"Anathema" - AbstantiCollective

Itallics - Legdenz
Navy - Soulstice
Black - Atticus
Red - Mindless


Youth
reckless
child

tainted by malice
your kind disregards human life,

I'm denied at heaven's gates but I still
can make it through the Watergate. Put
the Nix on the 18 minutes I'll regurgitate
for him. I am the flame burning infinty
and your local tax refund. Spitting on
Sudan because there poor as fuck
and last time I checked the fucking
pharoah's didn't dig oil rigs! Look into
my eyes, my soul, my heart. Black as
the twenty-eight pages blind to your
meager existence. Black as these
boxes stacking the walls that gaurd
the borders of my insanity. The ones
that recorded MY voice within anothers
The voice of treason. Vote me in!

foul

form what wrentched bowels
have you learned
to promote these evils as self and spurn
your illustrious heritage founded upon righteousness and valor?
Your forefathers raped a nation

... FOR YOU!!!

Learn to kill! I'll swallow all the pills,
you take the sugar, I like the humor.
Search my screams to find the tune
of your bleeding noose... I'll be your
means for news quotes and suicide-
notes along sage choked staffs that
black Monday media left to muted cries.
I'm dyeing to live in my own cynics!
"Civic" says Simon's gimics and lies,
give him head! Die in his linen eyes
while I sit and wait holding my breath,
for the next time I can slit my wrists again!

and rid the land of the filth
in a vulgar display of power
the congregation prays for you
and demands you accept it
as it's principles mired in hate twisted
by forked tongues hissing

I am no political champion. I am your
coroner. A heart made of paper mache
made of glue and tissue made of the
people's taxes. Trust me. The official
voice of straight christian right-handed
working white men. The unauthorized
voice of nigger, spicks and fags, the
scapegoats we hate to hate. Call me
up.. 911.. on Google. (You'll mostly
hear me talk about my faults) Elect
the future eulogy of the united states!

your fate is non-compliance

... DEFIANCE!!!

Help! There's TV's inside the back of my eyelids;
hiding poverty but making me feel sympathy for
fake stories highlighted for the working majority.
I'd rather be blind by reality then watch myself die
in a black infinity. We've flattened the screen so
nothing will remotely control anything resembling
3-D. You'll Instantly be a carbon copy of my forward
thinking. Download me. Virus free. Trust, I'm lying.
XoxCuteCamgirLivexoX - message me. I'm only 13,
born into bondage on a dot com. Complete interaction
ties computer geeks and buyers to user satisfaction.
No wonder abortions are warranted in this country
where porn is the leading industry. Um, The blacks
weren't really slaves, it was just a kinky game of S&M.
See? With our vices we bind lady liberty. Don't worry...
it's mutual, but without our consent. We're God's whores.

what is mine
WILL in time be yours.

Protest brutality, morbid obsession!
I'll pull off every horrid convention
of video control and replace tapes
by replaying recordings from 9/11!
When our youth is finished consuming
shotgun shells we can sell the smoking
jackets on the white market brackets
as a new and used collectors package!
Today we'll slit our wrists and kiss
the veins in hopes for aids to grow;
Let me bleed with you America
.... Elect me your new scapegoat!

presently your cry
echoes and stings the ear of those
who refuse to hear
your hollow rings of freedom may persist
but the bloodgoing fist
of mistruth will blacken the face
of your once peaceable race

Vicodin are our daily vitamins that we take to deface
medicine grins; with side effects to placate our distaste.
Were trained to stay a dose away from a comatose state,
then riddle in a little bit of Ritalin so we'll be rid of them.
It's imperative these kids swallow all of the hollow fumes
assuming the toxins of politics can defuse their immune
communities to autistic; listing psychiatric incentives.
They treat us as lab rats and expect us to act attentive!
Delete my forged contract and scourge your Imax theatre;
after depleting the feature to purge each obscene preacher.
Your seat is here, clearly within the realm we seldom fear,
This is the future... you're heritage isn't welcome here.

libel slander
propaganda
from a campaign of hate
against a such liberated mindstate

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Youth
reckless
child



I pledge my soul to you.

Abst.Co

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=313376
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=313406

This was a pretty multi faceted piece Very good emotion in here, and great irony. I felt this was just "real talk" and just stating the truths. From your references to "scapegoats" and "9/11", I feel that it was just a slap in the face to reality. It would've been good if you would've put the names of the verses at the end, so it wouldn't distract the reader. They won't keep going back everytime they see something dope, and say who was that? But I loved all of your verses. Very similar writing styles from all of you, just abstract truth. You work well as a crew, and this was a very good piece. Good job.

