaper
(for the record, I like my version better..... let's go base head......)Quote:
Originally Posted by Basic M
This basic run was ya last one, and it's close range…we size em up for the shot
You jackin’ the name..but u wont see this clown pop up again after windin’ up in a box
I left some dime thot waitin' so I could type bars, and after this lets make it done
this the first and last time I walk away from a bad bitch to go bag a basic one
You must be stoned cunt, …u get a light jab just so we clear I don’t play with infants
Sit ‘em down, with a left cross that’ll expose this pussy in a basic instinct
Lesnar instigated this in hopes you’d step it up ..but now u deterring the plot
That’s a broke nigga logic…u won’t get crack from base by simply stirring the pot:facepalm:
You practiced hard for this and still goin die, was it really worth the pain it meant though?
I mean, u jumped through ropes to end up in a church…better than Sherman helmsleys amen intro
You all hyped for a belt and im on madden keyin this while gettin' some head & yawnin'
bum ass getting pumped up to get slept on??…u coulda learned THAT making your bed his morning
You’ll get the Fist clenched or open hand, the *pause* deadly however Grimm use it
U want that HBK or Chinese love ballad?...either way…that’s some sweet chin music
After I knife u up, you’ll be a forgotten afterthought and that very time could hear
You literally go from the Blade to “ whatever happened to……..” like Wesley snipe career
don't Get outta bounds in ya bars and give a reason for you to get it on the strength
I’ll put him on his ass..6 feet over a base line, like its 3 niggaz on the bench
This your wake and you’re only here for dress rehearsal, bitch don’t go improvising
But if u do, that’s cool…its clear you been suited for death…we don’t even need emphasizing
- - - Updated - - -
that should say " bed this morning"
Quote:
Originally Posted by Basic M
Quote:
Originally Posted by GrimmZReaper
Boyz started off decent but botched the rest of his verse. Basic was consistent with direct bars that had more impact.
v-Basic
basic
n i feel bad for ya dude, when u drop we know its a spoof
its funny how u color ur lines n still suck, i know 3rd graders better than u
this could have hit harder bit was decent as is
now ur challenging a real threat, n i know u aint ready for the next level
not only do i have a leg up in this battle, im knocking u out with a booker T special
Thought this was cool
n the forum hates this guy, every loss this faggot sits n cries
the only time u made waves in the league, was when the vets bullied u n u said ur goodbyes
kinda played concept but lol was well executed
a couple of meh lines and some other ones that were throwaway bars, but overall a decent verse.
grimz
This basic run was ya last one, and it's close range…we size em up for the shot
You jackin’ the name..but u wont see this clown pop up again after windin’ up in a box
cool
I left some dime thot waitin' so I could type bars, and after this lets make it done
this the first and last time I walk away from a bad bitch to go bag a basic one
diggin it
Lesnar instigated this in hopes you’d step it up ..but now u deterring the plot
That’s a broke nigga logic…u won’t get crack from base by simply stirring the pot
this was ok
Wasn't a fan of anything else tbh.
This is close and hard for me to vote on, but I'm going to vote basic based on the fact he was more consistent. I had to base this on the lines I didnt quote, and I felt basic got this.
v/basic
Basic
Opener was alright, could've hit a little harder. Had a few bars here that got a chuckle out of me such as these 2.Quote:
ur the biggest faggot alive dude, the league probably surprised u
i mean the way u ducked letterman, we know u didnt play sports in high school
punches where good over all. Good structure. Personally felr like you ended pretty weak though.Quote:
now ur challenging a real threat, n i know u aint ready for the next level
not only do i have a leg up in this battle, im knocking u out with a booker T special
Grimmz
That shit was pretty funny lol, probably the best bar in your drop in my oppinion was funny and a decent punch. Wasn't feeling you're opener though, probably should've skipped that and started with that bar I quoted. Had some decent punches throughout but not as many funny parts. Structure was decent. Your closing bar was pretty dope in my oppinion. Overall not bad at all.Quote:
I left some dime thot waitin' so I could type bars, and after this lets make it done
this the first and last time I walk away from a bad bitch to go bag a basic one
After consideration and dissection of the bars the winner should be Grimmz by my inspection.
