Magazine - V.01

Short StoriesMag V.01


Introduction

Hey there short story writers! Surprised to see a magazine? Well I'm surprised that I'm writing one! I PM'd our very own Short Stories moderator, Chris Black yesterday, to see if he would mind the starting of a mag and he was fine with it. Now, I delved deep into the far corners of my mind, trying to figure out what to cover in this magazine, and I came up with alot of normal,"clique" ideas, which, yeah, i'm going to cover. Although, I have came up with some pretty interesting ideas for this magazine, and hopefully you all will enjoy them as much as me. On another note, there will not be a top 5 writers section, or anything like that, because honestly, there's just not a big enough variety of writers, that drop on a regular basis, to be able to cover that, and back it with reasonable statements that proove they deserve a spot. Yes, there will still be a top pieces section, so quit worrying! The mag's not that bad! Well, before we close, I believe we all owe a big thank you to Chris Black for taking his time to moderate this forum, when activity is scarce,
although it does seem to be improving lately! Alright folks, it's that time, sit back, buckle up, and enjoy the mag.

Review Of The Rules

Fist off, this forum is for short stories, essays and intellectual rants. Do not post lyric, rhyme or rhythm based pieces

1. Drop no more than one piece per day
2. Do not up your thread more than five times
3. Leave one link to a story you’ve replied to, in your thread.
4. Leave proper feedback, which entails:
More than two sentences
Mentioning strong points and weak points
Suggesting what could have made the piece better

5. Freeposts will result in a one week ban. Freeposts are:
Bullshit replies/Joke replies etc.
Paragraph long stories that you think are funny
Posting that you will reply to a story.
Any other stupid shit that I deam a freepost

If any rule is broken, your thread will be closed, no questions asked.

Writer Profile/Burden

Real Name: TJ.
Alias: Hades.

Age: 16.
Location: Dublin - Ireland.

Hobbies: Football (Soccer),Reading, Music - Not just rap lol, I like everything. Pretty much play any sport I come across.

Favorite Movie(s): Zoolander, lmao. That shit is TOO funny. Dodgeball too. I like Gladiator, Troy and Kindom Of Heaven type movies too. Inspiring shit.
Favorite Band/Musician(s):Fall Out Boy/Panic! At The Disco, Lupe Fiasco, Joe Budden, Aesop Rock, etc.
Favorite Book(s):Harry Potter, Lord Of The Rings, Anything by Raymond E Fesit <-- Nucca is dope.

When did you start writing & why: Little over a year ago, I came across a forum called Rapworlds, started off battling there won/lost a few text battles. I then went onto another site called gotbattles, and I started writing topically, wont a lot of those ever since haha. As for why, it interested me..I don't intend to be a rapper, but I've always had a gift at writing so I decided to try hone that skill. I mean, I only started writing poetry in last seasons IE and now I'm pretty dope at it.

Favorite writer(s) (rb or famous) & why:Famous would be JK Rowling, RB shit would be Poeta, Ledge, Nath9, Laureate, Celz & Chris Black. They all have pretty unique styles and I like reading shit from any of them.

Influences/Inspirations:Any good book that I've read over the years.. the poetry of Eavan Boland <-- That shit is dope, really metaphorical. MUSIC, without music I wouldn't be able to write, it's my fuel..

Achievements:
1x 1-2 Punch Playoffs
2x SAP HOF
1x SAP Playoffs
1x SS Playoffs
1x I.E Playoffs
1x OM HOF
1x RI POTW.

..Not bad for a guy only active on RB since late November.



Shout-outs/additional comments:Thanks to Nath for doing a mag, thanks for hitting me up to do this, too. Big thanks to Chris Black for continuing to post great stories. Pz!

Top Three Pieces

3. The Black Mambas/Engivale

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‘What the hell?’ Manny thought, reading it again to let it sink in. He’d seen people killed before, had to do it himself once or twice, but this was pretty odd. Burning a house down and killing all the witnesses and evidence inside? Sure. But taking a hostage and making him watch it all? Target trauma, that’s what they called it. What the fuck do they want me to do that for?

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This was really nice and creative. You used quite a few grusome descriptions, which made for a nice scare tactic. This was powerful, and very gripping, I felt on the edge of my seat wanting more every passing second. That should tell you how excellent the story was, wether or not other enjoy it!