"Check out" Live Enough . . . in Poetic.

Wowthis piece was crazy.

It seems as if every poet did his job and you all dropped stanzas well worthy of dissection. However timeconstraints prevent me from doing so but let me say tht hecomplexity and layers of this piece was incredible, you truely met and exceeded my expectations for this piec, each and every one of you. In particular i had an affinity for atty and mind's last stanzas, in particular this part stood out to me "When our youth is finished consuming
shotgun shells we can sell the smoking
jackets on the white market brackets
as a new and used collectors package!"

That served as a good tell of how strong this piece was overall, dope job fellas, 1luv.

I'm really impressed with this, each one of you did an excellent job.

Mindless, your part was great, it's bin a long time sence i've seen you write because I haven't bin around but you have really come elevated sence then i got nothing bad to say and or have any coments on how to improve it, it was a good read.

Atticus, your part was impressive, lots of truth in it and it flowed in nicely with everybodies,
"Learn to kill! I'll swallow all the pills,
you take the sugar, I like the humor.
Search my screams to find the tune
of your bleeding noose"
That was an incredible part of your peice, it stood out and made the reader think Damn. I loved that part good work.

Soulstice, wow, what an opener,
"I'm denied at heaven's gates but I still
can make it through the Watergate. Put
the Nix on the 18 minutes I'll regurgitate
for him."
That was just flat out great, i loved that part, a lot of truth in what you were saying and you described yourself well

Ledgenz, you did a good job making all the stanzas/verses mold together,

Good job guys, it was an excellent read with a lot of truth good vocab multies similies blah blah, Just a really good read

Well done.

-Kage

This was a well written piece by all of you to start with. I especially liked Atticus's parts.

The best lines for me..."Protest brutality, morbid obsession!
I'll pull off every horrid convention
of video control and replace tapes
by replaying recordings from 9/11!
When our youth is finished consuming
shotgun shells we can sell the smoking
jackets on the white market brackets
as a new and used collectors package!
Today we'll slit our wrists and kiss
the veins in hopes for aids to grow;
Let me bleed with you America
.... Elect me your new scapegoat!"

Yeah, I know I just couldn't get past leaving out a part of that, it was incredible for me. The Vocab., Imagery, and flow was good throughout the entire piece and Legendz also had great lines in there too. Overall, this was an excellent piece. Keep up everyone.

Too bad this is getting slept on...

Ledgenz-First off man...if that was you in the beginning, before Soulstice's part, that was fuckin illy...really thought grabbing, which instantly had me hooked into the piece.

libel slander
propaganda
from a campaign of hate
against a such liberated mindstate

^This was so sick....good work on this collab Ledgenz.

Soulstice- Hey man, how's it going....? Anyways...I really enjoyed your section as well. It really hit well with me....that first part about Heaven's gate and regurgitating for him...that was a riot man...seriously really cool wording and vocabulary chosen for that part. You always seem to drop well, but I've never really read more of the poetic side of you efore...more the OM style, abab or aabb, but this is nice for you as well...keep at it man!

Atticus- Really a unique, yet seemingly unconventional style for OM's, from you. Nobody IMO...writes in the same mindset as you and that really is shown in this. You made me feel like I was a part of the story...which is really key from a reader's perspective...you have great knowledge of wording and emotion, and when they are combined, it makes for an enjoyable, moving piece. Keep at it...good work!

Mindless- You also had a more poetic section than the others, BUT, for some reason, in the first section I don't quite see that it follows the rest of the piece, until about halfway through...your second section was great though. Overall, you have great understanding or wording and imagery as well, like Atticus, and you guys did one hell of a job on this....good work!

Overall this was an excellent collab...I am thinking about nominating this, just to let you guys know...I will soon decide though. Please all of you continue dropping, whether this way or solo, I enjoyed all of this....great collab and thank you guys!
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=313380

whats aboves alias?

n thanks to all.

my alias is Educated

I don't know if abortion is really warranted but this line is complete reality!!

"No wonder abortions are warranted in this country
where porn is the leading industry."


This whole verse was excellent...

"I am no political champion. I am your
coroner. A heart made of paper mache
made of glue and tissue made of the
people's taxes. Trust me. The official
voice of straight christian right-handed
working white men. The unauthorized
voice of nigger, spicks and fags, the
scapegoats we hate to hate. Call me
up.. 911.. on Google. (You'll mostly
hear me talk about my faults) Elect
the future eulogy of the united states!"

