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Killing Time
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Topic...
Killing Time
Holy shiot I didn't even know I was accepted or whatever. Aight, well, checking in......... Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah BlahBlah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah
^^Same Here...Aight...Killing Time...Lets Make It A Good One!
Good Luck Son...
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Aight...I'm Gonna Post My Shit Up 2moro Coz Thats The Only Time I'll Have Enough Time To Write Sumthin...So It Will Be Up In The Afternoon Or Nite...
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jus killed all your time......
Brought Into This World By Our Parents. We Have Unlimited Time..
We Were Just So Little, No-One Has The Right To Draw The Line..
So Tell Me...Who The Fuck Has The Right To Say Its Time??..
*Mystik Gonna Let You All See An Image He See's Every Night When Going To Bed*
Were Were Best Of Friends, We Went Everywhere Together..
We Made Highschool Pacts, We Said We'll Be Friends Forever..
Playing Football Together, We Always Ended Up Fighting..
I Was Only Joking, You Knew That, But Yet The Fued Kept Lighting..
It Got Too Much, You Kept Pushing Me, "Fuck Off, You Aint My Friend"..
Little Did I Know They Were The Last Words I Would Say To My Friend..
You See, Later That Night, Some Cunt Thinking He Gangsta Pulls Out A Knife..
Who The Fuck Are You To Kill His Time...Who The Fuck Are You To Take His Life..
I Was Helpless To Do Anything...I Was Simply Too Far Away..
Ran Like The Wind To Help You...But Time Went As-Tray..
The Image That I See Of You Lying There Is Every Tomorrow's Yesterday..
But I'm Here Today Without You Beside Me To Guide Me The Right Way..
Every Night The Same Nightmare, A Re-Occuring Tragedy Of Your Death..
And Tha Foggot Who Did This Is No Where To Be Seen, My Friend Had His Last Breath..
The Questions In My Head, "Why Him? What Did He Ever Do?"..
Were You Trying To Prove Yourself To Your Dick-Sucking Crew?..
Well Fuck You...Because On That Night You Killed Two People..
My Soul Died When He Went...My Mind Turned Lethal..
Now Its My Killing Time...Over Powered By Anger And Rage..
Now Its My Freeing Line...Some One Please Turn The Page..
Constantly On The Lookout...But I Didnt Know Who I Was Looking For..
Lost Sleep, The Image That You Left Me Was Over Powering..
In A World Of My Own...What People Said...I Wasnt Hearing..
I Was Constantly Fearing What I Would Do If I Actually Saw You..
The Pain And Agony You Put Me Through...You Dont Have A Clue..
I Never Found You...Now Its Year Two But Still Time Is Gone..
You Killed His Time, That I'll Never Forget, You Had Your Fun..
I Was There To See His Eventful Life Come To An End..
But The Last Words I Said To Him Is Killing My Time, "You Aint My Friend"..
That Wasnt True, How Could I Say That When I Know I Didnt Mean It..
I Was So Norrow Minded..."I Cant Be Bothered Tonight...I Think I'll Leave It"..
I'm Still Waitin To Reach The End Of My Road...Someone Draw The Line..
If Someone Has The Right To...How Come You Aint Killed My Time?..
Aiyo this is kind of a comedy piece. Pay attention to the rhyming is all I ask.
Yeah, do you remember?
When you would sit down severing your only endeavour.
Measurin how much pleasure it was to spend your head center
On forever messin your cleverness nummin it whatsoever?
And then you see you're fuckin broke and spent
All your money on a stupid idea to hot box a tent
You were gonna use the weed you were lent
By your friend to last you the week, it’s the new trend
And friend, I am bored so much to the point
I could stare at the floor for an hour and prolly roll a joint
If it even releases the soreness I got stored In my speechless
rhyme center with thoughts of basketball scores and punching teachers
I’ll sit and roar if I don’t get outta the house soon
If I found out they smoked without me I’mma ruin these looney tunes
Shoot off their balls and make them sing tunes looney.
I’d sooner be caught with a lunar tree than any good weed you brought to me.
I need coffee to softly take away the pain of coughing and fleeing
From the cops leavin a wake. What?
All I ever do is smoke shake and weed this needs
to stop I’m hatin this I need to leave this place and stampede
to my nearest home base I believe.
But I hear that’s the place we blaze the most weed
Don’t want to spend time like this I need to be freed
And now I cant escape it its my new livin creed
Man, this isnt even funny.
