Merry Christ Missed

Merry Christmas? fuck that.. another holiday on my shit list
But before you judge me, let me tell you why it is this ^^
everything is twisted.. the true meaning is non-existant
with all the greed & gifts.. Jesus has turned up missing
who gave us the rite to replace Christ w/ a tree & lights
& a fat guy in a red suit who uses reigndeer for flight
why is it alright, to believe in that ^^ but not in the truth
& only look up to the heavens when Santa is on the roof
who said it was ok to display this behavior to the youth
leaving them thinking the almighty is a bearded man in boots
Look.. don't think im a religious freak, thats not the case
i just hate that people forget why we have this holiday
Originally.. it was a way to celebrate the date of his birth
but somewhere along the way we played with its worth
it has been turned.. into a marketing plan targetting buyers
to purchase material items that make our wallets lighter
the entire economy is dudes in business suits w/ ties trying
to get a strangle hold on every cent by tieing our budgets tighter
but rather than struggle & fight em.. we go shopping
its been happening for so long & showing no signs of stopping
so fuck it ...go get your "Merry Christmas" on & popping
hopping from house to house to see how many presents you get
& never let HIS presence effect your ability to collect
then just forget to remember your believes & what you have faith in....

TEAR THE WRAPPING PAPER
& say "O MY GOD!!" when you think your GIFTS are amazing

Im Not Saying Im Better Than This...
I Love To Get Gifts Just Like The Rest Of You..
I Just Think We Need To Celebrate The Real Meaning More
Than The Materialistic Aspect Of Christmas...

Bah Humbug You Fucks!!!!

Good drop Scrooge lol. i enjoyed it a thought the meaning is one we all shud think about.

''Originally.. it was a way to celebrate the date of his birth
but somewhere along the way we played with its worth''
this stuck out for me, very true.

nice structure and wordplay.
keep doin ur thing.

I liked it man. good flow,vocab and to be honest a great topic.
i agree. im not religous but how the hell did we get from the bith of christ to fat ass red suited man the b and e's your house.lol.

nicely done

yo man i was feeling this piece good vocab and wordplay and topic like e lude said and i feel that way too dog the true meaning of Christmas is mistaken

it was a nice piece..followed the planned outline from the go n flowed well in most parts,i jus found myself driftin n having to pick the flow up again sumtimes but you redeamed it by vast amount of effort,storyline n vocab which made the piece very nice to read..

good overall piece=9/10

Uppin

tight drop man. im glad i read this. i have to agree on that
man. some people get too caught up into the materialistic
world. and im glad you admit that your not too different
from anyone else. takes a real man to admit it. i enjoyed the
meaning as well as the way it was written. the flow was great.
the way it was done was nice too. i could jus hear it. nicely
stated. much props. tight. keep spitting.
peace

ps. check out my thread if you have time
1 love, 1 God, 1 way...

nice drop that was tight

reply to three open mics, and post links to your replies in this thread, or it gets deleted.
thanks

Wow... Here we go again... I just had this discussion with Edicius..

I was feeling this shit ! On the real homie you got mad skills,keep that shit up.

Thanks

Nice drop, Evolve...

Great flow...

Good message.

Very similar to a piece I'm dropping today.

Ya coulda chilled on the anger some, but I guess if ya feeling it, flow with it.

Decent vocab, not much wordplay, if any.

Straight forward rant about what X-mas has become...

Cool.

8.25/10

i been surfing this website 4 a while now an seen talent and seen wackness lol. but this was good, yo i aint got anyfin bad 2say bro accept your words writing and yo talent rising yo, this was off the hook

NIce drop-evolve.....

shyt wus hott,i feel what ur sayin but hey fucc it nuttin is better den free shyt!!..lol....feel me but ne way nice piece flow wus good,dat wus good topic u chose!........now ppl stop sleepin n give dis mad da feedbacc he deserves!!.......0n3

mad=man!....srry i slipped!!

This wasnt bad .. flow came off on a couple of occasions and
threw me slightly .. imagery was decent, writers voice wasnt
as strong as id of liked it to of been. Really grasp hold of what
you want to say and then go from there .. work with it .. don't
sacrifice the content for a lack of rhyming words .. if you can't
get one to fit - try rewording it or re-phrasing the sentence ..
cause thats what i felt held you back with this piece, wording.
Also .. you seemed to stick to the same rhyming pattern, i'd
of liked you to switch up up occasionally, just something to ..
keep the reader interested .. hold their attention more .. like i
said, the flow to this wasn't bad, but with more multi's and a
few internals, you could liven this piece up easily .. all in all it
wasn't bad though, a decent read .. a nice topic to drop to actually .. although, i hated all the ^^ and stuff, dont do that in open mics man .. its pointless. Even in text it seems stupid, haha .. nice meaning beyond it though, even though you did come across scrooge like at the end. = )


Woah .. long reply. My bad.

