create vs payable

sorry but this is the right one here is my same verse

man this is a battle so get off ya boyfriends "dick"/
by the looks of it your rappin like a "chick"/
maybe rapbattles wasnt such a good idea fuck "face"/
cause gay femcees like you are out of "place"/
so get the fuck outta my "face"/
cause when i rap weak shit it hits you like "mace"/
its like a hot pursuit and you got a shitty "car"/
your slow and fucked rhymes are no where near me my by "far"/
you'll be short on breathe when ya facin payable on "death"/
cause my ill shit rhymes will leave you a "mess"/

alright dont feed

Dawg i'd pay you to die but your already suicidal/
You got banned from the real world so you're here outta denial

Your payable on death, but you forgot to pay for your meth/
Now ill "CrEaTe a story bout how you humped kobe's bitch and then "left"

Man even your prewrites suck "shit" and your spirit gonna get sank/
Your like a sucker "fish", but you could never get tanks/ (tits, boobs etc.. sucker fish clean tanks including fishes shit)

Seriously man you need better wordplay/
you put me to sleep faster then shakephere plays/
now that was a prewrite 'cause im not "gay", not to mention a chick/
seems like ur da one who has been suckin the dicks

You think your dope but you cant even set-a-battle-up-right/
Either your stupid as fuck or as high as a kite

^^worst ever cant think of anything anyways vote on this plz peeps

ok that was feeding man......w/e though..............votes..............votes...... .......uppin......

line 8 near the end is actually mine instead of my and me....i fucked up on that..........................

its the advantage of goin 2nd....plus you woulda got merked anyway cuz u suck....uppin...........................

upping......if you look at this vote on it and drop a link to your battle and ill give u my opinion....thx

uppin..................................uppin...... ..................................................

uppin 3rd time....vote on this thx
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i give this to payable simply bcoz create fed off payables verse, that is fuckin wack........p'z................................... ........................

thanks phix.........................more votes.................uppin... .......uppin....................

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Originally posted by $$CrEaTe$$
its the advantage of goin 2nd....plus you woulda got merked anyway cuz u suck....uppin...........................

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um yea DONT FEED thats the point when your going 2nd your not supposed 2

well anyway you still got my vote cuz other cat was preety shitty


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ghlight=spirit
^vote

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=69293

^hit it up

dis battle was one sided both u newbs suked
but i thoguht create took it
harder disses...weak battle elevate newbs u got potential one does atleasy

by the way i voted for you instead of payable because your new and shit happens when your new

just dont do that shit again

yehh this was weak...with the feedin...but i gotta vote 4 the betta verse..which was create..had betta wrdplay and punches...vote=create...111

uppin for votes need 2 more.....thx...................................... .................................................. .....

i think Create got this one, ok for a newb battle
watch the feedin next time, you will lose respect for feedin
but anyway
everything was pretty even but think Create had a little better
flow and structure
therefore vote=Create

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=67848

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PayableOnDeath-

-good rhyming intro and kinda soft punch
-good rhyming again but soft punches
-not that great closer... needs to punch harder

$$CrEaTe$$-

-okay intro... not a really hard diss though
-nice attempt at wordplay
-not great ending... need to punch harder too!!!

Vote: Create cuz his verse was more like a battle verse...