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16 lines due before midnight tomorrow cause i gotta go to work
checkin
word midight tomorrow it is
well i'm battling a vet so i'mma start strong and finish big
with these bars? he closer to getting 8 than Kratos in his sig
am i facing Ancel? King? Mars? tell me what's this hater's name
vs me? well you better play it com...
...since God of War is a one player game
i'm on a 3 battle win streak, i advise you to forfeit this one
& this battle the way i planet, Mars can be the 4th to get sun'd
i'm Zeus with the name spoofs so i know this geeks philosophy
he's going from LLL to FL...
...so Mars wanting war is greek mythology
i'm a breath of fresh while his lines stuck in the past, get recent son
or resent son, back to your pack, take him out of Orbit like a piece of gum
yeah take him out, i see him, the rifle scope vision is distinct
addvantage points and bullets leave him leaking like a kitchen sink
everything i write goes hard, check the state, i Keystone like PA
and i'm out here passing bars like a lawyer...
...so i don't worry bout the DA*
he spits lunar shit, if you don't understand i'll explain it to you soon
cause everything he spits is twice as ass...
...cause Mars has two moons
*incase we got the unintelligent in here i used DA as in district attorney/crew reference Distinct Advantage
due date extension until tomorrow midnight
yeah ill drop soon, my bad i fell asleep n forgot
Chuck's in way above is his head, his days are numbered as far as writing those..
and as far as hooks and lines, he sees mine and just starts biting both
hoe, who you think you are? you'll get smashed and destroyed like it's a curse,
and we don't say what's up, chuck....that's our natural reaction to your verse.
faggot, stop playin' ya self. them lines are weak and stale, get some style punk
bitch you aint foamin at the mouth... just got your faggot ass bf riled up
your styles what? the worst. and we know it, do you ever see us quote it?
if we do say you got a 9/10.....it's the chance that somebody else wrote it..
bitch im gloatin and im boastin....there's no need for this faggot to act like he's hot
& it woulda never took all 16 of your lines for you to realize you've been dropped
bitch i'm blazin', and chuck's lines are the whackest we've seen in a while
to put it lightly- i'd have to borrow his whack ass wordplay and his style
i'm wild. go figure, while he sits in front of the computer all fucking say getting fatter
i handle what's on my plate... and treat chuck like any other one of the platters.
and you've never seen a pussy, even ya chick wants herself a new BITCH!
so if you EVER give the penetrate, it's probably just whackness or noobish.
16
haha i was thinking bout a pen-a-trait line before, good drop, & g/l
vote up peeps and leave links
Vote Mars.
ok..chuck first
intro was not worded well
the 1 player game ish was ok
3th to get sund was mehish
greek mythology was ok
the put of orbit could have been
worded a bit better...the kitchen
sink ish was mehish..
DA personal was ok
two moons ish was meh
I've seen you come alot harder than
that chuck...seems u tried too many
plays on his name that just didnt
quite connect well enough
next is mars
into was decent
reaction to his verse had a solid
nameplay in it..havent seen that
one before...
riled up was ok
chance someone else wrote it
ish was mehish
been dropped was meh
borrow his style ish was ok
one of the platters was ok
closer was dope, good wordplay
Ok... I'm in ancels crew, but i'm gonna break this down very fairly and won't poll a vote unless both sides agree to allow me to.
ChuckM
well i'm battling a vet so i'mma start strong and finish big
with these bars? he closer to getting 8 than Kratos in his sig
-Badly woeded. Meh
am i facing Ancel? King? Mars? tell me what's this hater's name
vs me? well you better play it com...
...since God of War is a one player game
-Not very hard hitting, but creative so Ok
i'm on a 3 battle win streak, i advise you to forfeit this one
& this battle the way i planet, Mars can be the 4th to get sun'd
-lol okay
i'm Zeus with the name spoofs so i know this geeks philosophy
he's going from LLL to FL...
...so Mars wanting war is greek mythology
-nah
i'm a breath of fresh while his lines stuck in the past, get recent son
or resent son, back to your pack, take him out of Orbit like a piece of gum
-okish
yeah take him out, i see him, the rifle scope vision is distinct
addvantage points and bullets leave him leaking like a kitchen sink
-nice
everything i write goes hard, check the state, i Keystone like PA
and i'm out here passing bars like a lawyer...
