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Post Today R Tommorrow Morning...So Thats Enough Time For Both Of Us Since We Both Doing Something Right Now
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8-15 Lines
Regular Rules Apply No Crew Votes etc...
Checks In...
Post Today R Tommorrow Morning...So Thats Enough Time For Both Of Us Since We Both Doing Something Right Now
checking in i got like 20 mins.............................................. .............................
peace
My Verse:
Harmless wordz u've just put urself on ur death bed/
Challenging me? Thats like making a man to live witout a head/
Dawg, my words are known to be blunt--tight-and-blatant/
Beatin me? u aint got a chance in hell like rollin dice-wit-satan/
Bitch, u dont know what u got into when u wanted to battle me and stepped into-this-shit/
My lyrics are unable to beat, like an impotent-dick/
If u dont know who i am dawg-then u've hardly-heard/
Go ahead and spit sumthin,mine will just rip apart-ya-verse/
I'll call u marijuana, and jus spark-the-herbs/
And u could scribble over my rhymes, jus to mark-my-words/
But hey i aint a chick, and i dont lick pussy, but i can get this bitch-to-shiver/
U aint takin this loss? u must be in 'da-nile'(denial) like-the-river//
I can bust-and-gloat cause ur stuffs-a-joke/
Ure like weed cause ur goin up in a puff-of-smoke/
peace
Aiight Yo..I Spit Something Right Now Since yoU Posted Today::
Be Up In A Couple.............................
100 text..........
First Battle In Like 4 Months:
*Dusting Key Board Off*
:thumbup:
I Smoke Herbs: So Bitch Dont Act Like Whitney: Go Head An Exhale...
Like Santa Helpaz:
Being Slow Learners: We All Know Retarded Students Dont wRap Well...
Get-Well:
But Shit Makes Me Sick: How Kids Text: And Really Think They Good..
Tell The Truth Kid: Aint No Real Emcee Ever Came From Ya Hood...
The Rap Jesus?:
Ya Verse Was Good But: I Just Miss DA-Part When Ya Flowed...
The Only High Light Of Ya Text Career: Is The Part Were It Glowed...(Screen Name)
Swear He Bold:
Like Withdrawing Bucks(Givin It To Em): Nigga Ya Get Killed A Loan...(Alone)
Once An Elevating Herb: But That Shit Ended When I Mowed My Lawn...
You Fiddiling Pawn: Ill Leave Ya Chess In Pieces: With One Move: Through?...
At The Start I Gave You A Thumbs Up: But Now Im Leaving With A :thefinger Fuck You...
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Rap Jesus Profile::
Birthday April 5, 1987
Age 13? *You'll Be 16 Not 13
Crew By Myself!
Biography Love to rap
Location Guyana (Emcees home)! Toughest wiggas/ niggas alive!!
Interests Music, sports
Occupation Student
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peace
yo structure of both was wack as hell, but i gotta vote for someone, violent took it with some better wordplay............
............................ take me on and i'll give ya a lesson in rap and humiliation in one battle.....................my vote violent
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peace
Yall..need ta vote.....i dun voted on more than 3 battles in elevated....
Uppppppppps..........
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opening - tie
flow - violent wordz
struct - neither
punches - voilent wordz
wordplay - violent wordz
metas - rap jesus
closing - violent wordz(very creative with the thumbs up and fuck u)
my vote - violent wordz
can u please return the favor and hit up the 2 battles in my sig with an honest vote....thanks alot
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peace
yo, i dropped an honest vote, now return the favor,,,,,,,,,,,,
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=94506
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=94982
thanks dudes
:thumbsup
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opener - gzuz...words was played
closer - words...gzuz was weak
punches - words
personals - words
wordplay - gzuz
overal - wordz
wordz stop doing that dumb red font shit it hurts people's eyes
yes don't ever post a verse in all red again
and Jesus....fix your structure
now:
Wordplay: Wordz
Punches: tie
worth reading: both were hard on the eyes
closer: wordz
Vote: VW
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Aight, here's tha breakdown:
Opener: violent
Punches: jesus
Originality/Creativity: jesus
Best Punch: jesus "Dawg, my words are known to be blunt--tight-and-blatant/
Beatin me? u aint got a chance in hell like rollin dice-wit-satan/"
Closer: violent
Vote = jesus (close though)
nice battle
hit my shit up w/ an honest vote
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damn this battle was shit...lol....VW had some creativity and better punches.....RJ had ok punches and some really really weak wordplay...i suggest that RJ thinks more creatively...and VW fixes his shit....here's a breakdown for u two..
BREAKDOWN
Multis - RJ
Metas - VW
Wordplay - Tie
RhymeScheme - VW
Structure - RJ (barely)
Punches - VW
Personals - VW (had a few decent ones [ glow line ])
Creativity - VW
Complexity - VW
Overall - VW gets this with just better hits.....ok read from u both...no hate...just a vote..
peace
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