The Assassination of Christianity
The Assassination of Christianity
A shadowed silhouette shifts sediments unfurls as he walks
a cloud around him shrouds a morbid thought contorted like whores
a rogue in a war, revenge is still his only recall, a rose and a thorn
The death of Christianity sought
within imbedded cryptogram his fall is scripted in hymns,
stripped of its skin, revealed and saturated in sin, particular lines,
inverted flipped and twisted aligned, meticulous signs, articulated
ripped and defined, sedated it brims, equated in ornate idiom
the assassination equation takes the form of a maiden
soul, heart, and the mind his final demise
The Daughter
an abbot stabs a granit tablet hammers accurate passages
the hand of a pacifist “uneasy” quivers and stammers
immaculate massacres “revealed” the world of an anarchist
deliverance clambers, as he fathoms, stricken with panic….
its to late… he levitates, incarcerated nirvana,
prenatal stigmata, his navel rots the birth of a daughter
the order, watches in horror, celibacy and honor,
now they lay in the corners “contemplating”
chinks in their armor
with two hands amidst the carnage wrestled cracks in the floor
a yellow eye beneath the cobblestones enamored in awe
he grips the child in one fist, the face of anarchy born
releasing demons in the monastery… “pfft… kill them all”
The First born
He raped my mother, my own father, mercy help me my lord
“what this emotion is it fear, I’ve never felt it before”
this can not be, I don’t believe you were not part of my plans
and yet your beauty supersedes the artistry of my hands
she drops to the floor, crawls towards the base of his feet
bathing them weeps “raises” I’ll do anything please
the seed of lust infested his core ,molested his sword
she sucks his soul digested and raw, injected a spawn
which rips his heart, the chest getting torn,
the dead setting dawn, his son walks in the sign of hope,
then cuts his neck with a saw
"it started with one thought"
The Father
I couldn’t have it id established ruthless habits for years
mankind needed to see the reasons my procedures sincere
Judis easily seeing treason kept deceiving you eagerly
he believed in me … I dominate control all my scenery
had the Romans allegiance see how they whipped you repeatedly
you looked up at me begging me father give me the energy
I remember smiling at you thinking suffer the penalties
sacrificing you did more than any fucking atrocity
simple truth is you became a challenge to my authority
The Son
A shadowed silhouette shifts sediments unfurls as he walks
a Cloud around him shrouds a morbid thought contorted like whores
a rogue in a war, revenge is still his only recall a rose and a thorn
The death of Christianity sought
brother seek out my mother, love her under cover of night
lust of our father must be garnished by the damned and divine
“it will be my pleasure”
..........~ManSin~...........
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leave links, i will mos def return the feed
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this was a great amount of skill and use of vocaba nd wordage nah maean man seriously you dropped very very good and the content you executed was great. your story was just unique as it is so you elaborating on the detail word ofr word and emotion tagging along was justa nice mixture and it really ashowed through the writing in this piece man great piece and a well worth read man really nice. you have a nice structure and vocab nothing really seemed forced nor over-used so nice job man
RTF
link in my sig man!
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..WHOA.
The concept of this piece was amazing. written well with fine structure. also the topic was eye poping. the flow was okay but you showed some good vocabulary. mos props to that fam. Your carried out some good emotion, flowed deep into details. good job showing that good science.
peep the sig...
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thanx.... really appreciate the feed^^hit both of your links,
leave links, i will mos def return the feed
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Shit this was long lol but i congratualte you on a very good piece...you can clearly notice that you have writing experiance and your multi's worked nicely in this piece...emotion in this piece was very good and it flowed well my friend...This had good vocab and was a good complex piece...Good Job.
-Thomas
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Fucking Wow.
Amazing emotion, vocab., internals, multies,...
Imagery was like I was there. It was a bit long but after the first lines only a fag would've slept on it. Lol.
You had an interesting rhyme scheme which kept my attention to the piece also. You had consistant rhyming but it wasn't overdone. Despite the insane vocab. it didn't seem forced. The story of it just blew me away man. Fav. lines...
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I couldn’t have it id established ruthless habits for years
mankind needed to see the reasons my procedures sincere
Judis easily seeing treason kept deceiving you eagerly
he believed in me … I dominate control all my scenery
had the Romans allegiance see how they whipped you repeatedly
you looked up at me begging me father give me the energy
I remember smiling at you thinking suffer the penalties
sacrificing you did more than any fucking atrocity
simple truth is you became a challenge to my authority
^Nice.
There are a few lines that had some akward wording but, that was extremely minor. Excellent piece man. Keep up.
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thanx appreciate the feed Mazerka, just leave links mos def RTF ^^ hit all the links
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This was a very deop piece....well put together....I guess I was sleep on you huh..!..the imagery and wording were the standouts in this piece...you really put alot into this piece detail wise...The structure was good your multi's were nice...and I liked how the rhyme scheme had a type of jumping affect..one thing this piece really had was complexity...ya vocab was nice and you didn't over due it ....nothing really seemed forced....it all flowed well as I read it...onverall nice drop....
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^^cool thanks for that forum, leave a link i will mos def RTF,^^all links hit
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RTF for you -
This piece was solid. Had a lot of well done lines and the rhythm was good. I enjoyed reading it despite the length, like many other people also said, I suppose it just must be true that length is a little bothersome cuz we're lazy, but even so we read the entire thing because it was good enough to make us read it =D
Nice job with pretty much everything, it's not exactly a 10, but it's really good.
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^^Thanx for that, and yerr tbh i think the structure makes it look
longer than it actually is, but i do agree... thanx again
leave a link, and i got you, mos def rtf....