2. Serial Killer/Living Dead/BTK

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When the dead first started to walk, a Winnebago is the first vehicle I snagged. And to my surprise…like I stated…it’s the first reason I almost died at their teeth. I made the mistake of parking to enjoy the luxuries…tv, dvd, comfortable bed…before I knew it, zombies were breaking through the vulnerable locks and windows. It took some frantic swinging of a fire axe I’d found and some quick driving the fuck away to barely escape.

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Highly entertaining, dark, graphic read. It was like reading a Dean Koontz novel for the first time, in terms of morbidness. Some very tight descriptions, interesting plot, and an excellent climax. Caught my attention fast, pulled me in and wouldn't let me go until I finished reading it. Great Piece Born!




1. Limpio, Sucio/Chris Black

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Poncho pounced on the man and pulled his head back, by his chin, exposing his windpipe. Poncho sliced, like Miguel taught him, and let the man go. The man’s face slapped into the floor when Poncho let go. Then Poncho kicked his knees from under him.

The man started to try and suck in air. I could see the thick blood pour from his neck, but some being sucked back in as he heaved in a deep breath. The sound made me cringe.

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I doubt many will argue with my choice here. Chris did an excellent job of portraying a "hit", and even in the snippet, he brought the connection between characters to life. The flashback mcdonalds portion of the story, open up the hit plot, in a very professional way, and didn't give away any future actions in the story. The descriptions were very vivid, and were chosen well for this piece, made it very enjoyable. Excellent piece chris!

Other Worthy Pieces


3.Untitled/Burden.

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The air was electric as the Warlock fell, cuffed and bound. The courtroom fell silent. You could cut the tension with a knife, nevermind a finger, King Mallev silently mused. The accused stood up warily, hatred etched upon his face like an insignia. He wore a black robe with purple hem, customary to his class, yet they hung on him like the finest silk. The purple hem signified a Level One Warlock, a trainee. His aura was disturbing. Could he be of noble descent? Surely not, the King reassured himself.

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For me, this was a highly entertaining piece, and I couldn't just let it slip by without receiving some kind of recognition. With some refinings, I believe this could be an excellent piece, not that it's already not good. In this piece your images and story telling ability was blatantly portrayed. This had all the nuts & bolts to an excellent story, hopefully you'll post the rest soon.




2.It Ain't Evolution/Negrodamus.

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Victorious, FuNub stood over the defeated chicken. He pulled a clump of
feathers from it and smeared them through the blood dripping from his
wounded arm and planted them on his face with pride.

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This was a highly entertaining read, with vivid, structured descriptions. I do have my own minor gripes about the piece, but nothing major enough to point out to the public. It was a weird read to say the least, but again, highly enjoyable.




1.Micheal At Midnight/HighEngineChief.

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The girl begins to settle down, still shaking but involuntarily. I slip the knife under her line of vision and press the tip deep bellow her belly button. She wimpers like a small puppy and i can see tears beginning to slowly drop down the side of her beautifully sculpted cheek bones. My stomach flutters, the excitement is emaculate.

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Chief took a more narrative approach to the story, and I must say, the way he told it, would catch any readers attenion. To me this barely didn't make the top three pieces, I throughly enjoyed it. It was seriously grusome, morbid, and very graphic. So if you into that kind of thing, I suggest you check this out!

Top Three Writers


Note: There isn't really a large selection of writers that drop often, so I chose the three I am most impressed with over a gaping amount of time.

1.Chris Black:

Really, I don't see how anybody could argue with me choosing him. He's obviously a "big-time" here in the short stories forum, and most likely has been writing for several years. His short stories are my favorite on the site. He writes very professional like, with gripping descriptions, and it's obvious he has a natural story-telling ability.


2.LedgenZ:

LedgenZ..well, he has posted his fair share of stories in the forum, and all of them have gotten a positive reaction from the readers, including myself. He has proved himself time and time again that he's an excellent writer, and his stories are just another backing statement to the arguments. Now, I know he hasn't dropped any long, quality story lately, but look at his past pieces, and im sure there won't be any arguments.


3.Negrodamus:

I chose him not only because his story was very gripping to me, with very strong descriptions, but because, if im not mistaken, he is Constance/Diverged.. who was a force in the Short Stories forum for quite sometime. His story's are easily in the top three, and hopefully he will start dropping on a regular basis again.

Interview With Our Very Own BTK




Hey Born, how are you?:
Hanging in there...wishing 5pm would get here sooner so I could start my weekend.


