Raper's Caper- Baron, Engivale, Truth, Twix & Forum

File:Raper's Caper

1st-Baron
2nd-Engivale
3rd-Forum
4th-Twixn
5th-Truth
6th- Malice.

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Lust can blind a man into a beast,
a beast which will go at any length,
to fulfil it’s hunger….

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Stripped standing strong among the rubbish tips
slowly slipped so I grabbed her arms & gripped
I squeezed & she fell weak on her knees, screamed
Urine streams, an oral enema means to demean
Captivating eyes afraid, open up & raid, never obeyed
I sprayed mace, bondage provided by her shoe lace
Her worse nightmare, no cape, no bats I pull her plats
Stats in the making, death & rape, I slip off her slacks
Spike insertion, hyped perversion & hiked coercion
Dead, blood used as a lotion spread, blight a hoyden
Twisted events left her with dents, I taped a version
Final corrosion she’s better now, acidified with poison

I cut and I slice
From What I entice
what’s right is lust fights
from recitin' my rights...
Fifth Amendment, Don't have to Talk
Sick Impediment to graph with chalk...
I don't leave em alive...
No stories...
No one sees to describe
how I kill these four forties...
Kill whores for these...
Free who survive...
Glee to arrive at the first speed bump;
you get caught, not if you pre dump...
Get rid of three limbs-
Chop em and Chisel Off em' bone marrow-
And narrow the chance of wheat thins...
And by that I mean a Life sentence...
How?
It's New Slang, from the few deranged
who need Repentance...
Deceit's what's confinement is made for...
Rape is just crime that's for time to trade toward...


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Stripped standing strong among the rubbish tips death defying glimpse
My move is made using moons shade to guide the brave night's days
pursuing her gift as I betray bliss & eagerness manoeuvres swift
Thoughts perverted envisioning the insertion upon her bodies decay
Upon introduction to mace I slugged her face & shattered her lips
I began to strangle her mangled limbs as my erection grows harder
Her eyes begged, I parted her legs penetrating between the muscles grip
She lies stiff as her life's grip goes farther she's quickly becoming a martyr
The blood oozed from her mouth was good news as south heads my departure
task completed swift as a quail as I inhale B4 deaths wretched smell starts up

I Check the ropes, she’s bound tight...
muffled screams create the symphony of the night...
I rip her shirt steadily and precise.., sucking n licking
this is where the mark shall be, excitement trickling
her body feels tight with tension ecstasy rushes in sections
Shhh baby no need to fight... darkness's invention
I cut a wide opening... I can see her warm blood cascades...
as the look from her eyes reveals fear as she cries out n' hope fades
I wipe using my jacket, withdrawing the dry blade...
my hands grip slimy entrails pulling them free...
... as I move her dissected track intricately...
recreating the bibles words into brand news sins, created delicately.
Murder from jealousy... I write the message with her innards...
I’ve come to earth from hell... to put shame to all sinners


Blood on the floor, I’m slipping
ruthless ripping has me aroused, am I tripping?
no, I just set out do what I wanted to
to see that her head was bloody, try to subdue
these voices telling me that this is what I want
the first girl now my aunt? Should I flaunt
the fact I took away their lives or act nonchalant?
In the middle of thoughts I felt a strong urge
bubbling feeling emerges I hear give the bitch what she deserves
how could this be? I feel lust for the flesh of my grandfathers seed
I couldn't stop myself and after pulling her pants down
I pleasured myself for hours packed my bags and left town

Scorn in directions, corress her worn interception
Flesh torn into sections, to me such joy is a blessing
A known professionist, muffled screams, seem trifling soothing
As now her heart leaks out to me, forgot the knife was protruding
So fixated on death, dialated eyes, show the scarcity of light
Detaining her health, surprised how her complexion faded with life
Deranged in the sight, tied to the radiator, pulsing to meet
Corrosive to meat, burns and bruises, marks repulsive and beat
Central air, pouring down, cool steel, supposively seethed
Mixture of moisture hot and cold, tissue's emplosion of heat
Shallow leaks of fluids arise, seems the flows are descrete
Viens dry within demise, she'll forever soak in her sleep

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The identity of the man that committed these
unthinkable crimes was never discovered.

A few crimes after the last, were said to have been
done by the same seemingly faceless man.

No one saw him come in, no one saw him go out.

Although his victims were raped;
no traceable hair or semen samples were found.

We can only hope that these crime caught up to the monster,
but chances are the man, the myth and the monster will live on...forever

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=325329
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...65#post5481865

This is omerta. Good to see this is what i signed up for haha. I thought the storyline was excellent and each person's verse flowed into the other's nicely. The only thing I could suggest is because it is a fairly long piece - to try to incorporate more of the 5 senses into it. this usually works to immerse the reader in imagery...

I noticed alot of you like to rhyme off fairly big words and then rhyme them again as an internal. this is good because it shows that you have a good writing ability, but at the same time you're setting yourself up to have an overly-repetitive structure which can detract from interest in the piece.

Overall though I loved the story and how the verses linked. Great ending also. I'm excited for future collabs. peace.

thanks

Malice's vers has been added in now.

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Originally Posted by Baron P. Mortuus

thanks

Malice's verse has been added in now.

