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@Killing Spree
@Joe Boston
Check ins due by Wednesday, May 13th 11:59PM EST
Verses due Friday, May 15th 11:59PM EST
16 - 20 lines.
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@Killing Spree
@Joe Boston
Check ins due by Wednesday, May 13th 11:59PM EST
Verses due Friday, May 15th 11:59PM EST
16 - 20 lines.
ALL FL RULES APPLY
Ur dead
Check
Ready for Blind drops
Hes the type that dont watch boxing then say the floyd n pac fight was fixed
If his knowledge of any boxer brief hes telling ILL that Zelph is posting pics
Quick Victory in a Tag match ur dissapointment couldnt be any realer
I didnt need Coup to show now your probably making bomb threats to the German Car Dealer
found out ur chick lets me kneel her and ur ready to give that ring
just talking about it gives you the blues but bitch hopes u die like BB King
Battling is relatively not ur thing so that ego ill flatten it son
Hes like i beat u with every Bar Rhet then fag went out for drinks and got his hair done
His bitch needs some real fun he cant sastify her clearly
So when im ready to blast off she come to the Rocket close like a fucking Clippers series
Ur not scary dangerous or threatening u aint harming by far
One shot from the Smith N Wesson will kill this fag at his favorite salad bar
Ur mudering skills aint up to par Joe all about living up to danger for a reason
So u think ur blade get a piece Ovechkin im ending it like the Capitols Season
U drive hoopties that take a beating just letting those miles run
Claiming Dzokhars suck and u should get the death penalty just for riding one
16
Joe boston
Quote:
Originally Posted by Joe Boston
Quote:
Originally Posted by Joe Boston
Multies are ur life punches with impact of no type why they exposing ur hype
This can end in a Killing Spree no gifts a broken Christmas tree and a live fatality over Skype
Bar vs celph
Quote:
Originally Posted by Joe Boston
You will NOT survive faggot
Read...
I said...
Look @ this slob, kids bout the pussy - only cos he gooshy n soft
Ya u won the tag match, but fag that's the only time u been pushin for draws
Battling me s'like punchin ur own face, I'm bad for ya health
So just let killing spree end ya,B...like ya battle wit self
This mans a wreck, I'll beat his prego hoe with my hands in text
One hook'll have her spittin out blood, in the same cup this retard tried handing fresh
U burn through greedy money? False! This poor dude lame
So we'll light candles around joe the same way joo preyed
& you'll be in a vegtable state, as soon as my fist takes course
Have a fam member die per punch, till there's none left to change yours
Every time we battle u get shot, now I'm driving u down n out
& next time we cross in'a section I'll show u what a round about
U got a kid due any minute, fuck that baby host what I spits tarin
...Cut her gut while she grocery shopping
Than Put the insides inside a basket & show u the miscarriage
My wrist shot'll have ya chin rocked, U'll be droppin quick
& whoever sayin jofa real? I'll break their neck wit a hockey stick
@Joe Boston he posted a day late WITH an ext.
Up to u if u want this to open for votes.
Yeah it's cool fresh he's an alcoholic he fell asleepQuote:
Originally Posted by Fresh
Ready for blind votes
Hes the type that dont watch boxing then say the floyd n pac fight was fixed
If his knowledge of any boxer brief hes telling ILL that Zelph is posting pics
decent
Quick Victory in a Tag match ur dissapointment couldnt be any realer
I didnt need Coup to show now your probably making bomb threats to the German Car Dealer
meh
found out ur chick lets me kneel her and ur ready to give that ring
just talking about it gives you the blues but bitch hopes u die like BB King
nahh
Battling is relatively not ur thing so that ego ill flatten it son
Hes like i beat u with every Bar Rhet then fag went out for drinks and got his hair done
not feelin this
His bitch needs some real fun he cant sastify her clearly
So when im ready to blast off she come to the Rocket close like a fucking Clippers series
good
Ur not scary dangerous or threatening u aint harming by far
One shot from the Smith N Wesson will kill this fag at his favorite salad bar
meh
Ur mudering skills aint up to par Joe all about living up to danger for a reason
So u think ur blade get a piece Ovechkin im ending it like the Capitols Season
OK
U drive hoopties that take a beating just letting those miles run
Claiming Dzokhars suck and u should get the death penalty just for riding one
decent
Multies are ur life punches with impact of no type why they exposing ur hype
This can end in a Killing Spree no gifts a broken Christmas tree and a live fatality over Skype
filler
Look @ this slob, kids bout the pussy - only cos he gooshy n soft
Ya u won the tag match, but fag that's the only time u been pushin for draws
nahh
Battling me s'like punchin ur own face, I'm bad for ya health
So just let killing spree end ya,B...like ya battle wit self
not feeling it
This mans a wreck, I'll beat his prego hoe with my hands in text
One hook'll have her spittin out blood, in the same cup this retard tried handing fresh
nah bro
U burn through greedy money? False! This poor dude lame
So we'll light candles around joe the same way joo preyed
decent
& you'll be in a vegtable state, as soon as my fist takes course
Have a fam member die per punch, till there's none left to change yours
good!