Do you believe the Short Story forum is coming to life?:
You know, I never paid much attention to it...
But lately, I dunno...I think Chris Black's sigs started catching my attention...he had that one about a chick getting fucked on a sink...
Didn't think much of it at first, but I guess it stuck cuz a week or so later I pulled this old Word doc out I'd jotted a zombie story on and posted it...
Had to drop a link of feedback...read a few cat's stories...
Started liking.
So, yeah...me, Daz, Chris, Engivale...
I think that's "coming to life"...or the beginning of it.


Who are some of your favorite writers there?:
Only read Chris', Daz's, and Eng's shit so far...
Out of those three, I dunno...Chris, I guess...he's got a sick, unapologetic style...it's nice.


I read your story, is there anything special that influenced you to write that, or a spur of the moment kind of thing?:

Always been a zombie fan...always kind of wished the shit would happen for real. Put the two together...add in my serial killer knowledge, thoughts, ponderings...you've got my story.


Can you name any pieces inparticular that you enjoy?:

From where? Just in our forum...haven't read that many yet...Chris's "Limpio/Sucio" was my favorite so far...though I haven't gotten to the "fucked on a sink" one yet...
Eng's was nice...good killing and gore in that one...
Daz's was not my style, but I liked it just the same...much more emotion in that one...probably harder to write, or more painful to write, for sure.


Are you planning to continue posting stories?:

I think so...I'll try and pick up the hobby again...I have a vampire joint I wrote about 10 years ago or so, but it's on paper. Gotta transfer to pc, then maybe...if I don't re-read it and deem it sucks.
Or if I can even find it...it's been 10+ years.
But new shit? Yeah...I'll tap into that part of my brain again...I'd certainly like to.


On to you..

Well firstly, how do you like being admin?:

I like it just fine...don't mind getting requests to do shit. I'm on most Mon-Fri, so...it's convenient.


What are some things that influence you to write?:

Same as everyone, I'd imagine. Childhood, upbringing, bitches, heartbreak...oh, and I hate being around people alot...so, when you got no one to talk to, you talk to the paper with your pen.


What are some of your other hobbies?:

I dunno...collecting sharp things...knives, swords, axes...doesn't even have to be a medieval looking one. I collect shit from Home Depot. If it's sharp, or can be sharpened, I probably own it.

And feeding my python...I can't wait for Saturdays. That's when I go to the pet store, buy me a mouse, rat, hamster, or gerbil...then bring it home and toss it into the snake's aquarium. It's alot of fun. Maybe not for you, but it's a trip for me everytime.

And of course, wife and kid time...let me not forget about them!

And to close..


Shoutouts/Extra Comments?:

I dunno...mostly to Chris Black, Engivale, and Daz...ya'll got real solid, entertaining styles...I hope to read more soon...from all of ya.
Also, to everyone else who's been posting...who AIN'T got any feedback yet...HANG IN THERE! IT'S COMING!
I'm hoping we can liven this area up...maybe even break out some tournaments and shit if we're really rolling. That'd be nice. An all new form of recognition here on RB. Personally, I think it'd be a real tight expansion project. Keep writing!!!

Closing

Ok, this wasn't my best mag ever, but I'm still proud of it. I had to rush a little on it, because of undisclosed personal issues, but nonetheless I presented a magazine, that covers a few different sections. Hopefully you all enjoy this, and take the time to fully read it. There isn't really a big selection of things to choose from in here, so I chose what impressed me, not what the members felt impressed them. So if you disagree with any of my choices, tell it to yourself in solilquies, because I could care less. I'd like to have help on a mag the next time, I just wrote this one by myself so that it would show people that when I say i'll do something, I will. Also, be on the lookout for a piece of mine sometime this month. Cheers!

Ok yeah, sorry guys. This is pretty short, but after I asked if I could make a mag, I found out I had to go back to court and other stuff, so this was a rush-job. Especially when I had to read through so many stories in two days. So hopefully you'll enjoy it, sorry if you don't.

Dope mag. I appreciate the time you took to read stories and write this. Thanks a lot.

Thanks a lot for this, man.