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thats good to know

This turned out doper then I thought.......Good to see it up finally..

told oyu as soon as i got my internet on it would get finished and the day i had it on we did it

wow....i enjoyed this piece very much...all tha verse flowed very nicely...they all had excellent wordplay and vocab....imagery was def on point.....its rare i read any piece from the people who wrote this that isnt up to speed..and well..ill....i liked tha concept...theres always a good bit of complexity in yalls pieces......everything about this collab was ill....i felt all the verses were on point..they all went together very smoothly...no one was off..and yall all had verse that tied in wiht each others..no one trailed off...it was a beautiful collab and i hope to see more from all of you..or perhaps collab with some of you my self...keep droppin tha hottness for sure....~1`

hahah...

i thought this fell behind like my schoolwork.

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Originally Posted by Twixn...

hahah...

i thought this fell behind like my schoolwork.

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i'm just glad it was put up its a beuty thats the best verse i've wrote in like a month

God... how long ago did I write that for you, man? LoL.

Long ago lol.

rise

When i seen so many names on it , i though it might have been whack , but ya'll pulled it together real nice , and ur flows went good together , good shit cuzz

Thanks.

great piece.

What a theme for this as well, at first i seen like all the names and was like man one of these is gonna ruin the piece for sure but after reading it i was totally amazed, great emotion and the wordplay and set up gave the piece a great image. nice flow as well everyone stuck to the theme. well worded and set up to perfection,.

Mad props to all those involved in this piece

-perfection-

Thanks.

aynone dare break this baby down?

ill drop feed on everyone elses verses... in a bit haha.

Yup systems been taken back a couple.

yup i did a piece thats just floating into nowhere

Next time do leave comments thanks.

it was me homie orry iwas still logged in on that account because of the mad hacker

Thats some twisted and disturbing ish. Nevertheless you all fit together really well and it seemed as though some of it was actually written together. Description was the strongest aspect in my opinion. You all brought out the pshcotic element effectively in each line. flow was on point but not flawless in any verse. It was good to see all the different styles mix to form that one story.

lol, seemed like one of the old school wutang joints where everyone just hop on the track for a there side of a story... the seperate structures and styles gave this om a nice collabs look. i thought the whole idea behind this om was dark and brutal, barons verse did a good job of gettin me hooked,a little bit of every style, the emotion was insane-like. the second verse was straight, picked up alot of nice consistency at the end. the 3rd verse was the most descriptive with an unusual rhyme skeme. probably the nicest imagery. the 4th verse had a devious touch to it, like he concidered a captured woman a prized posession. the 5th verse had too many selfanswered questions for a maniac committing how he looked at the crimes from the other verses, still a coo drop, the last verse i could tell was malices.. lol ,some also nice descriptive words, more describing the killing. the flow was on point..

nice collab guys.

thanks for the feed...upage//

come on and raise up

upage!..........................

to the top....I think that this deserves a nomination for collab of the month

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Originally Posted by Forum

to the top....I think that this deserves a nomination for collab of the month

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of course it does

rise nukka leave feed

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Originally Posted by Mak P

of course it does

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remember what i had said lol^.

yeah u was right

Omg this was dope, deffinently hof worthy, first off I was able to depict who was who through reading this piece, man the organization of this was dope and well planned out, pfft Imagery was fucking ridicules fam seriously I understood and couldn't say better in my own words, this piece had both the soft and rough of the poetic words combined, the emotion in this piece hit me personally, almost like I was watching cnn and hearing some terrible crime, man the atmosphere varied with the many diffrent styles through out this poem, thankyou for posting this piece, and if you don't mind can you leave feed on my piece in my sig fam.

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Originally Posted by Memento

Omg this was dope, deffinently hof worthy, first off I was able to depict who was who through reading this piece, man the organization of this was dope and well planned out, pfft Imagery was fucking ridicules fam seriously I understood and couldn't say better in my own words, this piece had both the soft and rough of the poetic words combined, the emotion in this piece hit me personally, almost like I was watching cnn and hearing some terrible crime, man the atmosphere varied with the many diffrent styles through out this poem, thankyou for posting this piece, and if you don't mind can you leave feed on my piece in my sig fam.

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if u break down each persons... ill return the favor on 3 of your om's...

only one person has :(

Please Return The Favor Leave Quality Feed On This Link.

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Originally Posted by Memento

Please Return The Favor Leave Quality Feed On This Link.

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Well that link didn't work for me, so i left comments on another piece aight..took a while cause i was at a university visit yesterday and at college doing some lagging work today na mean.

Word.

holy shit guys this was a bad ass piece sucks i couldnt get into this but meh it was still fucking awesome and sweet i love to see that gore sex type shit. BTK does it great kinda a page out of his books but dont equally good by you all each bring a little something to the table. The concept was great and the imagrey brought upon by all of you was above par and in mint condition. Glad to see an all star class but something like this together. Next time you guys do something like this hit me up. props guys

Peep Please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327008

great job... I think taht errybody on this flowed together real well... I think the storytelling on this shit is great and even the way it was posted with the verses like that was great for the feel of the flow...

If you could give the feedback luv... it would be much appreciated...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=326783 good lookin once again...