This is a good political piece, enjoyed it thouroughly.

Check this out....

"Visions and Dreams"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...59#post5232759

this piece was just fantastic man....deeply mellowed into reality and fitted right into awesome multies and metaphors that detailed every scene given all did a good job and brokedown there parts nicely with no flaws in my eye's all came well written and very well creative and unique....all the diffrent styles put together as one and casted into the light was just godly man. you guys did nice internal rhyming and external man i liked how you not only sorted through things and digged up shit and everything but you assorted it out nicely with all members grabbing ther limelight..Ledgenz, man wow nice elvation and nice to see your getting your name out real fast...atti you dropped grat at the is just the usual for you...souls man your getting better and better with each drop your give...mindless, you still drop jaws man...all you guys did it nicely together and worked well..nice job man all you uys were great!...like the wu-tang clan of literature!.

RTF if you could on the link in my sig
Samantha C. Hensley

You guys definitely gel. I wouldnt even be able to tell who's who without the font and color changes. And i mean that in a good way, lol. The piece really wasn't my vibe though but i respect it for what it is. If i had to choose i'd have to say i was feeling soulstice and ledgens the most. Ledgenz shit was dope. I was feeling his lines from the get go. Very eloquently worded. Soulstices first verse was cool too. It probably went over some peeps heads but i liek the references in there. I.e. the 18 minutes of missing tape and the 911 28 pages line. And for some reason when i read his verses i hear buck fifty's voice, lol. Atticus, your first verse wasn't a hit with me but your second was a strong follow up.

Quote:

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Protest brutality, morbid obsession!
I'll pull off every horrid convention
of video control and replace tapes
by replaying recordings from 9/11!
When our youth is finished consuming
shotgun shells we can sell the smoking
jackets on the white market brackets
as a new and used collectors package

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everyones quoting that and i hate to jump on the bandwagon but this
was standoutish. my favorite lines of the piece.
Mind i'm sorry but i just wasnt digging your contribution to this. No offense, i love your stuff but i just couldnt get into your lines this time around.

I appologize if this isnt cohesive but i wanted to be as straight forward
as possible instead of rambling on about technicalities

yeah f'sho good/dope ish this was f'sho. all shit was gelled well.. i almost dided an overdose of enjambments tho' ha'............nice tite formats from all. rythym without a pause was evident in atticus pieces. i liked the way soul started shit was ill. Nik son and all that ish was illy. n i like the way soul changed up for the 2nd spits..... i liked min'd second verse specially mo' wording was ACE f'sho.flow was fast forward. and all contents from the collab group was well rounded. tho i am bored of hearing of 911 ish. but ya'll did play it well with the poetic touches and all kinds of crazy imagery and metta thoughts going on in the joint.


shit was dopely crafted. and yeah i did get into some of legends poetic skits as they went along coz those parts did add a coo, touch as well to the piece and reinforced the meaning with each spit


so yeah illy ish

1

First of all I have to say, more than any of you, i am proud of myself.. for actually taking the time to sit down and read that.. that was fuckin HUGE lol.. but dope nonetheless

Next, i'd like to comment on the amazing topic choice here.. once you think about it, it really isnt original, but once you displayed the topic in the manner that the four of you did, it was unique and amazing.

Legendz-You didnt really play a big part in this, just the little interludes in the middle there, and that makes it kinda hard for me to comment on.. but for what i did see from you, it was very intelligent and metaphorically well put together. i really have no feed for you sadly enough but good work.. next time i wanna c more from you.. (P.S. what ever happened 2 that collab u wanted 2 do with me? it just never happened lol)

Soulstice- Do i even have to comment? very poetical as usual.. the strong point in your 2 verses was the flow by far! it remained consistent throughout the whole piece and was all strung together beautifully. Imagry and metaphors were all there, once again it's hard to give good feedback where there is little you could have done to improve youself... good work on this piece my man, like always..

Atti- My man very well done.. You for sure brought the strength of internals into this piece... your unorganized rhymescheme made this piece fresh and interesting to read all the way through, along with your clever wording made your verses absolutely phenominal... along with every1 above ^ those lines that every1 has been quoting by far sent this piece to the stars for me... it flowed nicely with the multis and everything.. just.. wow.

