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Originally Posted by Professor Frost
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Originally Posted by Kungpow
Alright, goodluck @kungpow
Due Monday at Midnight, PST
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Originally Posted by Professor Frost
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Originally Posted by Kungpow
Alright, goodluck @kungpow
Due Monday at Midnight, PST
Check, check. Protect ur neck goodluck
I will for sure drop around noon Tuesday @Professor Frost
End Of The World
Once the dust settled, I awakened..
under rusted metal framework
from a hundred year old atrium
as I lay there with a blank stare
the day became apparent
an errant sunray made its way through
so I followed it back out where it led in
no idea what would be found at the end
looking around the area left
was very depressing, barely a desert
resembling a wasteland, acres desolate
except for remnants of faded wreckage
the devastation made it evidently sad
that death was eminent
end of existence, no signs of life
im the only survivor alive to witness it
prior in time, scientists finds werent heeded
global warming was a fore-warning diety
all the years of vehement burning of fossil fuel
as earth rotated by the sun, caused a pull
resulting in seismic activity throughout the world
tectonic plates shifted under ocean floors around the globe
setting off massive quakes,volcanic eruptions, and tsunami storms
that engulfed every continent formed
like earth opened up for a moment
just to swallow itself whole
now I'm all alone, in a place I call home
I've never spoken before, these are only thoughts of my own
I am....
silence
This "End of the World" shit ain't Nuttin'
by Professor Frost
There's levels to this shit young boyyyyy...haha..
Illuminati.
End of the World.
Frost Season...
Yeah
Let it be known the souls of humanity have laid to death
Slain the rest & paid the debt of air, to save the breathe-
Of Earth's atmosphere -- some body ask heaven's Jesus is it clear?
Layer after layer corrupt like a fresh mixed copy of Yeezus was here
Previous beer, weed, codeine, pills -- X, use to keep us sane;
Years into the future they had to test troops to reap the same-
Escapism tactics -- when withdrew, made us monkeys do natural back flips,
Like we had reversed time's stream of evolution; performing acrobatics
It's in our natural habit, to see sin & go grab it,
Till the truth seeps in through forms of static,
That disrupt our brain's airwaves; deconstruct society's stairways
Until we've stitched a blanket of ignorance, fabric by fabric
Fuck religion, embrace God, or choose the proof
Or let your weak mind have politicians go eschew ya views
Either way, we're all going to hell; we were born for sin
Tattered philosophies trickle down into twirls; torn in wind
Let those big wig fuckers hide in bunkers; thinking they mastered fate
Meanwhile, I'll be just about to masturbate
The serene silence, sends shocks of calm that capture hate
So, that these last moments of survival can be elastic -- wait
I said, these last moments of survival can be elastic -- wait..
At least when the world ends, happiness can be captured -- late
When this lifetime ends, I'll be the one that wins;
Didn't need drugs or false beliefs to finish this plastered race
When the world wages wars; bomb explodes & the sky pours
I'll release some knuckle children with a smile on my fractured face
Peace.
Up yours
Yup
Up.
wooahh nahh nahh Imma take my time bihhhQuote:
Originally Posted by Wordz AhGod.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...Equal-VOTE-NOW!!
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...OPEN-FOR-VOTES
My vote goes to Kung. Very descriptive man!
@MainStream vote DQed please explain your vote better
~I Am MainStream~
~But I'm Not Mainstream~
I know some of these @ names have been changed but I just took these straight from the SS roster/rankings. These battles have been opened for months, we would appreciate if we could get some votes from actual topical heads so these battles can be closed.
@143 6-2 @Day-day 4-1 @Professor Frost 8-2 @Dia 4-2
@Mordycai 6-4 @CLA919 3-4 @The Great Father 2-4 @44864962 0-0 @miracle 0-0 @Soul Slayer 0-0 @Kayge 5-0
@xXFresHXx 5-5 @Antihero 3-2 @Know-It-All 3-3 @Terrance Joekerr 2-1
@Fatrick Swayze 2-3 @Kontext 2-3 @Alphabet 2-3 @Skully Hendrix 2-3 @Northern Beggar 1-0 @oatmeal 1-0 @Baron Mynd 1-1 @Brandon Cee 1-1 @Illustrious. 1-1 @NYCSPITZ 1-1 @PTheBeast 1-1 @Split Eight 1-1 @whitesmoke96 1-1 @DEV 1-2 @Wicked. 1-2 @Switch. 0-0 @Nigma 0-1 @Tropical 0-1 @Dyl 0-1 @^Eclipse 0-1 @Genocide. 0-1 @J Fly The Don 0-1 @Mac. 0-1 @Requiem 0-1 @The Business 0-1 @Witty. 0-1
@W.isdom I.s L.ife so L.iv 0-1 @JERMZ $G$0-2 @.Mimic 0-2
@Ridiculous 0-2 @Rosetti Frost 0-2 @The Real Spit
0-2 @Tragedian. 0-2 @Zen the Dude 0-2 @Phalanx 0-3 @$The Goodness$ 0-3
I'm not one to read/vote on topicals but tryign to do the forum sections and the writers a favor here. Sick of seeing this shit in FL, tbh. So everyone get the fuck off of your high horse and help close this wack ass battle.
