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10 Lines 24 Hours.. You are truly the biggest fuck boy on RB.. Maybe not off all time.. You're welcome.
check...Im droppin tonight faggot
Duke swinging at me in this battle, I straight ducked, now this bitch is missing me
He's missed so many punches in the past that journalists predicted he had muscular dystrophy,
Homie a child rapist and that's obviously the truth,
He throws kids down in his well, news casters identify him as the "fountain of youth"
Wine just mad cause cats ain't helping him, don't blame me, you ain't know me par,
The only time this "Wine" getting "Tips" is when he's working at his local bar,
I'll fuck up Sunny's dental till it shatters, none of his homies saving his back,
You'd think I'm referencing Metallica but Nothing Else Matters when your conscious is Fading To Black,
He complains about not getting enough subs on his channel, you were never ahead of your time,
And just remember one thing, like a ugly bitches year book, you'll never get signed
Len dont put in work. everything he writes makes him seem dense
dont even bother breaking your piggy bank.. ur shit still wont make sense
I see everything, you miss things under your own roof in plain sight
I have an acute sense of awareness, you have acute mom I fuck every night
im a craftsman in this rap shit..i'll beast all you fools
the only thing ur skilsaw is weakness like cheap carpenter tools
kid don't fuck with me again, I was your age at your birth
now I'm almost twice yours, like what ur girls says about my length and girth
comparing are skills? there's not a chance that your hurting me..
I got punches that will end Lens so quick you'll think i got lasix eye surgery
Duke swinging at me in this battle, I straight ducked, now this bitch is missing me
He's missed so many punches in the past that journalists predicted he had muscular dystrophy,
Not diggin this man, coulda used muscular dystrophy better then missing punches
Homie a child rapist and that's obviously the truth,
He throws kids down in his well, news casters identify him as the "fountain of youth"
See the journalists/ newscaster shit were wack IMO, fountain of youth is played but u coulda worked this better IMO
Wine just mad cause cats ain't helping him, don't blame me, you ain't know me par,
The only time this "Wine" getting "Tips" is when he's working at his local bar,
Ok
I'll fuck up Sunny's dental till it shatters, none of his homies saving his back,
You'd think I'm referencing Metallica but Nothing Else Matters when your conscious is Fading To Black,
Prolly ur best bar...
He complains about not getting enough subs on his channel, you were never ahead of your time,
And just remember one thing, like a ugly bitches year book, you'll never get signed
Wack... I mean us he tryna get signed?
Vs...
Len dont put in work. everything he writes makes him seem dense
dont even bother breaking your piggy bank.. ur shit still wont make sense
Nah cents/sense is too played bro..
I see everything, you miss things under your own roof in plain sight
I have an acute sense of awareness, you have acute mom I fuck every night
Lol, but thus is also very played wp..
im a craftsman in this rap shit..i'll beast all you fools
the only thing ur skilsaw is weakness like cheap carpenter tools
Coulda done this without a similie but skill saw is also played
kid don't fuck with me again, I was your age at your birth
now I'm almost twice yours, like what ur girls says about my length and girth
Coulda worded this alot better especially gettin lazy n using a similie..kinda fucked this up the way by set it up n shit
comparing are skills? there's not a chance that your hurting me..
I got punches that will end Lens so quick you'll think i got lasix eye surgery
This ur best bar...
Well gentle men... Not much going in this battle IMO.. Bad set ups n wording plus alot of played out concepts... Y'all just gotta try n figure out shit that ain't as easy cuz if it is it's most likely played.. That's word to hush... Woneo attempted wp n altho they were played at leadt he tied the set ups in there.. lenox had bad set ups But IMO it was lenoxs last 2 bars vs.. WineO last one, but the weird thing is I dug wines last one better than lenoxs combined so shit I got wine takin this barely in a battle that could go either way...stay up n keep at it y'all..this only me...
Vote wineO ...
