Thread of life (thats what the piece is called)

Cats these days are forgetting what it takes to be a dope lyricist,
Elevation can be achieved but in due time like the time it takes to get form the bottom to the top of a pyramid,
And just like the top then yo points are sharp and so is yo mentality,
And then it’s actually, increasing yo intellect makes emcees think that what you spit isn’t about reality,
And when your IQ goes ova 150, that’s when you solve every problem mathematically,
And that’s the only thing that keeps you stray from insanity,
Then your thoughts become so strong they get felt universally,
Reaches across seas breaches over 1000 foot mountains,
Once you master life you get immortality like you found the youth fountain,
Murdered so many Mcs I’ve stopped counting,
I’m like a mutha fuckin particle that doesn’t need to charge-up,
N when I strike I barge-up, unexpected getting emcees with they guard down un-protected,
My whole body layered in Teflon so yo lyrical hollows get deflected,
And I don’t eat emcees I just devour they power,
Making the situation further mo tense, weaken their defense and increasing my strength,
And escalate the length, of the thread of my life span,
Lyrical heat changing emcee’s colors like a sun tan,
I’m so evil while I’m sub-conscious I knock Mc’s unconscious,
When I blast off areas get cleared like when a Space Shuttle launches,
If speed and light can only be slowed down by the force of a planet’s gravity,
If we lived on Mars compared to earth wouldn’t everything be delayed no matter how advanced technologically,
We still wouldn’t have immunity, still wouldn’t have a perfect community,
Still wouldn’t be able to control humanity, and probably,
Be the reason of our own mockery, the entire structure or society,
Is as fragile as Chinese crockery, or clay pottery,
Anyways it’s the words un-spoken that will get the fine thread of life broken.

i dunno i think its not that good i didnt edit any bit of it.......

stop sleepin

DIZNAM...that shit was hot...loving the multies and wordplay in that right there...that piece was straight rollin on chromed scooters on 20s type shit namsayin...lovely written....wahid

hahaha lol.....thnx man that was some quick shit i typed up after i got back from school.......yo hopefully i'll be in yo 20 inch chrome team na'mean lol i mean A.I

STOP SLEEPIN this only got 1 fuckin REPLY

my bad ive been busy,but yer i jsut read this,maybe thats why im so fuckin stupid,coz i cant do math...i cant even add letters with more then one digit with out confusing myself ahhaha....i liked it the whole way through trill,nice multis and shit throught,liked the pyramid lines at the start and the evil sub concious knockin mc`s unconcious line,that made me laugh....i thought maybe the flow feel off a couple of times,you had a long sentences there with the pyramid shit,and then a small one about the point of it and the mentality anhmean....happened a couple of times,but i mean alot of the mc`s in australia do that ive noticed,coz their flow is slower then some mcs in different countries nahmean,maybe tis jsut your style...anywya i liked it trill,

And escalate the length, of the thread of my life span,
Lyrical heat changing emcee’s colors like a sun tan

^^^ i liked those bars dun...

keep uppin,fuck the sleepers....

yo dawg ......that was tite i liked the werdplay
overall thats was hott ! i give u a 10/10

Atetrack define' yo my flow might seem slower but i can rap as fast as twista no joke i'm a recordin sum shit soon peeps watch out i'm commin lol..................UPPIN

UPPIN

Some hot shit u spit there , , my favorite lines were
Cats these days are forgetting what it takes to be a dope lyricist,
Elevation can be achieved but in due time like the time it takes to get form the bottom to the top of a pyramid,
^^^^^This shit was Madd Ill , , ,, Wordplay was Sick , , content was Riding

thnx man....now if only IF peeps stopped sleeping

I liked it......good multi's and metas....flow was WAAAAAAYY off....at least in my head......seemed to me like you couldn't figure out which topic you wanted to spit about...wack MC's who need to elevate.........bragging bout yourself.....or how bad the world is..........so I say choose one and stay with it......

overall I liked it
7/10

lololl u saiyin my shit is wack son lololol......lmao i swear this is the first time anyone has every had a negative comment in my thread.....

"And when your IQ goes ova 150, that’s when you solve every problem mathematically,
And that’s the only thing that keeps you stray from insanity,
Then your thoughts become so strong they get felt universally" haha i swear that was me being angry about the world, or prazing myself.................herbs these days think they have freedom of speech lol.............na just playin i guess this wasnt 1 of yo gangsta posts dawg lol

And when your IQ goes ova 150, that’s when you solve every problem mathematically,
And that’s the only thing that keeps you stray from insanity,

dope rhyme....

overall, sick wordplay and metaphors.
we need more posts like this.

9/10

thank u.....and see people the thing is that's fact not fiction, just like most things i spit about its just herbs forget that there's a difference between those two words...........UPPIN YOU BASTARDS

Hold up man......you wanna call me an herb....that's cool....internet beef is fucking stupid...but you wanted opinions and you got mine......I said I liked it......hell you said yourself you didn't like it....vocab was on point....flow wasn't....and right after the youth fountain line...you went into your boasting.......then....after the planets gravity line.....you went into talking bout the world....read your shit man....I'm not making this up

I'm sorry that someone is honest enough to tell you something ain't working.....maybe I should just kiss your ass cause you have so many more posts than me? Nah....not my style.........don't post something if you don't want criticism on it man...seriously

ok ok clam down...lol internet beef lmao thats just stupidity fine fine to each his own...UPPIN

This was aight,,

it seemed a lil choppy at times though..

content was good..

rhyme scheme..blah..

overall an average drop..

pEace
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Reaches across seas breaches over 1000 foot mountains,
Once you master life you get immortality like you found the youth fountain,
Murdered so many Mcs I’ve stopped counting,
I’m like a mutha fuckin particle that doesn’t need to charge-up,
N when I strike I barge-up, unexpected getting emcees with they guard down un-protected,
My whole body layered in Teflon so yo lyrical hollows get deflected,

Very ill drop

thnx ...............UPPIN

this was nice, im not really felling the topic cause its played but you did it right, everything was on point but if the topic wasnt played it would have been better.

check out mine "the knowledge"

alrite
UPPIN STILL