I'm glad you guys like it, I figured because of it's shortness, people would think I half-assed it, but reading so many stories is really a time-consumer, and judging them is alot harder. I tried my past getting mentions to people that have contributed to the forum. I'd really like to see it go somewhere, so I figure that I'll start dropping some of my stories, and writing mags on a regular basis, if enough activity comes through. Hopefully the rest will appreciate the time it takes to even put a small mag like this together. Although, I know a few will leave snide remarks. Anywho, im rambling now.


Also: Chris, I believe "Nyce" had a good thought about making a HoF for here, it would really be a goal for people to get in, and I believe there is enough quality writers around to make the HoF fill out.

Peace!

Nice mag, man...but...

I'd better not have answered all those questions for nothing...

Never mind, sorry...I see it! EDIT

I just put it up man. Thanks!

All these stories deal with murder, death, torture, despair,

interesting commonality. I'll have to drop something happy !!

I didn't realize anyone else had taken a look at my story, or really, beginning of a story, but thanks for reading... I plan on really giving this forum a good look tonight or tomorrow, I think, I've been very bored with all rap-related writing for a while. Thanks for taking the time to write up a mag, I'm sure we all appreciate it... something to read and think about...

stay up every1 I want to do some serious reading for you guys, especially Chris since I know he can write and I only went like two pages into 30-something because I didn't have the time for a real reading session then.

A magazine for short stories? WOW. Didn't see that coming, but I'm glad you did it - I enjoyed the read. Anyway, I haven't been active in here since forever, but with all the new found talent, old school skill, and magazine inspiration floating around in this forum ....eeeehhhh...it's safe to say I'll be a lot more productive. Stay up Nat. pz

I'm about to unleash an unholy amount of horror stories in here now that this forum gets a little bit of attention paid to it

I'm pondering posting my most recent story, but its like almost 6000 words hmm, I don;t think anyone would want to read that much off a screen, but i think snippets are not the right way. Thoughts?

Hmmm

i might have to start dropping in here and reading some stories again...

though probably wont be for a while busy over the next few weeks...

cool read though, nice to see some activity in here.

Also, would any of the mods mind if i wrote some extra tutorial stuff, because the current stuff is a bit dated and incomplete imo? I can write one about Character to start and I'll just post it and if you want you can sticky it.

That's actually not a bad idea Stryk, go ahead and do that. I'm not exactly sure how Chris feels about it, but it's cool with me.

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That's actually not a bad idea Stryk, go ahead and do that. I'm exactly sure how Chris feels about it, but it's cool with me.

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Word

I just took a pretty sweet class on techniques in short fiction, fun as hell, but lots of good learning.

^I haven't taken one in about 2 years or so. But I enjoyed the one I was in. Wasn't the easiest class in the world, but I agree, it was fun.

Word. Go for it, Stryk9.

I'll have to read some of the new drops tomorrow. I see a lot of new activity.

Okay. I did up a segment of it, there's more I'll have to cover, but it's a start.

Great write, very informative. It'll be a great tool/guide for those newly introduced to the craft of story telling and for those of us who need a reminder from time to time. Anyway, consider it stuck. Oh and...thanks for doing it!

I haven't read it yet, but I just read the top 8-or-so stories in the forum. Hooray for me.

Chris, I edited lol.

wow @ Chris being mr. activity in this mug.

I think some of us really care about storywriting, eh? Awesome. I promise to do some reading I finally have a day off tomorrow, our kitchen manager has been on vacation so I had to do that bullshit like 9 am to 9 pm way too much these past 10 days or so

The next things ill work on will be tutorials about

-Perspective

-Diction

-Beginnings/Endings

what about the very few guys that write intellectual rants? do we get any recognition in this forum?

How about another mag?

Made this year?

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Closing

Ok, this wasn't my best mag ever, but I'm still proud of it. I had to rush a little on it, because of undisclosed personal issues, but nonetheless I presented a magazine, that covers a few different sections. Hopefully you all enjoy this, and take the time to fully read it. There isn't really a big selection of things to choose from in here, so I chose what impressed me, not what the members felt impressed them. So if you disagree with any of my choices, tell it to yourself in solilquies, because I could care less. I'd like to have help on a mag the next time, I just wrote this one by myself so that it would show people that when I say i'll do something, I will. Also, be on the lookout for a piece of mine sometime this month. Cheers!

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Ok yeah, sorry guys. This is pretty short, but after I asked if I could make a mag, I found out I had to go back to court and other stuff, so this was a rush-job. Especially when I had to read through so many stories in two days. So hopefully you'll enjoy it, sorry if you don't.