Lenox,
Duke swinging at me in this battle, I straight ducked, now this bitch is missing me
He's missed so many punches in the past that journalists predicted he had muscular dystrophy,
^^^ Nice intro medi punch
Homie a child rapist and that's obviously the truth,
He throws kids down in his well, news casters identify him as the "fountain of youth"
^^ idk wat the reference is here but i think cud of been worded better, nice concept
Wine just mad cause cats ain't helping him, don't blame me, you ain't know me par,
The only time this "Wine" getting "Tips" is when he's working at his local bar,
^^ i see wat you were trying to achieve here but it was all forced and "know me par" wtf is that lol
I'll fuck up Sunny's dental till it shatters, none of his homies saving his back,
You'd think I'm referencing Metallica but Nothing Else Matters when your conscious is Fading To Black,
^^ don't like Metallica but i get the quote nah didn't work to stretched and no inner flow
He complains about not getting enough subs on his channel, you were never ahead of your time,
And just remember one thing, like a ugly bitches year book, you'll never get signed
^^ nice finisher there lad,, punch was light but effective
Vs
WineO
Len dont put in work. everything he writes makes him seem dense
dont even bother breaking your piggy bank.. ur shit still wont make sense
^^^ Whack pmsl real weak
I see everything, you miss things under your own roof in plain sight
I have an acute sense of awareness, you have acute mom I fuck every night
^^ nah badly worded and weird
im a craftsman in this rap shit..i'll beast all you fools
the only thing ur skilsaw is weakness like cheap carpenter tools
^^ not feelin this dude no effort
kid don't fuck with me again, I was your age at your birth
now I'm almost twice yours, like what ur girls says about my length and girth
^^ whack
comparing are skills? there's not a chance that your hurting me..
I got punches that will end Lens so quick you'll think i got lasix eye surgery
^^ i like wat u was trying to do here not very creative, but was ok
v Lenox
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Duke swinging at me in this battle, I straight ducked, now this bitch is missing me
He's missed so many punches in the past that journalists predicted he had muscular dystrophy,
nah weak n bad wording
Homie a child rapist and that's obviously the truth,
He throws kids down in his well, news casters identify him as the "fountain of youth"
this was ok
Wine just mad cause cats ain't helping him, don't blame me, you ain't know me par,
The only time this "Wine" getting "Tips" is when he's working at his local bar,
no.
I'll fuck up Sunny's dental till it shatters, none of his homies saving his back,
You'd think I'm referencing Metallica but Nothing Else Matters when your conscious is Fading To Black,
cool
He complains about not getting enough subs on his channel, you were never ahead of your time,
And just remember one thing, like a ugly bitches year book, you'll never get signed
ok
overall - had some ok concepts just wording them bar.. work on comin fresher. pause. u try fittin too many words in your lines so try to keep it simpler.
vs.
Len dont put in work. everything he writes makes him seem dense
dont even bother breaking your piggy bank.. ur shit still wont make sense
old
I see everything, you miss things under your own roof in plain sight
I have an acute sense of awareness, you have acute mom I fuck every night
ok flip
im a craftsman in this rap shit..i'll beast all you fools
the only thing ur skilsaw is weakness like cheap carpenter tools
ok concept bad wording
kid don't fuck with me again, I was your age at your birth
now I'm almost twice yours, like what ur girls says about my length and girth
no this was wack
comparing are skills? there's not a chance that your hurting me..
I got punches that will end Lens so quick you'll think i got lasix eye surgery
noooo
overall - u had some weak shit and basic lines that were misses. work on wording and creativity. the acute bar was ok but ive seen it so many times.
Lenox got this one barely.
vote - lenox.
Lenox- I felt your first to bars were choppy due to wording. Keep it more simple and get more creative. Your third bar was nice I felt it was smooth. The fade to black Metallica was cool but wording was off. Lose some words in there. Your year book punch was cool. But set up lacked
Your wording is fucked. Lose some unnecessary words to keep it simple. You had nice concepts but try to think of creating them in ways no one has done. Also try to make your first line tie into your punch some how.
Wine
Make sense? Really? I got scorned by fresh and pg for attempting that played shit. Your second bar was cool. Could have approached it differently to make it harder.. Skills aw was cool I thought. Nice job. Length n girth is played and worded badly tbh. Your closer was soft and played.
Overall you had some real played bars. Need to work on wording and getting more creative.
Overall I got LENOX taking this by not much. He was just more creative tbh. And that's it really
Stay up fellas
Duke swinging at me in this battle, I straight ducked, now this bitch is missing me
He's missed so many punches in the past that journalists predicted he had muscular dystrophy,
not feeling this.
Homie a child rapist and that's obviously the truth,
He throws kids down in his well, news casters identify him as the "fountain of youth"
not very creative could have done more w/ fountain of youth.