...so i don't worry bout the DA*
-Meh at best
he spits lunar shit, if you don't understand i'll explain it to you soon
cause everything he spits is twice as ass...
...cause Mars has two moons
-Pretty dope IMO
Mars
Chuck's in way above is his head, his days are numbered as far as writing those..
and as far as hooks and lines, he sees mine and just starts biting both
-lol ok
hoe, who you think you are? you'll get smashed and destroyed like it's a curse,
and we don't say what's up, chuck....that's our natural reaction to your verse.
I used the Up chuck idea before, but different concept here, so nice
faggot, stop playin' ya self. them lines are weak and stale, get some style punk
bitch you aint foamin at the mouth... just got your faggot ass bf riled up
nah
your styles what? the worst. and we know it, do you ever see us quote it?
if we do say you got a 9/10.....it's the chance that somebody else wrote it..
lol nice, but Chuck is the most original writer in RB IMO...
bitch im gloatin and im boastin....there's no need for this faggot to act like he's hot
& it woulda never took all 16 of your lines for you to realize you've been dropped
nah
bitch i'm blazin', and chuck's lines are the whackest we've seen in a while
to put it lightly- i'd have to borrow his whack ass wordplay and his style
ok-ish
i'm wild. go figure, while he sits in front of the computer all fucking day getting fatter
i handle what's on my plate... and treat chuck like any other one of the platters.
nah not feelin'
and you've never seen a pussy, even ya chick wants herself a new BITCH!
so if you EVER give the penetrate, it's probably just whackness or noobish.
lol ok, lil forced though
I gotta say this is much closer than it should have been. Ancel, Mars, King... I don't think you tried particularly hard and a few of your bars came quite statementish to me. Chuck had more originality and better concepts in my opinion. Although the nameplay became predictible after a while i honestly think he took this. I liked both your closers by the way... lol some kinda dope shit there.
So yeah. Vote - Chuck. If i recieve a message from both of you saying i can vote, I'll poll it. Good drop chuck, Stay up
idc what you do as far as polling vote, only problem i have is the feedback for my verse was better then for his, yet your voting for him...
meh
Ok
lol ok
nah
ok
nice
meh
dope
VS
lol ok
nice
nah
nice concept, but the punch was false
okish
nah
ok - forced.
^^
Not really =\ I wouldn't vote against you unless i thought it was fair.
However, i'll see how others vote before i poll. If i get accused of that voting ring ish again ima shoot myself.. too much hassle lol.
i'm a breath of fresh while his lines stuck in the past, get recent son
or resent son, back to your pack, take him out of Orbit like a piece of gum
he spits lunar shit, if you don't understand i'll explain it to you soon
cause everything he spits is twice as ass...
...cause Mars has two moons
V
hoe, who you think you are? you'll get smashed and destroyed like it's a curse,
and we don't say what's up, chuck....that's our natural reaction to your verse.
and you've never seen a pussy, even ya chick wants herself a new BITCH!
so if you EVER give the penetrate, it's probably just whackness or noobish.
this was definately a good battle but i feel Chuck took this, even though his wording was off at times. there was ALOT of nameplay on his part which did thier part. MArs/Ancel was cool but i dont feel that it was hard hitting
V/ Chuck
well i'm battling a vet so i'mma start strong and finish big
with these bars? he closer to getting 8 than Kratos in his sig
Good concept worded badly
am i facing Ancel? King? Mars? tell me what's this hater's name
vs me? well you better play it com...
...since God of War is a one player game
Ok
i'm on a 3 battle win streak, i advise you to forfeit this one
& this battle the way i planet, Mars can be the 4th to get sun'd
Meh
i'm Zeus with the name spoofs so i know this geeks philosophy
he's going from LLL to FL...
...so Mars wanting war is greek mythology
Meh
i'm a breath of fresh while his lines stuck in the past, get recent son
or resent son, back to your pack, take him out of Orbit like a piece of gum
ok
yeah take him out, i see him, the rifle scope vision is distinct
addvantage points and bullets leave him leaking like a kitchen sink
decent
everything i write goes hard, check the state, i Keystone like PA
and i'm out here passing bars like a lawyer...
...so i don't worry bout the DA*
Cool
he spits lunar shit, if you don't understand i'll explain it to you soon
cause everything he spits is twice as ass...