-VOTE
GrimmZReaper
Seeing as this is for all the marbles and I've had time to read some other reviews, as well as solidify my already formulated opinion, I've decided to vote on this battle differently than I would/have with any past battles that I can remember.
Each battle, depends on punches: that involve wordplay, emotion, and appeal to the reader, whether it be comedic, dramatic or personal. Also tho, battles rely on structure: which involve vocabulary, punctuation and word placement, whether it be smilies/metaphors, flips on phrases, or creative twists on colloquialisms etc etc.
This go round however, I wish to solely focus on each competitors misses. What most don't realize is that just as hard as a haymaker, or a well constructed Ill concept that's expertly delivered can impact a voter, a poorly conceptualized or misplaced wordplay or punch can have an adversely detrimental affect on a reader's opinion.
These are the lines that stood out to me, in what was an overall well done battle. These lines are what I decided my vote off of and I would recommend to RB that we begin to focus on more of what is done wrong in verses, versus what we perceive as so right or so dope at least in Champ , and Title/tourney matches because in my experience, there have been so many flips and tweaks to the same punches over the years that a well done one, gets more attention than necessary while the misses go mostly uncfontested at times.
So yea....
Basic M
this dude is the biggest bitch, n he's always on simp shit
the way he killed fl with pride, i bet he'd want a billboard for winnin the special olympics
^^im like, ok so if he on some simple shit, I see how u comparin that to a special cat in the olympics bein slow/simple etc but where's the setup besides the allusion to the punch. On top of that, this was an extremely dry attempt at a personal speaking to No specifics and not correlating to the olympics or your opponent besides a feeble attachment of the concept that they compete for pride over accolades. This was a hard miss for an opener in tourney competition.
these guns hit hard dawg, when i load up it means im preparin to kill'em
the way this sawed off'll split his face, u'd think his name was either terrance or phillip
^^Beside the fact that the setup doesn't lend any strength or further understanding of the punch i.e. no clarification of who Terrance and Phillip are, the gun play intensity or the impact of the bar loses sting due to the interior rhyme being lazily delivered. It feels like u wanted so badly to say the punch that everything else besides 'guns' and 'sawed off face' was filler. This is a hard miss after what seemed like a recovery with a decent personal punch.
get ready to face the pain, everything this joker writes is lame
the way spree sent this little man to the king, u'd think my name was lebron james
^^This is a critical miss mid verse, that stunted your momentum to the degree I felt you never recovered. Again, it's like you wanted to say the punch so badly that you omitted a setup, and a concept, besides calling yourself the King, and having interior rhymes with James as the punch. Really tho, this is not your Caliber of writing basic, no pun intended. Easily the worst bar of the battle. N it's mainly self glory, no real shot at your opponent which makes it worse.
dont act all cocky as if ur pimpin, ur just a pedo thats on a mission
the last time he's seen a lotta open vag, was at his daughters cheerleading competition
^^ when I said you never recovered, I could've counted myself wrong until you were going in the right direction only to end up dropping a flat line like this. Although the pedo line was a decent setup, you failed miserably to deliver on the open Vag punch with no relation to cheerleading or info on your opponent's 'cockiness' in that regard. Also, the rhyme scheme is forced and doesn't flow into or out of the previous or proceeding lines. Just a filler punch and a bad miss.
Vs
GrimmReapear
You must be stoned cunt, …u get a light jab just so we clear I don’t play with infants
Sit ‘em down, with a left cross that’ll expose this pussy in a basic instinct
^^you were all over the place with this punch, calling him a pussy, like Sharon Stone I think, then talking like he's a kid to you, then tryna make a basic instinct/killer instinct punch based off a one word setup of 'a left cross' ?? Nah bruh, slow it down, u talking sideways with no straight focus, this is not how to connect a punchline but this your second tourney in 2mons n somebody gotta tell you that?? Hard miss here.