Every time we battle u get shot, now I'm driving u down n out
& next time we cross in'a section I'll show u what a round about
decent
U got a kid due any minute, fuck that baby host what I spits tarin
...Cut her gut while she grocery shopping
Than Put the insides inside a basket & show u the miscarriage
this is just wrong lol
My wrist shot'll have ya chin rocked, U'll be droppin quick
& whoever sayin jofa real? I'll break their neck wit a hockey stick
decent
Hes the type that dont watch boxing then say the floyd n pac fight was fixed
If his knowledge of any boxer brief hes telling ILL that Zelph is posting pics
His bitch needs some real fun he cant sastify her clearly
So when im ready to blast off she come to the Rocket close like a fucking Clippers series
U drive hoopties that take a beating just letting those miles run
Claiming Dzokhars suck and u should get the death penalty just for riding one
vs
& you'll be in a vegtable state, as soon as my fist takes course
Have a fam member die per punch, till there's none left to change yours
Every time we battle u get shot, now I'm driving u down n out
& next time we cross in'a section I'll show u what a round about
My wrist shot'll have ya chin rocked, U'll be droppin quick
& whoever sayin jofa real? I'll break their neck wit a hockey stick
Close battle... i'll be honest i've seen a lot better from both. Joe you had some good concepts but your wording really let you down man. KS I thought you were gonna flop completely but you turned it around in the last half of your verse.. just wish you didnt include them fucked up lines about his future child you def lost some points from me there.
However it was close, I do have KS edging the win with both having the same amount of quotables but KS having the BOTB.
V- Killing Spree
jb
boxer brief is played but current event tied in
lol at using my name but I don't get it
blues bb King shit is pretty playd
berret is pretty plyd as well not flippd creatively
rocket close was ehh came off pretty oddly felt like more of a statement
salad bar didn't make n e sense to me
capitols bar was cool not a bad reference at all
closer didn't wnd well didn't connect reference came off bland
not a bad verse u stress the current events a lot which gets redundant other then that just work on wording n u'll be strate
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Opener was cool decent personal coulda been harsher
spree end ya b don't make sense to me
ehh personal could've been better here was more like a statement
jo preyed don't work for me might be missing the angle u were headed
diaper word play is used n abused nothing new here
round a bout was pretty cool feelin it
miscarriage was grime but I liked it
close was creative n connected not a bad way to finish
kill u where hit n miss but hit more then ur oppontney
Kill pulled it together towards the end w out those last 4 bars it was a toss up
Hes the type that dont watch boxing then say the floyd n pac fight was fixed
If his knowledge of any boxer brief hes telling ILL that Zelph is posting pics
This didn't make sense to me... I get boxer brief wordplay but the set up and shit was weird.. Coulda done soemthing with this but as is this falls flat
Quick Victory in a Tag match ur dissapointment couldnt be any realer
I didnt need Coup to show now your probably making bomb threats to the German Car Dealer
nah didn't like this
found out ur chick lets me kneel her and ur ready to give that ring
just talking about it gives you the blues but bitch hopes u die like BB King
set up was really weird here too.. I'll give a jab for this
Battling is relatively not ur thing so that ego ill flatten it son
Hes like i beat u with every Bar Rhet then fag went out for drinks and got his hair done
bar rhet / barrette works but you just placed it there for the sake of the wordplay and the set up made no sense in correlation to the punch. Not feelin this
His bitch needs some real fun he cant sastify her clearly
So when im ready to blast off she come to the Rocket close like a fucking Clippers series
Not feelin this
Ur not scary dangerous or threatening u aint harming by far
One shot from the Smith N Wesson will kill this fag at his favorite salad bar
Am I missing sometihng here?