...cause Mars has two moons
Good closer
VS
Chuck's in way above is his head, his days are numbered as far as writing those..
and as far as hooks and lines, he sees mine and just starts biting both
lol ok
hoe, who you think you are? you'll get smashed and destroyed like it's a curse,
and we don't say what's up, chuck....that's our natural reaction to your verse.
ight
faggot, stop playin' ya self. them lines are weak and stale, get some style punk
bitch you aint foamin at the mouth... just got your faggot ass bf riled up
meh
your styles what? the worst. and we know it, do you ever see us quote it?
if we do say you got a 9/10.....it's the chance that somebody else wrote it..
nice
bitch im gloatin and im boastin....there's no need for this faggot to act like he's hot
& it woulda never took all 16 of your lines for you to realize you've been dropped
Good
bitch i'm blazin', and chuck's lines are the whackest we've seen in a while
to put it lightly- i'd have to borrow his whack ass wordplay and his style
ok
i'm wild. go figure, while he sits in front of the computer all fucking say getting fatter
i handle what's on my plate... and treat chuck like any other one of the platters.
ight
and you've never seen a pussy, even ya chick wants herself a new BITCH!
so if you EVER give the penetrate, it's probably just whackness or noobish.
meh closer
This was pretty close IMO Mars probablly could of came harder then he did here. Chuck had some good lines in this but overal I think mars was more consistant with his verse
V/Mars
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...085/index.html
well i'm battling a vet so i'mma start strong and finish big
with these bars? he closer to getting 8 than Kratos in his sig
-8??? doesnt make sense
am i facing Ancel? King? Mars? tell me what's this hater's name
vs me? well you better play it com...
...since God of War is a one player game
-pretty decent word play
i'm on a 3 battle win streak, i advise you to forfeit this one
& this battle the way i planet, Mars can be the 4th to get sun'd
-good
i'm Zeus with the name spoofs so i know this geeks philosophy
he's going from LLL to FL...
...so Mars wanting war is greek mythology
-very good
i'm a breath of fresh while his lines stuck in the past, get recent son
or resent son, back to your pack, take him out of Orbit like a piece of gum
-pretty good
yeah take him out, i see him, the rifle scope vision is distinct
addvantage points and bullets leave him leaking like a kitchen sink
-bad
everything i write goes hard, check the state, i Keystone like PA
and i'm out here passing bars like a lawyer...
...so i don't worry bout the DA*
-not good
he spits lunar shit, if you don't understand i'll explain it to you soon
cause everything he spits is twice as ass...
...cause Mars has two moons
-weak word play
vs.
Chuck's in way above is his head, his days are numbered as far as writing those..
and as far as hooks and lines, he sees mine and just starts biting both
-very good
hoe, who you think you are? you'll get smashed and destroyed like it's a curse,
and we don't say what's up, chuck....that's our natural reaction to your verse.
-good
faggot, stop playin' ya self. them lines are weak and stale, get some style punk
bitch you aint foamin at the mouth... just got your faggot ass bf riled up
-not good
your styles what? the worst. and we know it, do you ever see us quote it?
if we do say you got a 9/10.....it's the chance that somebody else wrote it..
-not too good, you cant rhyme the same word with the same word
bitch im gloatin and im boastin....there's no need for this faggot to act like he's hot
& it woulda never took all 16 of your lines for you to realize you've been dropped
-not good
bitch i'm blazin', and chuck's lines are the whackest we've seen in a while
to put it lightly- i'd have to borrow his whack ass wordplay and his style
-weak wordplay
i'm wild. go figure, while he sits in front of the computer all fucking say getting fatter
i handle what's on my plate... and treat chuck like any other one of the platters.
-bad
and you've never seen a pussy, even ya chick wants herself a new BITCH!
so if you EVER give the penetrate, it's probably just whackness or noobish.
-you runined the penetrate word play attempt with bad wording support, not that good
chuck wins with decisive lines
up#2
i'll vote if chuck allows. cuz it seems weird all ancel's crew voting.
well i'm battling a vet so i'mma start strong and finish big
with these bars? he closer to getting 8 than Kratos in his sig
this was nice. you shoulda just wrote ate.
am i facing Ancel? King? Mars? tell me what's this hater's name
vs me? well you better play it com...
...since God of War is a one player game
okayish
i'm on a 3 battle win streak, i advise you to forfeit this one
& this battle the way i planet, Mars can be the 4th to get sun'd
haha
i'm Zeus with the name spoofs so i know this geeks philosophy
he's going from LLL to FL...
