Adrenalyn vs. yung gun

10 lines 1 1/2 hours
i checkin and dropin

hem hem ...

You about to be undone yung gun betta run for cova
Adrenalyn is here blow you away wit my old revolva
Filed the safty down got myself a hairy trigga
Im like jack da rippa poppin off a London nigga
Spillin yung guns yung blood on the streets of ontarieo
First act of violence in Canadian history, yo
Thump thump goes your heart that’s Adrenalyn dawg
Runnin circles around you like im Sonic the Hedgehog
Put the gun down bitch an pick up a pen
Cuz I don’t think you can define - synonym

iight check

yooo

they call me yung gun fo reason, spreyin your ass like its huntin season
yo bitch commin to me cause i am pleasin, cause im pleasin
the trigga gonna squeeze, fill ya wit lead from ya head to ya knees
you say you the hedgehog, but ima rottie dog, bout to eat this hedgehog
im untracable like tryna be detected in fog, you butt fuck males i seen it on ya video blog
i come in widd the blue flag yeah nigga crippin, lookin at you like i see red bout to empty the clip
but i got the bookbag, war paint, n ammo, k over the shoulder, two berrettas, you fuckin wit me nigga im ramo, nothin but a bitch ass nigga i ride ona homoicide ina lambo

thats only 8 lines and your no supposed to feed

jst add 2 lines and forget the feeding

oh my god. horrible.

iight

fuckin widda nigga emptyin holltips, and fillin clips
fillin ya dome full of chrome, commin in ya house n cummin all over ya momsz chromesomes

theres my two lines

and yo rizzo u wanna talk shit how bout i merke ur ass nigga

hey no hate, im just tryn to follow the rules admins will bann u

votes

Breakdown.

Punches: Tie.

Personals: None.

Creativity: None.

Consistancy: None.

Metaphors: None.

Multi's: None.

This battle was weak. I think you both need to be more creative and not so generic with your punches. Most of what I seen from both was just too pre-school and original with absolutely no creativity. My advice would be though to keep battling and read others battles who are well respected on this site, and look at the key points of battle; look at: what made them stand out, what people felt were their hardest bars and why. We all had to start from somewhere, good luck to both.



Vote: Tie.

thanks for the advice broo uppin

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Both were pretty weak, but i think Adren had the right idea. Even though both need to work on punches, flow, vocab, complexity, and all that shit, i think Adren was the winner here. The only thing Yung Gun had over Adren was that some of Adren's lines didn't really rhyme. But yung gun still got his ass kaned here.

V/Adren

thanks for the votes

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YG, i want you to PM me. I've been reading more and more of your battles and you got potential dude but you just need a little guidance for examplem your verse was weak your trying to write a song, instead of a battle verse dude Adrenalyne ive seen you drop way better dude but in this battle you did enough to secure the win

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...797/index.html
^hit that

Both werent that great, i thought adrenalyn took it- Good job playa

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well shit my opponent has been banned 4 biting
what do i do now?

?votes? i guess?

well shit my opponent has been banned 4 biting
what do i do now?

?votes?... i guess?

how do i get a hold of a mod to close this battle

in to vote for ad

both was wack w/ no punches
jus gun talk n empty threats
yung, ya flow was choppy n didn't read well, i think my shit comes out like that too sometimes too mang, jus gotta work at it
out of the 2, gotta give it 2 ad

adrenalyn wins