You practiced hard for this and still goin die, was it really worth the pain it meant though?
I mean, u jumped through ropes to end up in a church…better than Sherman helmsleys amen intro
^^ to assume to your voters still watch choreographed fights wit men in tights was really your first mistake, but then you automatically assumed the correlation of your poor set up 'goin end up dead' with a perceived understanding that that would a church funeral in your uninspired punch. I don't know Sherman, don't wanna know him and don't care about his intro, but if u gone force some new bullshit down my throat at least make it exciting, comedic, or take a shot directly at your opponent, this was some filler bullshit and a hard full miss.
This your wake and you’re only here for dress rehearsal, bitch don’t go improvising
But if u do, that’s cool…its clear you been suited for death…we don’t even need emphasizing
^^ No but we do need emphasizing. like how is it that you'd use a wake/dres rehearsal to tell this man he's 'suited' for deandath and actually believe that to be a tourney worthy punchline that leaves a lasting andabd. It's your last chance to solidify a victory and you drop this?? Its saying a lot but it's not saying a lot at all. The true definition of a statement is punch .
So yea, I'm tired of talking. I did this much to inspire a full understanding of the way I perceive battles, but now I'm literally tired of texting this shit.
Decent battle overall really and I would consider it rather exceptional in standard competition just cause bar for bar yall delivered some dope attempts on concepts. I had to mention how the misses stood out tho in crowning a new tournament champion so that in the future we can hopefully avoid this played and or ludicrous shit we pass off as competitive. I as well, could take me own advice.
V/ Grimm aka BoyznBlack for 1 less miss in a close battle that could still go either way. Just depends on if they see how I see.
- - - Updated - - -
Seeing as this is for all the marbles and I've had time to read some other reviews, as well as solidify my already formulated opinion, I've decided to vote on this battle differently than I would/have with any past battles that I can remember.
Each battle, depends on punches: that involve wordplay, emotion, and appeal to the reader, whether it be comedic, dramatic or personal. Also tho, battles rely on structure: which involve vocabulary, punctuation and word placement, whether it be smilies/metaphors, flips on phrases, or creative twists on colloquialisms etc etc.
This go round however, I wish to solely focus on each competitors misses. What most don't realize is that just as hard as a haymaker, or a well constructed Ill concept that's expertly delivered can impact a voter, a poorly conceptualized or misplaced wordplay or punch can have an adversely detrimental affect on a reader's opinion.
These are the lines that stood out to me, in what was an overall well done battle. These lines are what I decided my vote off of and I would recommend to RB that we begin to focus on more of what is done wrong in verses, versus what we perceive as so right or so dope at least in Champ , and Title/tourney matches because in my experience, there have been so many flips and tweaks to the same punches over the years that a well done one, gets more attention than necessary while the misses go mostly uncfontested at times.
So yea....
Basic M
this dude is the biggest bitch, n he's always on simp shit
the way he killed fl with pride, i bet he'd want a billboard for winnin the special olympics
^^im like, ok so if he on some simple shit, I see how u comparin that to a special cat in the olympics bein slow/simple etc but where's the setup besides the allusion to the punch. On top of that, this was an extremely dry attempt at a personal speaking to No specifics and not correlating to the olympics or your opponent besides a feeble attachment of the concept that they compete for pride over accolades. This was a hard miss for an opener in tourney competition.
these guns hit hard dawg, when i load up it means im preparin to kill'em
the way this sawed off'll split his face, u'd think his name was either terrance or phillip
^^Beside the fact that the setup doesn't lend any strength or further understanding of the punch i.e. no clarification of who Terrance and Phillip are, the gun play intensity or the impact of the bar loses sting due to the interior rhyme being lazily delivered. It feels like u wanted so badly to say the punch that everything else besides 'guns' and 'sawed off face' was filler. This is a hard miss after what seemed like a recovery with a decent personal punch.