...so Mars wanting war is greek mythology
too many mars flips now.
i'm a breath of fresh while his lines stuck in the past, get recent son
or resent son, back to your pack, take him out of Orbit like a piece of gum
wording killed it
yeah take him out, i see him, the rifle scope vision is distinct
advantage points and bullets leave him leaking like a kitchen sink
naa man. played.
everything i write goes hard, check the state, i Keystone like PA
and i'm out here passing bars like a lawyer...
...so i don't worry bout the DA*
it's alright
he spits lunar shit, if you don't understand i'll explain it to you soon
cause everything he spits is twice as ass...
...cause Mars has two moons
corny.
vs
Chuck's in way above is his head, his days are numbered as far as writing those..
and as far as hooks and lines, he sees mine and just starts biting both
lol. wording made it nice.
hoe, who you think you are? you'll get smashed and destroyed like it's a curse,
and we don't say what's up, chuck....that's our natural reaction to your verse.
decent
faggot, stop playin' ya self. them lines are weak and stale, get some style punk
bitch you aint foamin at the mouth... just got your faggot ass bf riled up
naa didn't like.
your styles what? the worst. and we know it, do you ever see us quote it?
if we do say you got a 9/10.....it's the chance that somebody else wrote it..
ehh
bitch im gloatin and im boastin....there's no need for this faggot to act like he's hot
& it woulda never took all 16 of your lines for you to realize you've been dropped
naa..
bitch i'm blazin', and chuck's lines are the whackest we've seen in a while
to put it lightly- i'd have to borrow his whack ass wordplay and his style
lol dope.
i'm wild. go figure, while he sits in front of the computer all fucking say getting fatter
i handle what's on my plate... and treat chuck like any other one of the platters.
ok
and you've never seen a pussy, even ya chick wants herself a new BITCH!
so if you EVER give the penetrate, it's probably just whackness or noobish.
lol
i think chuck came nice. prob the best i've seen from him. ancel was just a little more polished and his execution was what won him this, imo.
v/ ancel.. dope battle for FL. chuck u should join DA tho.
i'll join right fucking now if whoever the boss man is wants to let me in
lol
(up #3 to avoid freeposting 0.o)
The bossman is mars. Gud luck.
kratos is gettin eatin in his signature 8/eatQuote:
Originally Posted by boro boy
ic, makes the line much better, that was stupid to put 8 instead of ateQuote:
Originally Posted by MateoPotatoe
well i'm battling a vet so i'mma start strong and finish big
with these bars? he closer to getting 8 than Kratos in his sig
^^Real nice metaphore you really put that one together^^
i'm on a 3 battle win streak, i advise you to forfeit this one
& this battle the way i planet, Mars can be the 4th to get sun'd
^^^ nice shit the word play with planet/plan it..went hard and you know your shit mars is the 4th plantet from the sun^^ WORD PLAY
i'm Zeus with the name spoofs so i know this geeks philosophy
he's going from LLL to FL...
...so Mars wanting war is greek mythology
^^^ yes nice rhymescheme there and metaphore cuz MARS is the god of war^^^
yeah take him out, i see him, the rifle scope vision is distinct
addvantage points and bullets leave him leaking like a kitchen sink
^^^STOP it..the kicthen sink punchline was to easy to think of which made it wack you was coming to hard to go soft there^^^
hoe, who you think you are? you'll get smashed and destroyed like it's a curse,
and we don't say what's up, chuck....that's our natural reaction to your verse.
^^^ DAMN...nice one there^^^
your styles what? the worst. and we know it, do you ever see us quote it?
if we do say you got a 9/10.....it's the chance that somebody else wrote it..
^^^ ouch...You did it to him there nice punch^^
bitch i'm blazin', and chuck's lines are the whackest we've seen in a while
to put it lightly- i'd have to borrow his whack ass wordplay and his style
^^ come on now all them hard punches then this weak ass one?? stop^^
i'm wild. go figure, while he sits in front of the computer all fucking say getting fatter
i handle what's on my plate... and treat chuck like any other one of the platters.
