Mystical Minstrel

hey all would love ta hear what ya all think of my style or if ya even thinks i got potential--let me know yer honest opinion

thanks




I'm a phenomenal n logical-mystical minstrel-
mixin up some magical music-meltin away the media mayhem-mendin minds-movin mountains--
stoppin the megalomaniacal mysterious madmen-
from murdering the masses-
I'm meditatin not kickin asses

I'm a healer I feelher
nota dealer or a wheeler
i don't touch crack heroin or speed
cause the only thin dat does ma consciousness right
is 'WEED'
rollinit up tokinit up
takinit in
when me lungs get filled
i rest da bong on my 'Chin'
if ya redi ta choke then lets begin

my words all misty like smoke in ya face
makin ya dizzy yer lost in outer space
i'm new n i'm after first place
flowin with grace n leavin no trace

call me a rookie
see if i care
ya better beware
cause i got the stare
i'm yer nightmare,a double whammy blowin outya ears
i'm all yer fears, a freak, a ghost in the night with second sight
yer sweatin n i'm bettin
dat in yer bed tonight you be wettin

bring it on
yer gon.....witda wind i begin
blammin n slammin,shatterin glass n swearing
yer not even sure what U B hearin

so go ahead & ignore
sit back n pass
i know i've jus started
but i'm kickin yer ass

whas da matta

cats got yer tongue
you've just been hung
I see all the dung that you've flung
spittin n pissin....moanin n groanin
the title i be ownin
I'm outa my cage,a free spirited lyrical mage
so jus stay backstage
while i clear the air with some sage
a cosmic shaman ready to engage n enrage

i'm the yoda of freestyle a jedi of beats
i know yer scared cause yer hidin under yer sheets
i'm usin the force, a warhorse off coarse
words direct from tha source
with no remorse
i see ya takin notes off my discourse

step back n take in some air cause i'm here
Somebody
Everybody
Nobody
Invisible invincible actual n factual
a reality in yer face stingin like mace
yer lost withouta trace, a disgrace to dis place
heartpounding like a bass
i'm real-no deal-i'm here to steal
numba 1 without a gun
my voice the weapon my words the ammo

like a flammin arrow-cuttin to yer marrow
step down.. kiss the ground...
where i stand/creator my right hand
you've been canned n scanned
by my poetical backhand
a verbal slap leavin no gap
time to take yer nap
while I backtrack
n let yall know
I'm the Minister of Rap

cyberspaciousness is dis place of bliss
i infiltrated yer consciousness
with spiraling snakes that hiss
can't believe yer goin out like this

I'm here for the challenge friend
takin it to the end
bettin i'll be da next trend
parallel universes criss crossing yer world
I've unfirled---your brain is all curled
a matrix of memories of heaven on earth
whats it worth-----remember yer birth
yer here--for the change-rearrange-all wierd n strange
mutatin n transformatin /meditatin n creatin
you gotta a soul/yer whole /love is da goal....ya know let's go
i'll flow n glow stoppin da show you don't even know whatcha know
so let's go...
a spiritual bein you be seein
not a human doin who's spewing n
chewin you up n spittin you out without a doubt as you pout
electrifyin the air
as you stare
into the atmosphere
i'm here/yer where
that's right/yer full a fear

Ed aka s.e.n.~Da Minister

c'mon somebody anybody everybody

is there anyone here who cares ta help another freestyler
improve on their skillz...

peace

Uppin for sum critique...........


also how does everyone count the barz---how many would you say this was?


help.......

Feed me wit sum FeedBack
let me know is it OK or whack

where do I need improvin---

Hungry 4 da Wisdom

thanks

nice and long, lot of big words (don't like that) but flowed prety well, i really enjoyed reading it lol Weed is good lol some of your lines were very well put together like that check mine tho its some bullshit i made up durning school!
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=50746

mine is @ the bottome Check out dire_1 battles!

your shit was tight,u got good word play u just need to learn how to blend them together better,it was over all tight,u got well over 40 bars by the way

it was good.but the first bi made ma hjead spin lol to many Ms.........but it was tight....keep spttin yall get better ;) even the best still learn

thanks all----good ta hear pos feedback--

my first battle sucked---came off weak----
check out my many posts and gimme yer honest opinion----I have a hard time with the punches---i guess since my fav form of music is the conscious hip hop-trance--takin ya higher kinda stuff--Arrested Development/Speech---Common---Digable Planet-
PM Dawn---------------

guess ther really isn't a form a peaceful battlin--wher yer just out spittin insteada diss'in------or maybe ther is---let me know

thanks


peace

I forgot ta put the tag for that first Battle---from what many have said so far I don't even know if I should be gettin people ta see it----burn it

