Alright 10 lines
no stupid/dr/crew votees blah blah blah ill spit first gimme a minute .
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Alright 10 lines
no stupid/dr/crew votees blah blah blah ill spit first gimme a minute .
This fake's spine gets cracked and shattered, then gets his head swelled
only time this wankstas holdin 'heat' is when he's in the kitchen wit egg 'shells'!/
Your breath smells... no wonder why your 'spits stink'
I eat JDeaZy too easy, leave his cut up like an ice rink/
I hope you dont act gangsta, claimin you light snubs
When this home-bound nerd is just dreamin about Fight Club/
I write love thats why I get it, I write true thats why you sweat it
You prewrite your verse, then when its posted hit edit/
Cuz you cant freestyle kid, you dont know how or what to do
So just get down on both knees and just be you!/
Look, I took that pussy and now this bitch is shook//
I 'cum' harder in my sleep than this weak ho's whole hook//
'wet dreams' about DeaZ got ya mind clouded -disturbed//
ya 'mind-a-blur' like retatred kids at lunch you 'get served'//
wit'a "L" (loss) like you hit tha dope man's spot -wrong//
you on ya hands and knees 'fuckin' where you belong//
She claims she's a dime when she really only put 2-cents-in//
When I spit, you like your herpes, feelin' "pain and distension"//
convincin' inventions, I'm a plane to ya 'World Trade" -I'm comin' in//
You write 'love' -DeaZ nutz-on-ya-chin, like wit' ya 'X' you got slapped again//
hey ya'll, uppin for votez here. Some input would be nice too, but show tha support on this one...
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Surgeonverge surgin' up
from tha depths of tha abyss
Fathomless depth within tha mind
Leavin' in tha wake a straight lyrical bind
Find my rhymes crushin' wit' neural heat ~blah blah blah
VOTE!!
opening - JD
punches - Mary J
flow - Mary J
personals - neither
closing - Mary J
Mary J = 3/5
JD = 1/5
overall - Mary Jane won this battle....
return the favor and hit this up wit an honest vote
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=93062
ite a lot of respect to jd battlin mary! but mary took this one ive seen sum of her stuff about a month ago, and shes elevated a lot, that shit then was decent! pretty good for a newb but u may not b a newb, this site is full of cheats!......................................pz my bad for free posting!
flow=mj
structure=mj
openin=tie
closin=tie
vocab=jd
both came hard... i think mj came a lil harder but it was a really close battle... i think mj's was alot easier to read and had a way better flow...
vote goes to=mj ...........close battle tho
naw jd got this.............................................. .................................................. .........
J*KIDD explain your vote or have it removed, i remember last time when I verbally handed your ass to you and you got mad, so im gonna count that as a hate vote unless you can actually prove your votin for real..
Mary~Jane This fake's spine gets cracked and shattered, then gets his head swelled
only time this wankstas holdin 'heat' is when he's in the kitchen wit egg 'shells'!/
^played
Your breath smells... no wonder why your 'spits stink'
I eat JDeaZy too easy, leave his cut up like an ice rink/
^ ok line
I hope you dont act gangsta, claimin you light snubs
When this home-bound nerd is just dreamin about Fight Club/
^no, maybe i missed something but theis line was useless
I write love thats why I get it, I write true thats why you sweat it
You prewrite your verse, then when its posted hit edit/
^weak
Cuz you cant freestyle kid, you dont know how or what to do
So just get down on both knees and just be you!/
^weak again closers are suposed to be your best line.
jdeazy
Look, I took that pussy and now this bitch is shook//
I 'cum' harder in my sleep than this weak ho's whole hook//
^ cum lines are played fuck a cum line, and that one was one of the weakest ones i have seen
'wet dreams' about DeaZ got ya mind clouded -disturbed//
ya 'mind-a-blur' like retatred kids at lunch you 'get served'//
^i guess, that could be a punch but its weak
wit'a "L" (loss) like you hit tha dope man's spot -wrong//
you on ya hands and knees 'fuckin' where you belong//
^ no
She claims she's a dime when she really only put 2-cents-in//
When I spit, you like your herpes, feelin' "pain and distension"//
first line was ehhhh, 2nd no
convincin' inventions, I'm a plane to ya 'World Trade" -I'm comin' in//
You write 'love' -DeaZ nutz-on-ya-chin, like wit' ya 'X' you got slapped again//
^ weak, closers are suposed to hit harder then every other line
my vote goes to mary jane, i just thought she/he had a better verse, overall
el veterano.. if you maybe used a little bit of your brain.. you'd see the fight club line is directed toward his avatar
doesnt change the fact that it was a weak line. just because you said fight club and his avatar does to doesnt make it a good punch.
i voted for you so shut up and be happy.
opener - JD
flow - MJ
punches - MJ
personals - none
closer - MJ
vote = MJ
hit this battle up\http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=93087
i dont care if it was weak, i havent spit in ages so im rusty'
the point is.. you didnt understand a weak punch.. which makes you look extremely bad
up for votes lets finish this one off
UUUUUUPPPPINNN!!!!
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Gotta say, MJ, this was a good battle ~ my first wit' a "femcee", but you gotta good point, that was a decent snap that Veterano missed... We'll have to do this again in a few ~n~ see how that comes out. THIS ain't ova yet tho'! Much L & R too...
PLEASE VOTE ON MY BATTLE FOR ME VOTING HERE!
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=93272
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Mary~Jane-
- good rhyme in first line but was week
- soft follow up
- good middle
I write love thats why I get it, I write true thats why you sweat it
You prewrite your verse, then when its posted hit edit/
^^^ that was tight
- not bad ending
JDeaZy -
- great intro!
- good follow up and good rhyme scheme
- good middle... strong
- nice ending
its clear who won this battle
JDeaz
Thx fa tha input^^
UPPINNNN.......................................... .............
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Call me tha Surgeonverge
as I cut ya consiousness
wit' tha razor in tha dome
pullin' ya to tha verge
of this abyss ~ fathomless
depth within tha mind
Tha Basics
Flow - MJ
Punches - MJ
Personals - MJ
Originality - MJ
Vote = Tha Lady
Errything else was irrelevant coz MJ murked the 4 basics.