I spent all my money and smoked it, now I’m sittin watchin Bugs Bunny
On the television on my ass and its sunny
I wanna be runnin around bustin heads like moulder and skulley
I guess I could go on the net its somewhat neat
I could come up with a rhyme that is actually from me
They call you a butt head I say you got a dumb seat
That’s all I need give me a drum beat I’m off to RB
Umm, I cant vote yet....
I liked Redlocks' better.It kind of remind me of myself.The thinking of punching teachers.The weed smoking.Mystik verse was tight too,but what people need to understand is that all peices don't have to have alot of drama.I notice that alot in these compettions.No matter the topic it always have drama.Good battle though.I'm going with Red.
I liked Mystik Mind's topical spit better. His shit had more vocab usuage and I liked his puns and metaphores. I mean his flow was good too. RedLock your shit was tight too. It was a real close battle but mine goes to Mystik.
Vote=Mystik Mind
pEace
was the best part of either verses... after this mystiks stuff kind of fell off and wasnt up to par... but redloks whole verse was not up too par.. it ruins a topical when you start talkin about 'rolling joing' and shit... and when you use the word faggot it takes away from it also... use words like Coward.. makes it seem more understandable and less harsh..you get a better feel in the topical for it...Quote:
Were Were Best Of Friends, We Went Everywhere Together..
We Made Highschool Pacts, We Said We'll Be Friends Forever..
Playing Football Together, We Always Ended Up Fighting..
I Was Only Joking, You Knew That, But Yet The Fued Kept Lighting..
It Got Too Much, You Kept Pushing Me, "Fuck Off, You Aint My Friend"..
Little Did I Know They Were The Last Words I Would Say To My Friend..
You See, Later That Night, Some Cunt Thinking He Gangsta Pulls Out A Knife..
Who The Fuck Are You To Kill His Time...Who The Fuck Are You To Take His Life..
I Was Helpless To Do Anything...I Was Simply Too Far Away..
Ran Like The Wind To Help You...But Time Went As-Tray..
The Image That I See Of You Lying There Is Every Tomorrow's Yesterday..
But I'm Here Today Without You Beside Me To Guide Me The Right Way..
Every Night The Same Nightmare, A Re-Occuring Tragedy Of Your Death..
And Tha Foggot Who Did This Is No Where To Be Seen, My Friend Had His Last Breath..
therefore Vote Mystik Mind
Um, actually I didn't use the word "faggot" in any of my lines. I'm glad to see you read both verses thuroughly before voting. Thanks.
- Sincerely,
Redloks
Oops, sorry. You weren't talking about my spit. Heh, sorry. Heh heh. UPPIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D
You shouldnt up league shit dumbass
ok: Mystik Mind: great verse...good imagery about how u tried to save your friend but couldn't...very deep and touching shit
Score: 7.0
Redlocks: I wasn't feeling yous AT ALL...i thought u took it the wrong direction entirely...nuf said
Score: 4.4
Vote: Mystik Mind
Excuse me Mr. I have Over 1000 Posts. This is my first league battle. I don't know shit like that.
lol^^you thought i was hating on you? nah main i was helping you, i know i never paid any attention to peeps who said "You were really good except..." I dont mention good in the bgeining i mention bad....always better to say someones bad when they were good then saying somes was good when they were bad...feel me? Truist me playa, ive been in ur situation...if ya dont believe me peep my open mic called "Memory Lane" its pretty much a life story of me rapping.
and so not to freepost...nice verse Mystik, but i stand by what i said Redloks and you were completely off course with that verse
Word to A2Z, I really felt yours a lot MM. I don't think it was great, but I truly felt that it was more then enough to win the battle for you.
didnt realy like redlocks.its just becaseu i dont like that type of poetry and i just thought that mystiks was that bit stronger..no hate...aight so heres ma vote
Mystik
One thing you cats gotta remember. This shit aint poetry. Sure, its like poetry. But this shit is RAP. There is a difference. Thats aight though.
....songs are just poetry with a beat behind them......seriiously....novels can b written in poetr...take shakespeak for example...half of his shit as in sonnetts...poetry rhymes...so does raps and songs.in my eyes....songs are just poetry wit a beat behind it..sorry man
sorry but mystik owned this battle.......
like his shit.....good flow imagery and emotion too
felt your verse much more
reloks was just too basic and i got bored....try and come with some original stuff man
vote mystik