get ready to face the pain, everything this joker writes is lame
the way spree sent this little man to the king, u'd think my name was lebron james
^^This is a critical miss mid verse, that stunted your momentum to the degree I felt you never recovered. Again, it's like you wanted to say the punch so badly that you omitted a setup, and a concept, besides calling yourself the King, and having interior rhymes with James as the punch. Really tho, this is not your Caliber of writing basic, no pun intended. Easily the worst bar of the battle. N it's mainly self glory, no real shot at your opponent which makes it worse.
dont act all cocky as if ur pimpin, ur just a pedo thats on a mission
the last time he's seen a lotta open vag, was at his daughters cheerleading competition
^^ when I said you never recovered, I could've counted myself wrong until you were going in the right direction only to end up dropping a flat line like this. Although the pedo line was a decent setup, you failed miserably to deliver on the open Vag punch with no relation to cheerleading or info on your opponent's 'cockiness' in that regard. Also, the rhyme scheme is forced and doesn't flow into or out of the previous or proceeding lines. Just a filler punch and a bad miss.
Vs
GrimmReapear
You must be stoned cunt, …u get a light jab just so we clear I don’t play with infants
Sit ‘em down, with a left cross that’ll expose this pussy in a basic instinct
^^you were all over the place with this punch, calling him a pussy, like Sharon Stone I think, then talking like he's a kid to you, then tryna make a basic instinct/killer instinct punch based off a one word setup of 'a left cross' ?? Nah bruh, slow it down, u talking sideways with no straight focus, this is not how to connect a punchline but this your second tourney in 2mons n somebody gotta tell you that?? Hard miss here.
You practiced hard for this and still goin die, was it really worth the pain it meant though?
I mean, u jumped through ropes to end up in a church…better than Sherman helmsleys amen intro
^^ to assume to your voters still watch choreographed fights wit men in tights was really your first mistake, but then you automatically assumed the correlation of your poor set up 'goin end up dead' with a perceived understanding that that would a church funeral in your uninspired punch. I don't know Sherman, don't wanna know him and don't care about his intro, but if u gone force some new bullshit down my throat at least make it exciting, comedic, or take a shot directly at your opponent, this was some filler bullshit and a hard full miss.
This your wake and you’re only here for dress rehearsal, bitch don’t go improvising
But if u do, that’s cool…its clear you been suited for death…we don’t even need emphasizing
^^ No but we do need emphasizing. like how is it that you'd use a wake/dres rehearsal to tell this man he's 'suited' for deandath and actually believe that to be a tourney worthy punchline that leaves a lasting andabd. It's your last chance to solidify a victory and you drop this?? Its saying a lot but it's not saying a lot at all. The true definition of a statement is punch .
So yea, I'm tired of talking. I did this much to inspire a full understanding of the way I perceive battles, but now I'm literally tired of texting this shit.
Decent battle overall really and I would consider it rather exceptional in standard competition just cause bar for bar yall delivered some dope attempts on concepts. I had to mention how the misses stood out tho in crowning a new tournament champion so that in the future we can hopefully avoid this played and or ludicrous shit we pass off as competitive. I as well, could take me own advice.
V/ Grimm aka BoyznBlack for 1 less miss in a close battle that could still go either way. Just depends on if they see how I see.