Wine just mad cause cats ain't helping him, don't blame me, you ain't know me par,
The only time this "Wine" getting "Tips" is when he's working at his local bar,
I don't no wtf par is seems thrown in thee to rhyme. Ill give u a jab for correlating the set p n punch and doing a personal.
I'll fuck up Sunny's dental till it shatters, none of his homies saving his back,
You'd think I'm referencing Metallica but Nothing Else Matters when your conscious is Fading To Black,
damn son u shoulda left dental without till after u coulda made some wordplay off that. This was ok mother jab tho.
He complains about not getting enough subs on his channel, you were never ahead of your time,
And just remember one thing, like a ugly bitches year book, you'll never get signed
nah not feelin..
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Len dont put in work. everything he writes makes him seem dense
dont even bother breaking your piggy bank.. ur shit still wont make sense
sense cents was played in 86 bro n it's not creative. Good attemp but that's a miss for me
I see everything, you miss things under your own roof in plain sight
I have an acute sense of awareness, you have acute mom I fuck every night
..wording was bad but it's iight I'll give a jab for this..
im a craftsman in this rap shit..i'll beast all you fools
the only thing ur skilsaw is weakness like cheap carpenter tools
a metaphor would have made this better than w/ a simile not feelin this
kid don't fuck with me again, I was your age at your birth
now I'm almost twice yours, like what ur girls says about my length and girth
wack
comparing are skills? there's not a chance that your hurting me..
I got punches that will end Lens so quick you'll think i got lasix eye surgery
this was much better lotb
.well this was close battle but I got two quotables each but wines lasic eye surgery was lotb IMO so I gotta give it to him.
v/WineO
@Lenox two voting links
added poll.
@ILLunatic I'm pretty sure this doofus added the poll wrong again. You wanna explain to him what he's doing wrong cause I have no idea lol
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Originally Posted by Fresh
He's just adding a poll instead of creating a new battle thread & merging them.
Fixed.
Duke swinging at me in this battle, I straight ducked, now this bitch is missing me
He's missed so many punches in the past that journalists predicted he had muscular dystrophy
Nothing here. I see where you TRIED TO GO but the wording/execution was terrible.
Homie a child rapist and that's obviously the truth,
He throws kids down in his well, news casters identify him as the "fountain of youth"
Seen a lotof fountain of youth concepts flipped but this one is by far probably the worst attempt. Not to mention, the wording/execution came off statement'ish. No type of harshness to this at all.
Wine just mad cause cats ain't helping him, don't blame me, you ain't know me par,
The only time this "Wine" getting "Tips" is when he's working at his local bar,
Not sure how WINE gets TIPS, but w/e. As I stated in the 1st bar, cool attempt but wording and execution was a lot better, just the concept was forced.
I'll fuck up Sunny's dental till it shatters, none of his homies saving his back,
You'd think I'm referencing Metallica but Nothing Else Matters when your conscious is Fading To Black,
Digging the creativity here but lacks substance. Probably your best bar, tho thus far.
He complains about not getting enough subs on his channel, you were never ahead of your time,
And just remember one thing, like a ugly bitches year book, you'll never get signed
Cool flip on an old concept but weak and way to generic of a "punch".
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Len dont put in work. everything he writes makes him seem dense
dont even bother breaking your piggy bank.. ur shit still wont make sense
You know this concept is played as fuck, no matter how you flip it.
I see everything, you miss things under your own roof in plain sight
I have an acute sense of awareness, you have acute mom I fuck every night
I've seen the "Acute/A cute" wordplay done a lot. I believe Letterman tried to pull one of these off recently or not to long ago. His was better.
im a craftsman in this rap shit..i'll beast all you fools
the only thing ur skilsaw is weakness like cheap carpenter tools
Should have kept as a metaphor. Could have been dope. The simile killed the impact, IMO.
kid don't fuck with me again, I was your age at your birth
now I'm almost twice yours, like what ur girls says about my length and girth
Stupid.
comparing are skills? there's not a chance that your hurting me..
I got punches that will end Lens so quick you'll think i got lasix eye surgery
Self hype with a nice name flip. Cool. Your best bar, as well as LOTB.
OVERALL: Pretty awful battle, not going to lie but w/e. Seems both have elevated soem what from the last battles I've read from both battlers. All in all, I got WINE-O taking this w/ the LOTB, IMO. Lenox had nothing really worth quoting. The creative Metallica reference was cool but the bar needed work as far as substance/harshness for a more solid impact. Keep writing, fellas.
v/WineO
Fixed.