Best part of your verse. I felt like you were very basic with the topic, actually. Your rhyme scheme/end rhymes were HORRIBLE and a lot of your stanza's through me off greatly, tbr. I think you could have did more with your end rhymes to help the lines transition a lot smoother because for me, they did not. Not sure what accent you have but this piece hardly rhymed. And if I'm wrong? Then oh well, this is FL and I'm going based off of who I felt executed the topic better and rhymes better because I am not a topicalist and could careless. Anyways...Quote:
all the years of vehement burning of fossil fuel
as earth rotated by the sun, caused a pull
resulting in seismic activity throughout the world
tectonic plates shifted under ocean floors around the globe
setting off massive quakes,volcanic eruptions, and tsunami storms
that engulfed every continent formed
vs
That shit was nice. I think you did more with this topic and actually enjoyed the read, tbh. No type of dope rhyme scheme or nothing but you at least rhymes your end rhymes. A lot of nice visuals/imagery as well in your verse. I liked how you transitioned your topic as well and capitalized on it. In the parts quoted, I felt as if I was the person you were seeing through the eyes off which IMO is dope. Not a bad drop, dude/chick w/e the fuck you are, lol...Quote:
Previous beer, weed, codeine, pills -- X, use to keep us sane;
Years into the future they had to test troops to reap the same-
Escapism tactics -- when withdrew, made us monkeys do natural back flips,
Like we had reversed time's stream of evolution; performing acrobatics
It's in our natural habit, to see sin & go grab it,
Till the truth seeps in through forms of static,
also
Either way, we're all going to hell; we were born for sin
Tattered philosophies trickle down into twirls; torn in wind
Let those big wig fuckers hide in bunkers; thinking they mastered fate
Meanwhile, I'll be just about to masturbate
The serene silence, sends shocks of calm that capture hate
So, that these last moments of survival can be elastic -- wait
I said, these last moments of survival can be elastic -- wait..
At least when the world ends, happiness can be captured -- late
When this lifetime ends, I'll be the one that wins;
Didn't need drugs or false beliefs to finish this plastered race
When the world wages wars; bomb explodes & the sky pours
I'll release some knuckle children with a smile on my fractured face
Anyways, I have to vote for Frost with an overall better piece, IMO.
v/Frost
I'ma keep this short.
v/Frost
Nah but seriously this was a decent battle but kungpow got out written in this battle. It seems Frost had a better understanding of the topic and delivered his verse with alot of metaphors and shit thaty really spiced his verse up.. Kungpow was good but I feel his flow was off in some parts, and also he was to blunt with his wording... meaning he didn't use enough literary devices and didn't use em in the right places. Good battle boys
v/Frost
uppin
to me this verse had the vocabulary - but imagery also was dim. what i quoted above are your best lines. and i feel like almost your only ones. there was parts in your story that didn't add up which made it hard to get what you were talking about.. and example is thisQuote:
Originally Posted by Professor Frost
&Quote:
Fuck religion, embrace God, or choose the proof
Or let your weak mind have politicians go eschew ya views
Either way, we're all going to hell; we were born for sin
Quote:
Let it be known the souls of humanity have laid to death
Slain the rest & paid the debt of air, to save the breathe-
Of Earth's atmosphere -- some body ask heaven's Jesus is it clear?
was this a religious piece or not??? so it was confusing me a bit.. although it was a good read with rhyme schemes you had. i dont think you brought enough to edge this battle.
v/kungpow
My fault not sure what happened to the feed i left kung but here it is again
ending dope. but to me this was quite a boring read. i think if you incorporated more imagery describing things and emotions in your piece it would have made it more affective. the lines i quoted were your best, and if the rest of your piece had imagery like this quote it would have been dope. the ending was cool though. overall rhyme scheme was cool, flow was cool.. but like i said it lacked imageryQuote:
Originally Posted by kungpow
overall an ok piece to read..
that was to add to my vote
This battle been up wayy to long. Frost wins 2-1.