Corrupted Visions: Untangible Evil

I dropped feed on masta c, formula mc, mk usiki, deva, and camarac




Lord lend a hand end this plan release this demon out of me
My mind is being pirated how can that be?...I’m out of sea!
Full take over I'm a puppet no signs of life...flat line
Wack rhymes fabricated never made it...I lacked prime
The pain swells up my temples, heart pounding on my brain
I swear I've gone Ill mental, IQ is extinguished and slain
Stormy rain but an everlasting drought in terms of producing
An evil nuisance...not addictive...but something many abuses
Blown fuses irreplaceable tools...while it mocks at you
Holding eerie images...penetrating demise...& it locks a few
All veins flaring it's rare in cases but is has caused sleep
It rhyme reaps suffocates you like absent basslines in beats
A domesticated evil manufacturing cessation a pregnant pause
Rendering mind feeble there can't be a cure if there is no cause
Applause from the winning dark side...it's looking good for it
No chance for a heroic stand...nope...not by the looks of it
One last breath I take...as I inflate my chest...heaving
I blindly and wildly attack so fiercely...I aint believing
I fail...my eyes wide open...the look of a fighter shocked
But I realized I just survived...a sudden case of writer's block

uppin for some fucking feedback

replyin some feedbak.......

Good piece,but you did find it hard to find words that rhymed, but hey....ill anyway, jus a lil constructive crit

thought ya bar length was good.....flowed nicely, most of it...vocab was good....didnt really captivate me though, the topic....but executed ok...not a bad drop....pZ.......

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Originally posted by Vylent Stalker
replyin some feedbak.......

Good piece,but you did find it hard to find words that rhymed, but hey....ill anyway, jus a lil constructive crit

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fo real

/\those two guys are morons that is exactly how to not drop feed back

Yeah this was a pretty good drop here i thought....your structure was good in this, like it always is....your vocab was good as well....Flow in this was alright, stayed on point through out it, kinda lost me at a few points though but nothing real big...You had some good multies....overall good drop....keep at it.

upp

Nice lil drop here.
Structure was good.
Wordplay and flow was choppy.
I was feelin it though.
I saw some multies used in there.
8/10.
Keep em coming.
Return the favor.

thanks i appreciate it

yo this was a good Piece...Ya Flow was Nice stayed on point most of the way....Ya Structure was Good....The Topic was Nice I thought.....My Name Is MC uski not Mk usiki....Was short but that didn't mind me....the Lines were a Nice Length......All and all a hella good Drop....Peace Kuz (v) Corrupted Visions Represent

-{/]~{Ú§kÍ}~[\}-

Well...You sure made me look at you as a better topical writer. You have elevated alot. But that was a kinda cheesy ending,lol. You had some good use of vocab, and good complexity, This was a very good piece, very well done.

/\ thanks a lot man...lol i just thought the end would make some people laugh or something haha...feel free to hit up my other open mics if you feel the need;)

upp

now this was something i didnt expect...
i knew you would end it like that....you have good influences

the imagry here was good, definetly your best aspect...flow was pretty easy to follow

keep up the good work

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Originally posted by ...::ËMËRGË::...
upp

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nice shit dawg

/\should be banned...reply with better feed you piece of fucking shit

this was a well structered piece had nice wordplay and some creative thoughts, the flow was alright i liked the topic...good read

you forgot to poll vote on my battle...can you hit it up weith it thanks

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...5&pagenumber=3

thanks...done

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Originally posted by ...::ËMËRGË::...
thanks...done

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Originally posted by ...::ËMËRGË::...

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Originally posted by SkiddZ
This was a very good piece, very well done.

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upp muther fuckers!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

well I can't really say much for the topic it din't really grasp my interest as much as I thought it would but anyways. your flow was a lil bit choppy to me it seemed it was fell of juss a lil bit but nuttin big. you had good vocab and a really good structure and nice multi's and u had a good rhyme scheme and some decent wordplay. overall nice piece bro. keep up. peace.

u had nice multis and it flowed nicely
ur vocab was good and your structure
ok wordplay
keep droppin!
8.5/10

intresting and unusual thats what i like about it. keep it up

your the worst fucka emcee ever...worst piece..









































lol just playin

This was very good...Vocab was strong and the imagery was pretty good...best line

One last breath I take...as I inflate my chest...heaving
I blindly and wildly attack so fiercely...I aint believing

Good job dawg..

8/10.

Yeah this was a pretty good drop here i thought....your structure was good in this, like it always is....your vocab was good as well....Flow in this was alright, stayed on point through out it, kinda lost me at a few points though but nothing real big...You had some good multies....overall good drop....keep at it.

Flow wuz nice, Part of the verse didnt really fit the ending , decent wordplay, Keep spittin tho the flow wuz nice most of the way. thanks for the look.

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Originally posted by Dez
Yeah this was a pretty good drop here i thought....your structure was good in this, like it always is....your vocab was good as well....Flow in this was alright, stayed on point through out it, kinda lost me at a few points though but nothing real big...You had some good multies....overall good drop....keep at it.

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nice drop, multis, flow, vocab were all there, uhh not much more i can say, good lines, though the ending wasnt that cheesey

Flowed good this piece, .. nice immagery, ..vocab wa son pint were it needed, to be..enjoyed this read, .. keep it up man -= )

man what can I say liked this a lot, nice piece it's the first one I read from you
very very nice..nothing seemed forced or overused...I didnt find any flaws so
I can't go on writing much longer..but I did enjoy..Props