topic: 3 Wishes To Save The World
Due date: dec 12
Voting ends: dec 15th
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topic: 3 Wishes To Save The World
Due date: dec 12
Voting ends: dec 15th
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im more in then porn movies...
...oh yeah thats cool.
If do you show, Ill post a real verse
but theres less than an hour left,so
If I had 3 Wishes to save the world they be
Banannas.......................................... .......G
im dropping 20 lines right now
A World With Blurred Clairty... I Cause A Revelation
First Wish For Humanity...I Cease All Temptations
Rid The World Of Drugs...Causing Nothing But Strife
Get Them CLean And Back...To When They Enjoyed Life
Prostitution Goes Too...At Least Rid Of The Diseases
So People Live Cleanly... & Sexuality Can't Be Mistreated
& People Control Their Lives...No Addiction To Live Under
So, My Second Wish Is...No One Lives A Life Of Hunger
Everyone Is Full...No Reason For People On The Street
To Beg Strangers For Change...Simply So They Can Eat
No Children Will Slowly Shrivel...Immune Always Depleting
Children Slaving In Sweat Shops...And Still Never Eating
Familys Trying Their Best To Live...But Failing In The End
Digestion Systems Like A Sieve..Pain We Cant Comprehend
My Third Wish Is Sacred...Its So Close Yet So Far From Me
I Dont Wish No More War...I Wish For World Harmony
For People To See Their Errors...And To Forgive And Forget
Stop Bombing And Causing Terror...And Give All Respect
Simple Wishes, Wont Happen...But I Still Dare To Hope
Now You See How The World Is...Under A Microscope
Here we are at press conference with the CEO of; shhhh shhhh it's starting
*clears throat* Ladies and gentlemen thanks for coming
There are some pressing issues we should be discussing
It's getting cold outside, but don't worry about the hobos
Remember you're nobody unless u have designer clothes
You know your not complete, we've all felt the emptyness
Fill the void.........with the finest polymers of cotton fabrics
The girls will come and feel your material, u'll be flattered
Sure the masses ears pop, but.....only popularity matters
Profit's a prophet and yea we'll do anything to please her
When your with us you've got in made.........In Indonesia
Mona lisa smile comes with free trial......please believe us
Consult a ditionary...........A and F is even ahead of Jesus
What's that you ask,... 'how do I sleep at night anyway?'
Under my company you call home.................the U.S. of A.
Get It? We own you! so go and empty your wallets quick
...We can be your father, your mother and your therapist
So make sure to keep us in mind this time at Christmas
3 Wishes to save the world...........Abercrombie and Fitch
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damn....this was close, i lyked a2z ideas....but walter placed a nyce twist on that ish, decent rhyming by both...tha breakdown:
a2z- rhyme scheme: 7, flow: 6.5, story: 8, total: 21.5
walter wall- rhyme scheme: 7.5, flow: 7.5, story: 7.5, total: 22.5
walter wall barely took this one, his flow and rhyme scheme helped out a lot,
my vote goes to Walter Wall
good battle fellaz, no hard feelins, may tha best man win, and peep my battle, peace, 1
eh yo, dont forget to peep my battle
wow very close Topical Battle A2Z Your verse was very well thought out it flowed very well and was good with tha words and Ryhmesceme was jus good through out Walter Your verse was very good as well but i feel your structure was a lil weird to me maybe cause i aint that used to voting on Topcial battles but i Felt A2z was better on his thas my opnion do wat you will with it Vote= A2z
Dont forgot to look at mine and vot eup on mine
'Walter Your verse was very good as well but i feel your structure was a lil weird to me'
Our structure was exactly the same
'it flowed very well and was good with tha words'
did you even read the verses?
ure vote should be thrown out
wow those were two excellent verses. .
the takes on the subject are the only thing that swayed me towards walter though. a2z explained out the problems, while walter acted as though he was the people with the problems. for example. .
a2z:
Rid The World Of Drugs...Causing Nothing But Strife
Get Them CLean And Back...To When They Enjoyed Life
^his verse goes through some things and tries to explain how to better the world.
walter:
Under my company you call home.................the U.S. of A.
Get It? We own you! so go and empty your wallets quick
walter throughout his verse acted like he was the people with the problems. thats very original. you both did a good job. but that was the deciding factor for me.
A2Z came w/ a played concept...flow was nice,
...Good verse...just lacked on originality...Walter's
was original...and creative...just a better all round verse
Nice job boyo's
V. Walter...
Pz
yes i did read the verse dumbass and thas how i saw it like i said its my opnion on how i read tha shit man damn
Throwing my two cents towards Walter Wall...
That was damn inventive and damn creative, man.
I felt A2Z's, I really did...
But I've felt it before.
That message pops up every year at this time.
I wrote an Open Mic similar to it last week.
So did Camarac.
But that corporation twist Walter put on this was very cool and original and I have to throw that way because I was very impressed.
Walter Wall
Peace