@ILLunatic I created a new battle with a poll and just merged them, had a poll when I checked.. I know it did because I went back in to edit the votes into it.
Free post: what's the score for this battle?
Duke swinging at me in this battle, I straight ducked, now this bitch is missing me
He's missed so many punches in the past that journalists predicted he had muscular dystrophy,
nah
Homie a child rapist and that's obviously the truth,
He throws kids down in his well, news casters identify him as the "fountain of youth"
corny tbh
Wine just mad cause cats ain't helping him, don't blame me, you ain't know me par,
The only time this "Wine" getting "Tips" is when he's working at his local bar,
lol brought back memories of when I started battling
I'll fuck up Sunny's dental till it shatters, none of his homies saving his back,
You'd think I'm referencing Metallica but Nothing Else Matters when your conscious is Fading To Black,
ehhhh
He complains about not getting enough subs on his channel, you were never ahead of your time,
And just remember one thing, like a ugly bitches year book, you'll never get signed
once again flashback to 2005
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Len dont put in work. everything he writes makes him seem dense
dont even bother breaking your piggy bank.. ur shit still wont make sense
weak opener
I see everything, you miss things under your own roof in plain sight
I have an acute sense of awareness, you have acute mom I fuck every night
lol
im a craftsman in this rap shit..i'll beast all you fools
the only thing ur skilsaw is weakness like cheap carpenter tools
weak wp
kid don't fuck with me again, I was your age at your birth
now I'm almost twice yours, like what ur girls says about my length and girth
lol
comparing are skills? there's not a chance that your hurting me..
I got punches that will end Lens so quick you'll think i got lasix eye surgery
weak
Didn't like anything from Lenox tbh I thought wineo was funny with his
Tay tay who's your vote exactly? It sounded like me..
That makes it 4-3, I'm up
Good battle dude.. I mean for our level.. Got props for you now
VsQuote:
Originally Posted by Lenox
Lenox had a bunch of punches that were stretching for a connection where as wineo barely had attempts. Weak battle but I felt Lenox barely edged it.Quote:
Originally Posted by WineO
Vote - Lenox
Lenox
Duke swinging at me in this battle, I straight ducked, now this bitch is missing me
He's missed so many punches in the past that journalists predicted he had muscular dystrophy,
I felt u coudlve incoperated something differently with the muscular dystrophy reference
Homie a child rapist and that's obviously the truth,
He throws kids down in his well, news casters identify him as the "fountain of youth"
this was an ok flip but u didn't have to put news casters in there it took away the sting from the whoe punch
Wine just mad cause cats ain't helping him, don't blame me, you ain't know me par,
The only time this "Wine" getting "Tips" is when he's working at his local bar,
played nameplay
I'll fuck up Sunny's dental till it shatters, none of his homies saving his back,
You'd think I'm referencing Metallica but Nothing Else Matters when your conscious is Fading To Black
this was pretty creative I liked the wordplay and reference usage
He complains about not getting enough subs on his channel, you were never ahead of your time,
And just remember one thing, like a ugly bitches year book, you'll never get signed
ok not a bad metaphore it was straight to point though as far as sting it was a decent jab
Wine O
Len dont put in work. everything he writes makes him seem dense
dont even bother breaking your piggy bank.. ur shit still wont make sense
sorry man way played I mean before text battling was even thought of lol
I see everything, you miss things under your own roof in plain sight
I have an acute sense of awareness, you have acute mom I fuck every night
lol I liked this flip
im a craftsman in this rap shit..i'll beast all you fools
the only thing ur skilsaw is weakness like cheap carpenter tools
played wordplay
kid don't fuck with me again, I was your age at your birth
now I'm almost twice yours, like what ur girls says about my length and girth
this was used before
comparing are skills? there's not a chance that your hurting me..
I got punches that will end Lens so quick you'll think i got lasix eye surgery
played nameplay
WineO got to the the content most of ur verse was played concepts sorry man. Lenox slight improvement man but still have to work on that wording man that fountain of youth bar could've had so much potential my dude. Metallica reference was dope and ur closer was ok. WineO had the acute wp I liked and I felt Lenox had the better attempt at concept decisions.
V/Lenox
Fresh close this please.. I edged this barely