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Im here, typing my verse now..
Broke these fists on your teeth clown, my penmanship reaks now
But I don't need no fancy writing to prescribe you a beat down
You sound pretty good next to me, your boy does too
Heck who knew.. even Hellen Keller's vocals have bested you
Fuck the matter of fact just watch me damage your stance
I'm like Mexican Valets the way I hand you your ass
And your testin who? you'll see colors without a pack of smarties
I'll make you spill your guts like drunk Scotsman at Haggis parties
That drank bacardi, but Jyy is too busy swallowing guilt
Cause when that Scott picked up his guts he peaked under his kilt
......wow.......thatz it
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If U think U sick, U must gotta ~ head wound ~........when this guy spits, he gets laughed at more than a small ~dick in the bedroom~
he don't measure up to me even when he ~holds a ruler~...I spit ~cold and smoother~ this kids a bitch...under pressure he'll freeze up quicker than an ~old computer
like monkeys I'll ~throw yo shit~...and like lawn chairs he ~foldin quick~
I just killed this bitch...now people vote so I can get this win ~over with~
Young'n'~ I WRITE PRECISE~ // rookie kid, my style iz like your girlz pussy iz, ~NICE and TIGHT~.
Im on a level U aint got the HEIGHT 2 HIT // on my worst day im better than yo' NICEST SHIT // someone passed U the mic & my ADVICE-WAS-QUIT.
.......u garbage bra....
EAZY*********
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wtf was that J?!? dam you need to fix your structure don't space out you lines and that {~~} shit is old and lame it throws off your flow we know an meta when we see one and you bars were streached like fuck and y'all both had a bunch of played as punches and status won off of having personals and an descent structure.
v/stat
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That drank bacardi, but Jyy is too busy swallowing guilt
Cause when that Scott picked up his guts he peaked under his kilt
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My vote goes to Status, everything in his verse was better. Jyy your verse was a waste of a fucking post. You need a lot of elevation. You need to learn how to throw a punch at your opponent. Read LLL battles and work in the cypher and you will get better.
Vote - status_unknown
Im droppin my vote now im constance both RTF on my battles in my sig
Jyy none of ur punches were fresh, therefore they were weak and status_unknown killed you- multis dont add much to a played punch
nothing of status_Unknown was that original until his last 2 bars:
And your testin who? you'll see colors without a pack of smarties
I'll make you spill your guts like drunk Scotsman at Haggis parties
[best punch]
That drank bacardi, but Jyy is too busy swallowing guilt
Cause when that Scott picked up his guts he peaked under his kilt
haggis is a scottish food, i mean really they wouldnt be drinking bacardis but it was for multi purposes and then says jyy is gay for looking up mens kilt
i almost have my 100 posts so pm me if u cant get this closed in the next few days and ill poll
hit this up with some good feedback : http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312255
You sound pretty good next to me, your boy does too
Heck who knew.. even Hellen Keller's vocals have bested you
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nothing
jyy you came weak and nothing in your verse was even close to good get rid of all the /~ and shit out of your verse and dont space your bars...then you gotta work on your punches...and try to come with some personals...status your verse was meh..but good nuff for the win...v/status
Broke these fists on your teeth clown, my penmanship reaks now
But I don't need no fancy writing to prescribe you a beat down<----iight, good flow
You sound pretty good next to me, your boy does too
Heck who knew.. even Hellen Keller's vocals have bested you<---lol...str8 line
Fuck the matter of fact just watch me damage your stance
I'm like Mexican Valets the way I hand you your ass<---nah....shoulda been worded differently
And your testin who? you'll see colors without a pack of smarties
I'll make you spill your guts like drunk Scotsman at Haggis parties<---decent...liked the concept
That drank bacardi, but Jyy is too busy swallowing guilt
Cause when that Scott picked up his guts he peaked under his kilt<----lol
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If U think U sick, U must gotta ~ head wound ~........when this guy spits, he gets laughed at more than a small ~dick in the bedroom~<---so-so....conncept's dead as fuck, good flow though
he don't measure up to me even when he ~holds a ruler~...I spit ~cold and smoother~ this kids a bitch...under pressure he'll freeze up quicker than an ~old computer<---nice line
like monkeys I'll ~throw yo shit~...and like lawn chairs he ~foldin quick~
I just killed this bitch...now people vote so I can get this win ~over with~<---nah...
Young'n'~ I WRITE PRECISE~ // rookie kid, my style iz like your girlz pussy iz, ~NICE and TIGHT~.<---god no
Im on a level U aint got the HEIGHT 2 HIT // on my worst day im better than yo' NICEST SHIT // someone passed U the mic & my ADVICE-WAS-QUIT.<---so-so, good multi's
overall...
stat - i liked your 2nd bar best, and the last 2 were real str8 too.
you had much better punches n concepts even though he killed it on flow n multi's. nice drop
jyy - you had some crazy ass multi's in there yo, and your flow was a lot better also, but you lacked on concept n punches. keep it up w/ the flow, just work on your concept, cuz alt of that has been done do death.
work on the structure too no more ~~~~~'s, and origize your lines a lil more.
in my opinion....stat got this, his material was just alot better.
but i can only offer my opinion. i got merked by the site for my posts, so i cant vote fellaz, sorry.
plz hit the drop in my siggy fellaz
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That drank bacardi, but Jyy is too busy swallowing guilt
Cause when that Scott picked up his guts he peaked under his kilt
Vrs
nohting
this was an one sided battle and and status just took this from under your nose ur punches werent close to connectin mann work on ur punches an how you word you barz and you gonna have to get a new structure to get a win onRB that shitis annoying and hard to follow it also makes ur flow choppy as hell
this is xplict_Talent
return the favor in
me vrs aritotole or w/e
V/ SU
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That drank bacardi, but Jyy is too busy swallowing guilt
Cause when that Scott picked up his guts he peaked under his kilt
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garbage
nothin great in this battle and j u need help wit alot i couldn't get what u was writin
status u had one quotable but keep spit
v/Status...reason above