^^^another nice meta...OUCH^^^
well all in all that was a good ass battle... Mars got sum heat foreal...but Chuck stayed on him...as punches goes mars beat him bad. Mars just kept coming. BUT chuck slayed him in the wordplay and meta's because he did his research on the name mars...he went into greek philosaphy and all...talk about mars two moons and hit him wit a kratos line so
overall...............................MY VOTE GOES TO CHUCK
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...388/index.html
up #4
up.....will rtf.
well i'm battling a vet so i'mma start strong and finish big
with these bars? he closer to getting 8 than Kratos in his sig
......ehhhh
am i facing Ancel? King? Mars? tell me what's this hater's name
vs me? well you better play it com...
...since God of War is a one player game
blah
i'm on a 3 battle win streak, i advise you to forfeit this one
& this battle the way i planet, Mars can be the 4th to get sun'd
ok
i'm Zeus with the name spoofs so i know this geeks philosophy
he's going from LLL to FL...
...so Mars wanting war is greek mythology
......nah
i'm a breath of fresh while his lines stuck in the past, get recent son
or resent son, back to your pack, take him out of Orbit like a piece of gum
ok
yeah take him out, i see him, the rifle scope vision is distinct
addvantage points and bullets leave him leaking like a kitchen sink
nah
everything i write goes hard, check the state, i Keystone like PA
and i'm out here passing bars like a lawyer...
...so i don't worry bout the DA*
decent...could of been better
he spits lunar shit, if you don't understand i'll explain it to you soon
cause everything he spits is twice as ass...
...cause Mars has two moons
nice....
u've improved alot since i've seen ur first battle.....couple ok name-plays, not bad.....
Mars
Chuck's in way above is his head, his days are numbered as far as writing those..
and as far as hooks and lines, he sees mine and just starts biting both
decent
hoe, who you think you are? you'll get smashed and destroyed like it's a curse,
and we don't say what's up, chuck....that's our natural reaction to your verse.
ok lol....could of worded it better
faggot, stop playin' ya self. them lines are weak and stale, get some style punk
bitch you aint foamin at the mouth... just got your faggot ass bf riled up
like the line before u could of made this dope...but it was ok
your styles what? the worst. and we know it, do you ever see us quote it?
if we do say you got a 9/10.....it's the chance that somebody else wrote it..
decent
bitch im gloatin and im boastin....there's no need for this faggot to act like he's hot
& it woulda never took all 16 of your lines for you to realize you've been dropped
decent
bitch i'm blazin', and chuck's lines are the whackest we've seen in a while
to put it lightly- i'd have to borrow his whack ass wordplay and his style
nah
i'm wild. go figure, while he sits in front of the computer all fucking day getting fatter
i handle what's on my plate... and treat chuck like any other one of the platters.
ehhhhh
and you've never seen a pussy, even ya chick wants herself a new BITCH!
so if you EVER give the penetrate, it's probably just whackness or noobish.
nice.....never heard that wordplay before....
overall mars took this w/ better creativity.....he didnt get as personal but it didnt matter cuz the content took it....chuck, ur improving so dont take this as a bad loss.....nice battle
vote=mars
1. No setup, punch was okish, could have been worded a little better though.Quote:
Originally Posted by Chuck Massey
2. Blah, decent concept but I'm not feeling this one.
3. Decent bar overall.
4. Concept kind of played, blah, weak.
5. Not feeling this one either to be honest and why did you end the line saying 'recent son' only to start the next by saying 'resent son'.. It fucked the flow up and the overall wording of the punch.
6. Nah, gun lines don't work in text battling, unless it's a horrocore match, IMO.
7. Wording wasn't the best but the punch was decent I guess.
8. I think this was probably your best bar overall.
1. Lines are a little stretched, lmfao... Mars... A Hook line? Wow.. Played as fuck but it was okish.Quote:
Originally Posted by Mars.
2. Blah, I've seen this nameplay on him about 4 times now, wasn't flipped at all that much but it was another okish bar overall.
3. Nah, not feeling this bar.
4. Flow was on point, decent misdirection, decent bar.
5. Blah..
6. Same as above...
7. I lol'd a bit, decent bar.
8. Punch wasn't worded great but the wordplay aight, decent closer.
As you can see from the breakdown it was pretty close... Not the best drop I've seen from either of you, Chuck had some concepts but they weren't executed all that well and Mars just started his verse off with a couple played bars. Having said that, I gotta give this one to Mars for coming a little more consistent, he had one or two more bars than Chucky.
V/ Mars