Mindless- You had contributed an astonishing element to the piece.. you had amazing rhymes and multis and that for sure was your strong contribution to the piece as a whole... ,the good abstract usage and the forever changing rhymescheme made the piece interesting also... your verses seemed more direct than the others and really brought out the issues of the topic for the reader and it had a huge impact on the piece.. good work also and keep it up

Lastly i would like to say i am proud of myself again, for actually taking the time to sit down and write all this... wow.. if it was ne1 else u guys i honestly would have been like fuck it.. but the air was thick with dopeness ;)

good work to the whole lot of you.. PM me with a topic if ne1 wants to collab netime.. im always open minded for those... easy.

Edit: If Soul, Ledgendz and Mindless could hit the link in my sig that would be great.. atti u already did so heres the return on your feed. ~1~

haha, i feel like everyone is missing the concept. it's an election, or more appropriately an anti-election. Legendz part is the new pledge of allegiance for a nation no longer alligned, while mindless's, soulstice's, and myself's verses are election speeches. hence the image at the end. it's not a piece about september 11th, it's just a synical/sarcastic take play on the state of current politics - subsiquently including 9/11 because that was a memorable event. thanks for all the feedback though.

^Exactly. And when you read it with that in mind you might pick up on other things. Regardless much love to everyone for reading this. It's appreciated.

i somewhat caught that i knew it wasnt about sept 11th.. it was political and it brought up all the past problems, but im not very politically knowledable, that shit usually dont interest me.. but y'all did well u guys ya should b happy with the outcome.

Apologies for the late return...took me a while due to other factors but yeah.....


Legendz

I liked how you gave a background sound to this, like in audio when they have a faded voice dropping knowledge or giving a clear message and backbone to the topic. Yup i liked your vocabulary which has always been precise and adequate plus your sprinkles of imagery were good to in creating a vivid picture that showed the scene, e.g. the forked tounges hissing gave me a first image of the snakes tounge but then another image of acidic female gossipers. You ended the piece very well to and like i previously said you gave this piece a good backbone.

Soultice

Your verse seemed as a satarcial soliliquay at points. Which i liked. Imagery and wording was used well, a set rhymeschem wasn't present to me but nonetheless the dialouges were fluid and easy to read. Plus your verses seemed as a rant at times to a clever rant but a rant nonetheless. The paper mache is played but the glue from the taxes line was good and to me your verses showed the fickelty of politics and goverment but how the materialistic world also needs them.Your verse to me was a very complete poem in the end and an enjoyable and an enjoyable one at that.

Atticus

Don't slit your wrists! lol...your repitition of the bleeding and writs etc did tie in with the final image but lets read your verse without the final image....i liked it, first verse was more poetical and didn't have a strong rhymeschem and was more prose like but not fully porse if you get what i mean. I liked your language and sarcastic comments type concepts that you used and have used before. That style really gets the reader into reading the part more na mean..2nd verse had a more definitvie flow i found it more nejoyable or should i say even more enjoyable as the first verse was good to. The 2nd verse had strong sarcasm in it...i mean with the white jacket line i could only think of the 9/11 movie which was made to get profit from an incident i doubt many have forgotten. Overall, i liked your verse, a good and very enjoyable part...another thing...you used the word dyeing was that meant to be there as in dyeing means when you dye something or was the word mean to be dying idk but yeah.

Mindless

Your first verse was FIRE!...striaght dope verse with good flips on concepts and very very sarcastic to me. Thus making it a very good read. The rhyming was very fluid and easily readable which again is a plus as you know..your erse gave a snese of ignorance...maybe it was written from that point..not saying you were ignorant because you had too much information to be but maybe your 13 year old character was. Your last verse was very good as well..kind of like a statement that you don't want to accept the social norm and your your own person...like a teenage rebellion sort of thing na mean. Overall, i liked your verse to twas very very good.

Overall

In totality this topical providied a very very strong and enjoyable read/message. The irony and sarcasm infused to make this a very good read. Overall, i liked this as a whole as each piece tied in with the previous. Good Good.