Ur mudering skills aint up to par Joe all about living up to danger for a reason
So u think ur blade get a piece Ovechkin im ending it like the Capitols Season
Not sure what the wordplay was supposed to be here... Ovechkin sounds like oh vetch kin
U drive hoopties that take a beating just letting those miles run
Claiming Dzokhars suck and u should get the death penalty just for riding one
Nah man...
vs
Look @ this slob, kids bout the pussy - only cos he gooshy n soft
Ya u won the tag match, but fag that's the only time u been pushin for draws
Not feeling this
Battling me s'like punchin ur own face, I'm bad for ya health
So just let killing spree end ya,B...like ya battle wit self
Didn't like this
This mans a wreck, I'll beat his prego hoe with my hands in text
One hook'll have her spittin out blood, in the same cup this retard tried handing fresh
Eh?
U burn through greedy money? False! This poor dude lame
So we'll light candles around joe the same way joo preyed
not feeling this
& you'll be in a vegtable state, as soon as my fist takes course
Have a fam member die per punch, till there's none left to change yours
ehhhh.. I'ma give u a jab here but diaper doesn't sound like die per to me
Every time we battle u get shot, now I'm driving u down n out
& next time we cross in'a section I'll show u what a round about
I'll give a jab for this
U got a kid due any minute, fuck that baby host what I spits tarin
...Cut her gut while she grocery shopping
Than Put the insides inside a basket & show u the miscarriage
Coulda done something w/ miscarriage this falls flat as is
My wrist shot'll have ya chin rocked, U'll be droppin quick
& whoever sayin jofa real? I'll break their neck wit a hockey stick
Ok
Damn this was a weak Champ Match man... Joe you use some weird wordplays and when u do have wordplay that makes sense you don't tie it in properly. KS you have kinda of the same problem but you had a couple ok hits here so you're gonna get the dub.
v/KS
3 votes received
Before I penny loafer all over this let me just say thanks for letting me vote, poetry in motion. That being said I think its important to remember that this is just an opinion and no matter who does their thing bling bling chicken wing in the end we can't all be Friend.Quote:
Originally Posted by Joe Boston
1 = I expected a more from the set-up but funny second line hit and the first bar connected. 4/5
2= Second bar was soft, wordplay & punch. 2/5
3 = Current events are cool to flip, I think playing with the kneel her rhyme scheme or using more info about jazz or dudes bio yes? Even expanding with the world blues or some synonym to twist the mind up a bit with some wordplay would have seen a better score from yours truly. Third bar was mediocre. 3/5
4 = Could be me but I don't understand the relevance. On some gangster shit Suge Knight got K.O. outside a place where you can get your hair did. He didn't have hair and its hard out there but this bar didn't hit. Setup went nowhere, and I explained the second line. 2/5
5 = I think you're stretching here, the longer lines in this bar over-exaggerate the emphasis. That said, besides the un-needed profanity I thought this was on point. 3.5/5
6 = Funny is about all I got to say on the vote. A lot of interesting flips in your lines you neglected on that wtf do I know. 1/5
7 = This multi wasn't so hot, grammar or punctuation could help. The set-up didn't get in the way or overzealous and I think that helped the forced wordplay, text battling and the assumed articulation made the second line in this bar forced, otherwise its a 5. 4/5
8 = Seems like this type of rhyme scheme is more fluid and impactful, more suspenseful with the way you lick the fingertips. I liked this the best of all the bars in your verse, it fed off the previous line in a congruent and smooth finish move. I think the set-up works cause its a real rhyme, not just a Schadenfreude'd linguistic lyricist. I'm giving you the benefit of the doubt about the Dzok, my newbie status act as my ghetto pass and assuming more background knowledge would only hit harder this was a good way to finish your verse. 5/5
24.5/
Verses
1 = Venom in them lines like you emotional. Beneficial in narrative form such as this. Rhymes are smooth and intuitive in both lines, set-up connects but the second line is not as fluid or effective with the personal insult. (The 1 is for 'the' love) 2/5Quote:
Originally Posted by Killing Spree
2 = Both lines could have been better on the flip. Very simplistic. Naysayers would say ''elevate' however the friend says you got a 2/5!
