frozen with heat VS Suicidal (plz dont sleep y'all)

aiiyo

6 lines min
8 lines max
i set up
you spit first
no crew votes
no d/r votes
no b/s votes,


every one this is my second battle ever, i kno a bit about wordplay, structure, multis an stuff because i've spent a lotta time praticing

mah bad i took so long...checcin in ill spit now......


fa absolutely no reason i started beafin//speakin at u faster den when puerto ricans be speakin --u aint peepin//

this nigga aint no vet he aint wise enuf ta rhyme wit me//thas why he finna have me spittin first ta combine his style ta me--but still get ate up violently//

im gettin at u like this cuz im tryna make it before da years up//im comin at u more vicious than a pit bull wit bof his ears up--u aint roo tuff//

i bit hard wit tha strength of a great white shark--i rip u apart//mah state of the art lyrical laces is razor sharp//

im ready to expose this cat to y'all... like he a wack 'presentation'/
this dude be hungry for a battle win but gettin beat by starvation/

i treat ya style like the "lottery" your chances of winnin is 'naught'/
you winnin is "minority". like commiting murder not gettin 'caught'/

your gettin left behind, like you got thalidomide, legs tryin 2 sprint/
and if you ever make it to the pinnacle....... its gon be a short
stint/

you coudnt get your 'message' across, if you was ghost write by royce*/
no internal disse, punches were misses, my style creep up silently like i hav no voice//

i hit you with a blind spit, no feedin, cos its only fair


*"royce da 5'9" (allegedly) ghost-wrote the song "the message" for "dr dre"

nice verse NOW LES GET SOME VOTES!!!.......................................... .................................................. .........................

frozen with heat got this wit punches and flow.Nice Verse!!!!

Otha kid need to elevate
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uppin for votes y'all plz dont sleep on this, how does anyone on this site get a rep, if no 1 votes on their battles

second time uppin.....................................plz vote.............................................. .....................

id say suicidal only because im such a sucker for multis
but good job to the both of ya
keep spittn
peace
p.s. 1 of u challenge me to a battle

yo check it
opener:frozen
closer:frozen
wordplay:frozen
structure:tie
multis:suicidal
punches:frozen
personals:none
overall:frozen


good battle from both you newb's jus keep doin wat ya doin an keep elevatin,

best lines:
frozen:
im ready to expose this cat to y'all... like he a wack 'presentation'/
this dude be hungry for a battle win but gettin beat by starvation/
~the second line was hot~


suicidal:
this nigga aint no vet he aint wise enuf ta rhyme wit me//thas why he finna have me spittin first ta combine his style ta me--but still get ate up violently//
~probs ur best line~


Vote disqualified... from now on, if ANYONE is suspected of using an alias to vote for themselves, it will be an instant ban. Doesn't matter if you are two different people or not.
~Kalvin

C'MON YAW SHOW SOME LUV AND VOTE YAW!!!............................................ .................................................. ..............................

ima say frozen takes this....heres my breakdown......

structure-tie
flow-tie
vocab-frozen
wordplay-suicidle
punches-frozen
personals-tie
overall-frozen

props to the both of ya, but ima say frozen takes this.......yo suicidle check yo pm box homie......

peace......

BuMp^^............................................ .................................................. .................................................. .................................................. .....................

uppin y'aal 4 more votes....................................dont sleep on this y'all......................

WE NEED VOTES YAW QUIT SLEEPIN ON SHIT AND JUS VOTE IT DONT TAKE THAT FUKIN LONG!............................................. .

i actualy felt suicidal more here---he had good multi's couple aight disses---frozen ya had an ok verse--good structure--no hard punches though---vote=suicidal

peep my battles in the sig and vote
they need to be ended! thanx

Breakdown:

Flow:Frozen
punches:Frozen
structure:Frozen
wordplay:Frozen

One sided battle and Suidal must elavate and read some tutorials or summit, cos he got merked

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uppin y'all for more votes plz vote on this battle............................................ ..............

last time for votes y'all i cant up this thread anymore........................................... ............

suicidal was better here im my opinion, kinda weak battle and both of y'all could elevate abit more.

vote = suicidal

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IllathanVanilla
I'd say suicidal only because im such a sucker for multis
but good job to the both of ya
keep spittn
peace

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what a herb........multis alone cannot win a battle, elevate first b4 u vote

flow = both
punches = frozen
creativity = frozen
wordplay = frozen
metas = frozen

vote = frozen

frozens verse waz way eazier to read so it waz eazier to get into

so he got my vote he waz betta all round

suicide wasnt to bad but he lost nuff sed

yo can u plzgo n vote on deeze battlez

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frozen wit heat- punches were there... not a bad spit.
your flow was on, and you had a bit of wordplay in there...
overall it was decent spit... i rate you at a 5

suicidal- I think your flow is suicidal, like it took a high dive
into a pool with no water... I could barely peice together a flow,
and you had no hard punches... def. need to elevate some...
but, you's a newb... it aint that bad, but you need to learn what
structure and flow is... go to tutorials.

vote- Frozen

not going to go into detail, but suicide you lost this from structure alone, no one wants to read verse that is as stretched as yours
you had a few nice line but they were hard to read cuz of your fucked up structre, all in all frozen had the better verse, punches didnt hit that hard but they did enuff damage

keep spitten guys and suicide fix your structure dawg
vote=frozen with heat

out dis biatch