MystiQuest vs sen
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...5&pagenumber=1

Uppin 4 some more feed back---really helps ta hear what everyone thinks-----inspiring 4 the Enquiring


thanks all

as 4 battling --not sure if I got what it takes---

OK this is what I do think of a concept or message and try to give across that message being creative not just going out and saying it this piece really didnt have a message more along the line's of rhyme..I would say just try to stay on one topic and be creative some time's less is better hence all the word's that rhyme your structure is set up more of a poetry type verse line length is important try not to make them all uneven try to keepa certain length good luck..

ask & you shall receive..........

feed back ------opinion----------------perspective---------------

any advise on how to improve appreciated


so many talented souls........


peace

Thanx 4 everything

good wordplay, aight flow, nice drop overall, could have been better had yeah had more heart in it... nice overall though return the favor?

uppin 4 more feedback

spectrum of consciousness
waves of existence
A journey beyond 'FlatLand'

thanx
peace

thanx 2 everyone who has checked this out--appreciate the feed back

after seein so many others stuff---i see how much further i need to improve-----so much skill out there--

peace

Ohhh k kid, you got some good vocab, good flow but fo real, don't just write shit about like self-glorification, try and get on a subject for real and really put thought into it, you're just learnin but yeah you will elevate, stick around, stay up and you''ll get better kid....

............Pz.............

Thanx 4 Everything, I have no complaints whatsoever

Learnin everyminute.....

peace

drop the vocab. work on flow.... your on the right track kid. practice makes perfect. wunn~

oh yeh lemme speak soem wisdom to you. outside of this internet rap b.s. the world dont give a fuck about vocab. net-cees just spit vocab ridiculous and where has that gotten any net kids? u see any of em signin deals? naw.

^^be right,vocab isnt important honestly,it is,but not as much as you would expect...dont need a great deal of emphasis on big words and such,it just dont need it....but i liekd htis...you ahve to work on flow..the flow was out a lil,other then that..ermm.i liked th emulties assualt at the beginning...that was nice,then the rest of the song,was spaced out strangly,couldnt pick it up,but eh,who cars,its only words...this was pretty good,but definete room for improvement in the flow-bar lenght placement type of thing,self glorifaction like mead mentioend,wont get you nowhere,try stay on topic,it wa s good verse but you need to keep on,if you seem to be loosing the topic,just stop...nice spit...but ease the vocab back a bit,sounds forced nahmean....if its fromth ehart and has a meaning and emotion too it,no amount of big words wll make it any better then small ones...

thankyou for posting in my new verse,im glad you liked it..

keep spitting..

bismillah

uppin 4 more advise---

gotta battle comin up---i'm weak with the punches---
my first battle sucked---pretty much got slammed--
havin a hard time lettin go a the spiritual flow
workin on the punches

any insight apprecaited


thanx

on a battle type tip... read up onr ur opponent. and then think of some clever shit to go with it. dont force it. cuz u usually got a week or so to drop ur verse.

thanx 4 the tip-------

the journey continues ta be able ta just flow with the punches-----aspiring ta be like the masters

genius minds abide in this here place-----


wish ther was a compilation of all the best here---

yall should be gettin paid---
we should all have it made
plantin seeds n fulfillin r needs
food/clothing/shelta n love
the knowledge that Gods Omnipotent
not just above
so pick up yo brother insteada shove
paradise is what i'm thinkin of...


peace

thanx all

uppin----

nice sen, very nice, i liked it , holla La Familia

uppin 4 some more tips----what punches seem ta hit the hardest---what knocks yer opponent down so they can't get up--

tryin hard ta be mean----I'm to use ta gettin high n bein chill,
yet I'm up 4 the challenge---


peace


thanx all

hey sen if u drop me a link of ur new song ill judge it too im working on one right now

uppin 4 more a yall words a wisdom---
appreciate your knowledge n know how


peace

thanX

it was a good piece, it had its ups and downs, you should try to stay more consistent, and usin large words in your verses doesnt really inhance tha piece if no one undastands what you are talkin about, put away tha dictionary and use your own diction. Nice post though, not tryin to be critical or anythin, just speakin my mind, peace, 1 luv

uppin--4 more critiques

thanX 4 the peeps


peace

Uppin again---

on yall i depend

until the end

enemy or friend

feedback do send


A hip hop revolution trend

spiritual evolution around the next bend


peace