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10 lines
house rules
due 7am tomorrow
Eastern Time
check
check , do we really need time till tomorow?
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just came from the club damn toked up!
any way check , then to bed
heard werd on a loosin streak ,wernt u that wack constant queer kid?
Namechange that starts wit W still wont help you come near it
also Heard u loosin it Having troubles with? Sorry to pop your bubble kid
But even your name knows where u heading , VV < only it even doubles it
BX native A vet? Comes to Necks the only thing u “pro........teck
talk is cheap, specially for this kid thats y he still be dropin from the projects
werd w/ jabs that make us fall........N laugh our ass off but that’s all
now watch me align werds with L’s so well like masters in scrable
please son lets stop the babble , i done split shit and get won!
and yea gotta admit that word is good ........ to be writing my shit on
:2thumb:
Hit u with so many punches, kid'll be left lookin retared
Ur trash, u dont have any good lines on ur disposal, ur style's garbage
You ain't ready to step, you'll get stomped by many
If u plan to head me, I'll knock ur teeth out cuz u shouldn't use any
Ur new but ur old news, should run when u feel the force fool
Wont feel remorse when I split ur personality, as if ur parents divorced dude
Dummy, its pretty clear that u lost bitch plus theres no doubt
That Licorice is wack, even little kids are equipped to chew u up & spit u out
Quit text till u get better cuz u might get lucky
I'd fight u on ur own turf but park benches doesn't suit me
-Werd Life
UP then ,
Up...
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Licorice - This was one of the most entertaining verses that I read this week. I believe that your verse was entertaining and really had some good wordplay within it. This made the punches hit hard and very consistent.
Werd - I felt that your verse was very simplistic. You had punches that connected, but I felt that your verse fell short compared to Licorice. Nevertheless, your flow, structure, and control of the verse made it a reputable contender.
Vote - Licorice
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=322514
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Thank you tho ur link is already closed , XD
UP any ways
also Heard u loosin it Having troubles with? Sorry to pop your bubble kid
But even your name knows where u heading , VV < only it even doubles it
please son lets stop the babble , i done split shit and get won!
and yea gotta admit that word is good ........ to be writing my shit on
vs.
Quit text till u get better cuz u might get lucky
I'd fight u on ur own turf but park benches doesn't suit me
Vote- Licorice, cool battle and props to both!
Vote DQed...wack..
-Smoka
heard werd on a loosin streak ,wernt u that wack constant queer kid?
Namechange that starts wit W still wont help you come near it
ok ok
also Heard u loosin it Having troubles with? Sorry to pop your bubble kid
But even your name knows where u heading , VV < only it even doubles it
stretched..need to watch that
BX native A vet? Comes to Necks the only thing u “pro........teck
talk is cheap, specially for this kid thats y he still be dropin from the projects
flow was off in that line
werd w/ jabs that make us fall........N laugh our ass off but that’s all
now watch me align werds with L’s so well like masters in scrable
doesnt rhyme
please son lets stop the babble , i done split shit and get won!
and yea gotta admit that word is good ........ to be writing my shit on
doesnt really rhyme...need to be more consistent
Hit u with so many punches, kid'll be left lookin retared
Ur trash, u dont have any good lines on ur disposal, ur style's garbage
nah
You ain't ready to step, you'll get stomped by many
If u plan to head me, I'll knock ur teeth out cuz u shouldn't use any
no
Ur new but ur old news, should run when u feel the force fool
Wont feel remorse when I split ur personality, as if ur parents divorced dude
follow up was stretched
Dummy, its pretty clear that u lost bitch plus theres no doubt
That Licorice is wack, even little kids are equipped to chew u up & spit u out
too childish, get more in depth
Quit text till u get better cuz u might get lucky
I'd fight u on ur own turf but park benches doesn't suit me
nah
Weak verses from both of you, i thought you both were gunna come a lot better than what you did. Licorice- ok verse, i see you tried at multiple personals basically all the way throughout your verse. But some personals and punches you had need to be worded better and need more work done. Watch out and dont stretch your lines and try to up your vocab a lil. Werd- Started out with a stretched and weak line, then had a few so so lines, then your closer fell off. You need to watch your lines and make sure they rhyme with each other and some arent off. Come harder with your personals and punches as well, and take more time and effort to word your verse better. Also, try to come more in depth and not make it look childish. Both need to step it up, But it was a close battle between the two of you
\/-Licorice with all that said
yo i dont know wat everyone is lookin at, but in this battle it was clear to me that WErd took it, licorice ur verse was very boring no hate, and ur concepts were pretty basic and played..you know wat a battles supposed to look like, you just need to work on ur technique...Werd you verse was much better you punches were much better and the only thing i can critize is ur structure but besides that you took this....my fav line,"Dummy, its pretty clear that u lost bitch plus theres no doubt That Licorice is wack, even little kids are equipped to chew u up & spit u out "
lmao rofl...KO^^
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=322898
thanks to all that voted
UP
Real talk this battle could've deffinently been better both came soft on the personals they just weren't hitting and the punches were either meh or ok, but like I said befor I seen better from both, werd you just dropped na mean idk if you though this was gonna be a easy whoring, but you just dropped to simple and not enough originality and creativity, but what lost you this battle was you consistancy I felt you'll drop an ok bar then the next 2 will be wack then afterb that the other 1 will be decent it just wasn't enough to pll this one off.
v/lic - rtf on battle with bell
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Licorice
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heard werd on a loosin streak ,wernt u that wack constant queer kid?
