Influence -FINAL-

Influence
Written By: ELEETE


Verse 1
ayo
ive been livin in a state where my mental imbalance is rage//
before the stage, before the pen even touches the page//
mind full of confusion, maybe its all an illusion//
like a shock of elctromagnetic intrusion//
abusin.....an manipulating words//
simulatin swords to decapitate the chords//
of instrumentals, its the essence and fundamentals//
done before the bass ever even met the treble//
the level is at even a higher state//
sit back enjoy the show an watch it escalate//
you have to elevate, in order to be great//
but in this state of mind you could never tolerate//
explode on the microphone, and let yourself go//
the desire to know electric flow has grown//
so take a lesson from the greatest emcees//
an you'll see an agree what im trying to achieve//


Chorus:

so what is it
what makes hip hop what it is//
this lifestyle we live
has so many differences//
from rock & r&b an even alternative//
the choice is yours
you make it what it is//


Verse 2
you see hip hop is somethin i continue striving for//
so i stack lines that rhyme an keep dispensing metaphores//
i said before you have to walk through the open gate//
and let fate handle all the decisions to be made//
then strap yo headphones and let go//
let lyrical influence take control an give release to your soul//
then soon after i promise you you'll find the source//
throw your name out on the streets an let your lyrics take its course//
explore the core of your mind and you'll find//
poetry an lyrics become a balance an align//
never too blind to try to understand//
the intlligence an lyrical artisticness of man//
expand yo vocabulary an watch as results may vary//
stand out, out in the crowd an be less than ordinary//
you'll burn an bury any emcee into the ground//
cmon an grab the mic an let loose to da sound//


Chorus

so what is it
what makes hip hop what it is//
this lifestyle we live
has so many differences//
from rock & r&b an even alternative//
the choice is yours
you make it what it is//


Verse 3
Tupac an BIG, Run-DMC an Rakim//
Jay-Z, Nas,Dr. Dre an Eminem//
are just the stems of the tree hip hop holds//
countless emcees, infinite stories untold//
watch it unfold an unravel before your eyes//
ignite the fire that you been feelin inside//
in orda to spit lyrics so otha people can hear it//
dont let anyone bring you down so fuck critics//
just hit it insert cause an effect//
ingest the language an disect the dialect//
an infect the minds of those who listen//
an envision the image of musical division//
cause in life the greatest things i ever had//
were 2 things...a pen an a pad//
see it all makes sense so dont tense//
this is hip hop...........
this is my influence//




Chorus

so what is it
what makes hip hop what it is//
this lifestyle we live
has so many differences//
from rock & r&b an even alternative//
the choice is yours
you make it what it is//

so what is it
what makes hip hop what it is//
this lifestyle we live
has so many differences//
from rock & r&b an even alternative//
the choice is yours
you make it what it is//

its hip hop.........

yo its prettyphat u need a beat to record ove homeboy u can get royaltee free beats from mp3.com all u need then is a studio aight homey o an all u need to do is give the beat auther credits
im out peace

YO NO DOUBT TWIN YOU CAME ILL ON THIS PEACE

yo thanks for the input both of you!! uppin!!

nice..........but watch ya structure on the page, hard to read but good multi'z used

hmm...


flow-work on the structure...the structure was not good which took away from the quality of your multi's...just work on putting the verse together and u shall be fine...


concept- eh...influence ey....i think it fell off topic at times...but thats me...maybe u wrote something personal that other people wont understand...just a little work and focus....aight tough

lyrically-this was kinda basic...u came with the same super-lyrical shit that a lot of emcees tryna be serious come with...u know what i mean? anyway...work on creativity and complexity....eventually words will flow in easier for u....

overall this was kinda aight...not too good or too bad...good for noob....keep it up..thanx for the remarks on my shit....late...

all in all it was good, some thing you need to work on might be your rytheme, the begining was alright with its transitions but keeping the same rytheme would make it better. good job though

i agree this was an ill drop....well good anyways.....again i agree the structure aint too good.....but goos work....Pz

yo I was feelin this, good drop, some encouragement for those that still dream to make it... positive in many ways

good job on flow, structure

maybe a couple lines were filler, but not much, anyway definitely a worthy read

peace

keep that input comin.... thanks for all yall remarks.....

good peice i was feelin it.. though u need some work on your structure..some lines were hard to read..anyway i rate this a 7.5/10

return the favor: check my open Mic's

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95506


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95629

that was straight, could have been alittle shorter and a little more creative

you need to reply to three open mics and post links to your replies in this thread, or it gets deleted.
thanks.

Uppin more feedback plz. Rearranged the structure, lemme know what you think. Thank you to all that gave feedback. Your words are appreciated!

good drop,will be nice laced to a good beat,nice use of multies,descent hook and good feelin and emotion came through with nice imagery.

Hit Mine Up I U Can

Peace

Yo thanks! keep it comin!

this will be a nice audio..but as a text..it was lacking...when you get the audio up..let me know..

Pretty nice. I liked your latest two more but this was still a nice piece. Nice flow and everything. The thirt verse was my favorite. Keep up the good work.

Illest lines:
Tupac an BIG, Run-DMC an Rakim//
Jay-Z, Nas,Dr. Dre an Eminem//
are just the stems of the tree hip hop holds//
countless emcees, infinite stories untold//