Reply to my RSTL sheiiiiiiiiiiit ..

Pz

Damn Cam... That Is The Best Reply I've Ever Gotten...

I Will Work On It

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Originally posted by E-Lude
I liked it man. good flow,vocab and to be honest a great topic.
i agree. im not religous but how the hell did we get from the bith of christ to fat ass red suited man the b and e's your house.lol.

nicely done

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i agree with that

it was hot dog.. yo i felt it

Yo man that was tight,
excellent wordplay, superb flow
and the reflection on society! now that was smart,
man i'm religious and i thought i new it all
and fogot the real meaning of christmas.
Damn

keep it up
overall piece it's gotta be 10/10

Nyce drop man.. i feel wot your sayin'
but.. Christmas gets worse as you get older and less about the material stuff ya kno, shit i dont even ask for nothin no more...i just like seein my fam.

plus i aint even close to believin in Jesus, is the real reason for christmas really real ??

its tru that Christmas is gettin outta hand though...

peace

Damn 'Volve ... Dope ass concept ... The title fit this verse dopely ... I was vibin' wit it already when I read the title ... LoL ... So much truth was said in here man ... So much stuff that most people try to turn away from believin' in and such ... And it's so true that soooo many people don't know why we even have christmas anymore ... Kinda similar to Easter ... Nah mean? And it's dope to see someone write about it ... So U get props off the jump for that alone ... Now onto the literal aspect of the piece ... I felt U did a dope job writin' this ... Could see that thought and time and feelings were put into it ... Every line went well wit this piece ... I thought the flow of it as a whole was pretty much on lock ... Didn't really find it fallin' off because of the multi's that U used ... There were many quotables tossed in here ... But ... I always have my favorite ...

"who gave us the rite to replace Christ w/ a tree & lights"

When I seen that I was like damn ... Amazin' ... Not so much cuz it was unexpected but because of how true it is ... Dope drop here man in all aspects ... Dope meanin' behind it ... Keep doin' your thing ... Not much else I can say ... Peace

Nice Nice piece...Like Cam had said, your flow fell off in a few places, the verse seemed to lose alot of interest. You had a unique topic toward Christmas, and what it is about, but if you used different vocabulary and some different wording to maybe improve on the imagery, this would've been a great piece. To me, that is what held it back, all your basics were there, but you seemed to lose my interest and you seemed to lose focus of the topic. Remember that you can't lose the big picture of the topic, by throwing in a few words to rhyme, because then that takes off the piece. Good Drop.

Appreciate The Feedback

Great meaning Evolve..
Everything I've said about Christmas was in this piece..
Your vocab could have been enhanced a little bit with more complexity, but it flowed pretty well... Nice multis and good work mixing your emotions into the piece... Overall I give it 8/10..

Nice piece Evolve..

Thanks... Appreciated Man

was a good piece structure was good flow was good wordplay ight vocab good punches ok multis ok over all 6/10

WOW ... Coming From You ^^^ That Means ALOT

Evolve slick writing i feel you one hundred percent.The whole us-of-a is becoming one nation against god. Its alright that the school system posts up pictures of a fat red suited pagan god other wise known as fucking santa clause. but you get picketed if you put up a copy of the ten commandments. And the supreme court signs that no longer can children say one nation under god in the pledge of allegience. To thank god on national television has become profanity on awards shows but you have fucking homos and graphic sex scenes on the next channel. shits gone to far never lose your anger on this topic because its one we should all b pissed off about. sorry im off my soap box now. plz check out my pz wisdom(posted it awhile ago might b buried) or a newer post second thoughts. Ok pz and luv.

damn, this was nice. Flow was on point, When you was dissin santa, that was funny as shit. You opened good and ended good. Just exactly what I expected from you Evolve. You made a point in this piece. So nobody can touch you for sayin you're ungrateful. keep spittin that hot shit Evolve. Uppin for this nigga

wow, nice job evolve. .
that was a good piece, and it brought a strong message. i also felt your vocab could have been better though.
but im still nominating this for legends. we need it there :)

LOL ^^ i dont think it is legend material... but thanks anyway

nice drop and very true....Never expected you to write this..I've thought the same way many of times...i liked it new and original thoughts...

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...hmm...creative...LOL...good flow...LOL...good topic...LOL...can't wait for your EASTER flow....LOL

Dont Ever Reply To Any Thing I Drop On This Site Ever Again^^^^

Excuse me for not typing much Evolve, but I have a splint and a tetnis shot from an accident in my shop class. Anyways, this piece was dope as fuck. I loved it, and being a faithful Christian I agree 150% with what you were saying. Multis were nice, flow was consistent, vocab isn't very important in my opinion but you used the right words where you needed it. The topic was nice to work with and it really drew my attention. I only wish it was a bit longer, but you really covered all the nessecary issues revolving around the topic. Overall this was an ill drop my man, and I'd love to collab with you sometime.

Much Appreciated Aisle... Peace