Namechange that starts wit W still wont help you come near it
Um... so-so
also Heard u loosin it Having troubles with? Sorry to pop your bubble kid
But even your name knows where u heading , VV < only it even doubles it
This was pretty decent
BX native A vet? Comes to Necks the only thing u “pro........teck
talk is cheap, specially for this kid thats y he still be dropin from the projects
Sort of stretched, weak punch anyways
werd w/ jabs that make us fall........N laugh our ass off but that’s all
now watch me align werds with L’s so well like masters in scrable
Did not rhyme, decent concept though
please son lets stop the babble , i done split shit and get won!
and yea gotta admit that word is good ........ to be writing my shit on
This was a nice closer, even thought 'get' and 'shit' don't really rhyme
Overall, this verse had good and bad points. A lot of your bars needed re-wording to make it easier to understand and/or hit harder. I liked the closer, it was a good use of wit/nameplay. And the concept of your scrabble line was pretty good too. 5.5/10
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Werd
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Hit u with so many punches, kid'll be left lookin retared
Ur trash, u dont have any good lines on ur disposal, ur style's garbage
The 2nd line just seemed sort of repetitive. Kind of weak...
You ain't ready to step, you'll get stomped by many
If u plan to head me, I'll knock ur teeth out cuz u shouldn't use any
Plan to head you??? This concept was pretty blah.
Ur new but ur old news, should run when u feel the force fool
Wont feel remorse when I split ur personality, as if ur parents divorced dude
How would a divorce split his personality? This was soft...
Dummy, its pretty clear that u lost bitch plus theres no doubt
That Licorice is wack, even little kids are equipped to chew u up & spit u out
This was a decnt line, just a little bit of rewording could've made it hit harder
Quit text till u get better cuz u might get lucky
I'd fight u on ur own turf but park benches doesn't suit me
Weak way to finish off, kind of basic
Overall, this verse didn't really seem too god imho. The only good bar you had was the 'spit u out' line. Everything else was just sort of basic, or weak. 3.5/10. Work on developing new concepts, then spend more time reowrding your bars.
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VOTE: Licorice
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lol noobs
lol @ swaying , go battle coop if he such a noob
i wud like to see the outcome XD
blah stfu, ur verse was sooo played
idc dq me if u want to, its not like there any decent heads in this forum that knows whats played or not.
fuck you
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=323002
^hit it or die
heard werd on a loosin streak ,wernt u that wack constant queer kid?
Namechange that starts wit W still wont help you come near it
blah set up
also Heard u loosin it Having troubles with? Sorry to pop your bubble kid
But even your name knows where u heading , VV < only it even doubles it
it was goin well then the last few words fucked u up
BX native A vet? Comes to Necks the only thing u “pro........teck
talk is cheap, specially for this kid thats y he still be dropin from the projects
basic...n bad wording, u stretched it 2 much
werd w/ jabs that make us fall........N laugh our ass off but that’s all
now watch me align werds with L’s so well like masters in scrable
align = played now
please son lets stop the babble , i done split shit and get won!
and yea gotta admit that word is good ........ to be writing my shit on
best
vs
Hit u with so many punches, kid'll be left lookin retared
Ur trash, u dont have any good lines on ur disposal, ur style's garbage
garbage, trash, anything of that sort = played now
You ain't ready to step, you'll get stomped by many
If u plan to head me, I'll knock ur teeth out cuz u shouldn't use any
nah
Ur new but ur old news, should run when u feel the force fool
Wont feel remorse when I split ur personality, as if ur parents divorced dude
ok
Dummy, its pretty clear that u lost bitch plus theres no doubt
That Licorice is wack, even little kids are equipped to chew u up & spit u out
meh nameplay, its probably been used on him be4
Quit text till u get better cuz u might get lucky
I'd fight u on ur own turf but park benches doesn't suit me
nah
v/Lic
although he stretched the fuck outta his verse, and ruined most of his punches due to bad set ups and played shit he took it for at least having a decent sense of what he was doing, Werd has battled better than this shit so when i look at this verse he dropped i'm like blah all over, nothing was good...i've never read Lic's shit before and it was a lil decent, and his closer was better than Werd's entire shit but both had alot of played punches and blah concepts all in all, RTF