Love to Evol

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Through days of storms & red Clouds
They imbue with a warm dead crowd
And so they stand proud…
Feeling like they run the sky each night
With a faith healing cry, to preach right
The two stay tight…
One knows love & the other stands for evil
Sun glows above, another plans to create upheaval
From the white wings, and the bright blue sky’s
He incites a fire ring, & ignites a true surprise
An angel with Satan’s son, could it be true
Near fate & done, look the sky no longer is blue
As his dark red tail, wraps around her innocent chest
Sparks of blood shed & fail to tap the ground & rest
The tears shed and on go the quest…
The devils son & gods daughter what good could come
Love to evol & evol to love, hell or heaven where is it from?

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Fuck dawg, i thought this shit was really tight. I admire your creativity as well as the figure of speeches you constently used 2 perfectly to keep yur reader interested...

Props homie

Thanks. I sure am happy this aint getting slept on.
:rolleyes: :bored:

yup.

This was a definite creative piece here..first time I've seen something of that nature..however, the wordplay was incredible..had much intelligence to it..like the structure as well..it was good to see you use the multi's in certain spots, which really helped the piece out..overall, it's gets a grade of A..real talk.

this was an alrite piece, the wordplay was good. The rhyming was also good, and it showed effort. The concept of the piece was interesting: Son of Satan dating an Angel....
One knows love & the other stands for evil
Sun glows above, another plans to create upheaval
From the white wings, and the bright blue sky’s
He incites a fire ring, & ignites a true surprise
the rhyming here is pretty good, and this is my favourite part of this piece due to this
Your flow was consistent, and your visual structure was average

keep up^

This was a common piece, and i wish it was a bit longer. i was feeling the structure and also your vocabulary made the flow so smooth. Your rhyme skeme was okay, but i seen better from you, but this piece was very emotional, and very visual

good science fams.

This wasn't anything amazing to me...
Your flow was real weak, and the sylabble count to me was horrid..it just wasnt a very smooth read ...buttttt....it did have an interesting theme, a bit odd, but I kind of liked it...The content was ok, although I think it was really rocky at the first...It started picking up towards the middle, but it seemed to die down again in the end...i didn't really see any metaphors or anything that held written value...but it was a nice description..decent work man.

i liked the concept as well as the rhyming. the word choice was really poetic, which was also a nice change of pace from the normal diss and battle rhymes. the artwork is fuckin dope too, and compliments the piece well.

i liked the concept as well as the rhyming. the word choice was really poetic, which was also a nice change of pace from the normal diss and battle rhymes. the artwork is fuckin dope too, and compliments the piece well.

This was a pretty nice piece. Concept above all was nice and I believe if you would have lengthened this a bit more you could of had a piece worth nomination here. The wordplay was okay and the flow was constant. Meta's were there but multies could've been a slight bit better. Imagery Owns. I really was feelin' how well the picture goes along with the piece.

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One knows love & the other stands for evil
Sun glows above, another plans to create upheaval

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This was probably the best chunk of the whole piece. =\
Vocab. was okay, but if was better, could've really pushed the piece to be more than it is. Despite, overall, Good Job. Keep up.

thanks.

upp.

and last upp.

hmmm was more of a poem to me then a topical...wasn't anything amazingly good but wasn't wack either...nice imagery simple nothing over the top....

all in all it was basically a nice short lil piece nothing stood out but nothing was wack either....