3 = Benefit of the doubt with the flashback personal attack but the rhymes were rhymes yo! 3/5
4 = Mediocre wordplays kept this from being what I like to call a dope rap rhyme, the set-up was real greedy money. 3/5
5 = I have been dumbfounded by this lyricists metaphorical metamorphosis, on the change thought process I got lost quick. For them other lames out there I mean I don't know what he means but again a different rhyme scheme true to the verse kept this on the 1. 2.5/5
6 = Set-up didn't work as that, could be flipped as a punch drink on the coach of their own league but I would neglect one syllable verbs that insinuate gun violence without something to percolate the violin case Mr. Mafia Man. 2/5
7 & 8 = 5's. . That the Friend think about how that thing rainbows. Double rainbows!! Three bar punches are cool, especially in the 1-2. This was the win for the Front Lines Belt says me. But I don't give a fubu about any of you or what you do with your love voodoo this text battle scene is hot and I'm the Friend.
Vote = Me
But I had it at a Friendly tie. Good Luck....
Dope title match fellas
KS, your first few bars were harsh man! lol you came wit it using the quotes to your advantage. I seen some people just post quotes or personals and not flip it into a punchline...but you did bruv. That round-about punch was clever as fuck. Well worded and nice set up. From there you finished strong.
Joe, your opener was fresh and you had some dope plays like the German car dealership punch and the BB king. But some spots it didn't feel like much impact. No doubt you did ur thing but compared to KS who IMO really dropped strong haymakers which connected...some of yours missed the mark. Not sure how many times you've both battled but wouldn't mind seeing a rematch.
Vote ks
For overall better punches and concepts around the punch, plus smoother set ups and personals.
4 votes Received
1..... Breakdown received...... and he voted for himself........ ok lets go more votes!!!
can this match get some votes!!!!!!
V Joe Boston cos he's my dude and killing spree is a bitch nigga.. he don't want these hands.
JB
Hes the type that dont watch boxing then say the floyd n pac fight was fixed
If his knowledge of any boxer brief hes telling ILL that Zelph is posting pics
nice nice
Quick Victory in a Tag match ur dissapointment couldnt be any realer
I didnt need Coup to show now your probably making bomb threats to the German Car Dealer
nice i like this
found out ur chick lets me kneel her and ur ready to give that ring
just talking about it gives you the blues but bitch hopes u die like BB King
meh
Battling is relatively not ur thing so that ego ill flatten it son
Hes like i beat u with every Bar Rhet then fag went out for drinks and got his hair done
eyyyy
His bitch needs some real fun he cant sastify her clearly
So when im ready to blast off she come to the Rocket close like a fucking Clippers series
meh
Ur not scary dangerous or threatening u aint harming by far
One shot from the Smith N Wesson will kill this fag at his favorite salad bar
okay
Ur mudering skills aint up to par Joe all about living up to danger for a reason
So u think ur blade get a piece Ovechkin im ending it like the Capitols Season
i see you
U drive hoopties that take a beating just letting those miles run
Claiming Dzokhars suck and u should get the death penalty just for riding one
damn
KS
I said...
Look @ this slob, kids bout the pussy - only cos he gooshy n soft
Ya u won the tag match, but fag that's the only time u been pushin for draws
really meh
Battling me s'like punchin ur own face, I'm bad for ya health
So just let killing spree end ya,B...like ya battle wit self
i don't understand this bar
This mans a wreck, I'll beat his prego hoe with my hands in text
One hook'll have her spittin out blood, in the same cup this retard tried handing fresh
maybe i'm missing something here too..
U burn through greedy money? False! This poor dude lame
So we'll light candles around joe the same way joo preyed
okay
& you'll be in a vegtable state, as soon as my fist takes course
Have a fam member die per punch, till there's none left to change yours
pretty dope
Every time we battle u get shot, now I'm driving u down n out
& next time we cross in'a section I'll show u what a round about
mm bars
U got a kid due any minute, fuck that baby host what I spits tarin
...Cut her gut while she grocery shopping
Than Put the insides inside a basket & show u the miscarriage
meeeh i think it was kind of forced
My wrist shot'll have ya chin rocked, U'll be droppin quick
& whoever sayin jofa real? I'll break their neck wit a hockey stick
okay i see you
mvgt/ Joe
I think it's because I don't understand some of KS's bars, but Joe had more stinging punches for me.
5 votes received
Killing Spree wins.