Omens Forever

Aight you,

Look today i was recruited by the Omens, best day of my life,
i feel bad for all the other crews without me its like ur side's hurtin from a knife/
damn, for them its just another missed opportunity,
but luckily for me its like a second family/
Man i thanks King of Thievez,
i hope to grow to his skill level, to have what he acheives/
i am glad to have him and this crew,
will be there to back me if i need a hand or two/
So tonight i will think of this crew while goin to bed,
how i would fight for it, til all i see is red/
to all of you i love u, ur my family,
damn this shit realyl affects u mentally/
but in good ways, i will never leave this crew,
not til the end of my days, cause hvin friends really pays/
Now this is comin from my heart to all of you,
because i dont think u understand, what i would do,
to stay true, i have so much pride to say i'm in this crew/

y'all know what i say "fuck the regime",
I'l destroy them all if they get between,
how i talk or what i'm tryin to say,
oh u think this is a game, fuck you, work before play/
oh u know this is rap, i been doin this for days,
y'all want me to stop,NEVER, not even if Jesus kneels down and prays/
So for now i am gonna go, i gotta leave
but tomorrow i'll be back, i have more emotion to relieve/

that was so awesome...........................................
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it hit me staight in the heart
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thanks dawg.. still lookin fo mo feed back

that was pretty fuckin tight, keep'em comin

^^^thanx for the comments keep em' comin

y the hell is gbacd doin, ys he sayin keep em comin, but anywho that was pretty good homie, OMENS FO LIFE, way to be. anywho i probably wouldnt post anymore open mics sayin "fuck the regime", that could cause some trouble, just some advice though, but ur flow fell off a little throughout the post, next time try and make ur lines around the same length to help out the flow, u had pretty good vocab and wordplay, and ur content and topic was pretty original. pretty good drop for the fam.

peace.......

cool cool

this was pretty good...you got madd potential...you goin' elevate in no time at all...I'd say just throw some multi'z in there and add a lil' vocab and you'd be set...

^thanks a lot kind i really appreciate it

whoops by the way i meant king

That was one of the illest drops i've ever read, tha flow was off the hook... It was soo deep, you're gonna go a long way on this site dawg.

Can you add me on AIM:youareshit i wanna get some tips off you...
You should come try out with I.E, with skillz like that man you'll get in fo' sho...

Keep writing homie, and jsut remember YOU ILL!!!!!!!

hermano that was nice twin i liked it and it is good to see open mics repping the fam i thought me and king and sally where wthe only that did it.

thanks ^^ need mo input

thanks guys.. Omens fo life... but hey if i could get more iput that'd be great

I was being sarcastik dawg... But let me be a bit more constructive in my critisicm...

Up side to the drop, it seemed really deep, and thats good skill to be able to put how you feel in words, cause i cant do that 4 shit...


So i was feelin' that in your verse.


Your flow was a bit off but it was alright, just needs to be set out a bit better... But it was alright flow...

Structure was alright but needed to be done a bit better, the song had a deep meaning, bu it was behind every line, some of the lines i felt i had already heard and unoriginal, but thats how it is when your new to the site. Also it seemed a bit re-pedative, always sayin i luv your my family, made it sound a bit queer for tha net...

So just throw in mroe multis, come up with more original lines, fix structure and flow a bit more, and you'll be writing ill open mcis with more practice. Cause it all comes together over time....

Ight dawg...

pce

thanks dawg

That was basic but you were reppin' and I love that. The flow was nice. I would recommend adding wordplay, metas and multies. But stay active and keep dropping and you'll elevate fam sho nuff. One+

^^thanks

WHAT THE FUCK?....that wasnt tight...! it really fuckin sucked..
half of it didnt rhyme...i dont even write open mics...and i could FREESTYLE a better drop...seriously KOT what are you doing? whatever im not even in omens anymore...for that reason...we lost talent and got...well...this shit!
peace

^^ oh thanks.... i really appreciate that shit and thats exactly what it is SHIT, yes i do need to elevate but thats not the kind of critisism i want i want critisism to help me... so thanks for the post dawg.

my man yog_dogg...that was such an ill name....now, ur AFI_KILLS_RAP...what a major downgrade...

but this shit was wack...

structure sucked anus....flow was the wackest i have ever seen....

u tried to rep the omens, but this was disgraceful...

but it doesnt matter....mondo thugs r better....

M-UNIT FOR LIFE!

I liked it,with alitle bit of elevation you could become big on here