@Bomb Bard @Cajetan @Allen Knight @Dia @Enbombz could yall drop a vote on this so I can get champ and contender matches up
- - - Updated - - -
@Bomb Bard @Cajetan @Allen Knight @Dia @Enbombz could yall drop a vote on this so I can get champ and contender matches up
- - - Updated - - -
2-2
Quote:
Originally Posted by Basic M
Overall BASIC M got this somewhat comfortably, due to Grim longwinded, often corny wording & metaphors. Cliches and goofy 'turn-a-phrase' bars then to be super played.Quote:
Originally Posted by GrimmZReaper
No free posting @Bomb Bard jus drop a vote
this dude is the biggest bitch, n he's always on simp shit
the way he killed fl with pride, i bet he'd want a billboard for winnin the special olympics
this was cool
n i feel bad for ya dude, when u drop we know its a spoof
its funny how u color ur lines n still suck, i know 3rd graders better than u
nice
these guns hit hard dawg, when i load up it means im preparin to kill'em
the way this sawed off'll split his face, u'd think his name was either terrance or phillip
Nice
get ready to face the pain, everything this joker writes is lame
the way spree sent this little man to the king, u'd think my name was lebron james
Nah. basic trash
ur the biggest faggot alive dude, the league probably surprised u
i mean the way u ducked letterman, we know u didnt play sports in high school
Played concept
n stop frontin like u dont see vets, ur always on some sly shit
the only time u've got tunnel vision, is when i point this shotgun right in ur eye bitch
this is cool. Feel like its played
now ur challenging a real threat, n i know u aint ready for the next level
not only do i have a leg up in this battle, im knocking u out with a booker T special
Dope...Seen this concept recently a different wat tho
n the forum hates this guy, every loss this faggot sits n cries
the only time u made waves in the league, was when the vets bullied u n u said ur goodbyes
Worded terrible...could have been dope
dont act all cocky as if ur pimpin, ur just a pedo thats on a mission
the last time he's seen a lotta open vag, was at his daughters cheerleading competition
Nah man
u disrespect the board with those drops bitch, so please stop all the nonsense
those verses r such a slap to the face, u'd think the whole damn site was unconcious
not feelin this either
vs
02/13/15 on RR
"you've done more than tasted failure....u cuddle with it at nights and EM-BRACE IT/
take it out on DATES, RAPE IT or at the least try to get to first, second and THIRD BASES"
Quote Originally Posted by Basic M View Post
08/29/17 vs Authentic
returnin vets r the worst case, n u suck in the worst way
not only did u meet expectations, u took it out for dinner n made it to 3rd base
(for the record, I like my version better..... let's go base head......)
This basic run was ya last one, and it's close range…we size em up for the shot
You jackin’ the name..but u wont see this clown pop up again after windin’ up in a box
Decent Opener
I left some dime thot waitin' so I could type bars, and after this lets make it done
this the first and last time I walk away from a bad bitch to go bag a basic one
Cool play..the set up was gay tho
You must be stoned cunt, …u get a light jab just so we clear I don’t play with infants
Sit ‘em down, with a left cross that’ll expose this pussy in a basic instinct
Nah
Lesnar instigated this in hopes you’d step it up ..but now u deterring the plot
That’s a broke nigga logic…u won’t get crack from base by simply stirring the pot
Dope
You practiced hard for this and still goin die, was it really worth the pain it meant though?
I mean, u jumped through ropes to end up in a church…better than Sherman helmsleys amen intro
Wording was brutal here.... Light bar
You all hyped for a belt and im on madden keyin this while gettin' some head & yawnin'
bum ass getting pumped up to get slept on??…u coulda learned THAT making your bed his morning
Wording again killed this bar. Thought the concept was dope
You’ll get the Fist clenched or open hand, the *pause* deadly however Grimm use it
U want that HBK or Chinese love ballad?...either way…that’s some sweet chin music
Miss....wasnt feeling this at all
After I knife u up, you’ll be a forgotten afterthought and that very time could hear
You literally go from the Blade to “ whatever happened to……..” like Wesley snipe career
Nah
don't Get outta bounds in ya bars and give a reason for you to get it on the strength
I’ll put him on his ass..6 feet over a base line, like its 3 niggaz on the bench
Liked this
This your wake and you’re only here for dress rehearsal, bitch don’t go improvising
But if u do, that’s cool…its clear you been suited for death…we don’t even need emphasizing
This was alright. not heat tho
This battle was one sided IMO. Grimm had some cool concepts that were killed by poor wording and some misses that were either played or just dumb. Basic had some decent bars and some played misses but He connected more here than grimm.
V/Basic
4-2 basic wins.
Closed