-Pak

First of the TOPIC was a nice one. This piece was well put together. The emotion of the piece overwhelmed me as I read through it. Each person covered their part in deep deep concepts. The Irony of the piece is what seemed to shock me. Each part went into detail about the wicked ways of the society which is my type of writing style. This piece covered every aspect from the teens to the politicans. Very Nice. Overall this was a very interesting read and a great collab.

well i consider this a HOF piece you guys were dope really dope, great topic first off, plus you found a way to describe what you were talking about in this piece without it sounding like anything I have ever read before, which show great lyrical skill from all, but my fav was what soultice put in that was a super way to open it up, i particully like this piece beacuase it shows that the govermnet cannot blind the people, great message i felt as if though you were shouting this in front of the white house for all to hear, good emotion from all,i liked the different styles atticus i thikn had the most unique verse he seems to think alot like me (not that we are any were near equal in skill) but in the way he dooes his piece i felt his bleeding throught to me more,the thing put into italics got me even more into it and that crazy pic at the end was a great way to close out the best piece i have read maybe ever s(ince i read one of bounces the first time i ever came on RB) from RB great job from all of you

Quote:

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Originally Posted by atticus

haha, i feel like everyone is missing the concept. it's an election, or more appropriately an anti-election. Legendz part is the new pledge of allegiance for a nation no longer alligned, while mindless's, soulstice's, and myself's verses are election speeches. hence the image at the end. it's not a piece about september 11th, it's just a synical/sarcastic take play on the state of current politics - subsiquently including 9/11 because that was a memorable event. thanks for all the feedback though.

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i diddnt miss the point i could see everyones point. nevertheless i just stated i'm tired of hearing anything even linked to 911

like even seeing 911


oh shit i just wrote it twice now


ha

pz

This was a nicely put together collab... very emotional and the stanzas from each person was packed with imagery and complixity like crazy. I liked the references to the missing tape and the 911 happenings. This piece was very deep and i enjoyed reading it. The nature of this collab was very releving to me when i read it. i was wondering when someone would do something like this. I just didnt think it would turn out quite this incredible. The parts that stood out the most to me are as follows.

and rid the land of the filth
in a vulgar display of power
the congregation prays for you
and demands you accept it
as it's principles mired in hate twisted
by forked tongues hissing

"When our youth is finished consuming
shotgun shells we can sell the smoking
jackets on the white market brackets
as a new and used collectors package!"

It's imperative these kids swallow all of the hollow fumes
assuming the toxins of politics can defuse their immune
communities to autistic; listing psychiatric incentives.
They treat us as lab rats and expect us to act attentive!
Delete my forged contract and scourge your Imax theatre;
after depleting the feature to purge each obscene preacher.
Your seat is here, clearly within the realm we seldom fear,
This is the future... you're heritage isn't welcome here.

libel slander
propaganda
from a campaign of hate
against a such liberated mindstate

Once again very dope read. Deffintly worth the time to read this... wish i woulda gotten to it sooner but have had some things i had to take care of first

Well done on this you guys this was a really nice read.Atti sorry it took me soooooo long to get back to this but lifes been busy.ANyway you guys all worked well together and I am hoping to see more collabs from you guys.The wording in everybodys verses was brilliant and it really sounded great.From start to finish it was all go with some great rhymes.Nice job you guys and I am looking foward to your next piece.This is a HoF for me

-Dyl

thanks everyone.

This was really good guys...

Legendz...did a good job of handling the transitions, it helped with the coherentness of this piece as a whole, thought that
"the congregation prays for you
and demands you accept it
as it's principles mired in hate twisted
by forked tongues hissing"
was your best part, also thought since you were givenso little to do, you could have done more with it

Soulstice...Sidewinder says "Yo dat Shit finna be whack" but I have to disagree, I thought your first stanze was the best.. liked the lines
"Black as these
boxes stacking the walls that gaurd
the borders of my insanity. The ones
that recorded MY voice within anothers
The voice of treason."
although gaurd should be guard. Your sporadic rhyming was a nice change of pace and you set up this piece well

Atticus...
"When our youth is finished consuming
shotgun shells we can sell the smoking
jackets on the white market brackets
as a new and used collectors package!"
That was a real dope line, you came with a nice sarcastic (or sadistic?) humor and pulled it off well. I thought your stanzas were packed with metaphors which came off real well

Mindless...your klst stanze was my favorite out of the whole piece and really ended the collab well...You're crazy use of internals and slant rhymes was pulled off dope, and like Atticus, your humor was very nicely done

This was dope guys, everything went well, the topic was nicely and more importantly uniquely covered, nicely done

Glad to see you're all here still.. Keep at it..

.. had to be upped :coolio:

this should have been legendary IMO...

It was close but no.
This is gonna be closed so Laur said we that ya cant up old peices.

stop uppin old pieces. wtf.

Don't up pieces that are more than 30 days old guys

-closed