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Verses will be due by Friday midnight eastern...
This battle will not be polled...but it will count towards your points in the rankings...
Topic: Blood In...Blood Out
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Agree on your line limit...
Verses will be due by Friday midnight eastern...
This battle will not be polled...but it will count towards your points in the rankings...
Topic: Blood In...Blood Out
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Checkin N good luck kinda retarted Topical to write about
Blood in….Blood Out
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Matthew 26:28 “for this is My blood of the covenant,
which is poured out for many for forgiveness of sins.”
Blood pored to seal the pores created by defected spores
Infected ores cherished by scores; blemished and toured
Animals gored with a reddish dye; the bloody eye stored
Visions of a servant falling; impaled calling; nailed talking
Gargoyles gawking then laughing, disciples softly squawking
Gladiator stalling watching the whipping, betting & hawking
“He’d die in a while!” Israelites smile a soliloquy of lies & guile
Olive flesh coloured red by bile arms move in a military style
Pouring red river call it Nile the sun strikes an hour on the dial
“What...Still alive?” 5 men watch the dark humour and laugh
The King with a lepers tumour covered by a bloody scarf
From the evening to night hanged in plight whipped & carved
Empty stomach aptly starved; skies thundered & tore in mourn
He died there…suffering servant silently hanging till dawn
"They said in boast, "We killed Jesus the son of Mary,
the messenger of Allah," but they killed him not nor crucified him,
but Allah raised him up unto Himself."-Surah 4/157-158
Blood in……Drip Drip Drip…
….Quench your thirst with his blood
…You cannibals……
David’s believers turn tack to attack liabilities they’d rather lack
Gullible men tracked and stacked on shelves hung from their back
Snuck into corners they bleed out mature liquid their skins insipid
Was war a necessity, talks too timid or is it blasphemous swarms
UN was the peace before the storms, dorms turn to military norms
Candid classes of bookworm writers scrub their glasses to see stashes
Mass population represents slaughter of masses, a modern genocide
Brown chequers apartheid brown chocolates belied brown men be spied
See the white light it’s a white guide; black shadows cover colours; hide
Another man died it’s war and war is war where everything is fair
Dare you to go ahead & decapitate that mare; attract News centrals stare
Sprinkle specks of blood to sign the cheque it’s blood money I bet
Excised out my hands and left me an image a fashion statement
Entailment of rancid melodies to brash out the hacked ailment
Existence as scientologists grows in charts & rows; reflexes of throws
That measure your distance of your throw, throw those words of belief
I’m your Religion, your God…hacked, decapitated & sliced at my knees
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Blood out……Drip Drip Drip…
….Quench your thirst with his blood
…You cannibals……
Starting reading My history bookget to chapter 19 then fall asleep on my page while sleepin peacefully my minds conceives this dream
I realize that I've fallen into a trap of my own creation.....
BLOOD IN
Sitting upon the figures of a cage..
how high his method as he is tattooed with flames
Brave hearts shuffle as cards were exploding tunnels
Syndromes were a smoked landscape that drifted puddles
His capacity a figure that lay as a butterfly who conceives
His one dimensional process yet it's blocked by sin and Grief
So...
I...
Yelled out..
Remarks of words as his sword clashed with my arms
But yet reaching out was his decent lust of being fond
Maintenence yards away the ship carried onto his rivals
that sat on a boat near a metropolis with Methodist idols
Simplicity a butterfly effect away from purity's content Sediments
Glorified is my Genocidal war positions as I exhale an exorcist
Decomposed lay his shadows as they flipped time upon castles
A hero etched his heart into Ra's stomach the sun? baffled
Hey Jesus....
I want you to...
Write a poem to me so I can....Judge myself
Can you slap me in my face...that to me is a side of hell
Necroplasm...my temptation as bengals zeroed on Infants
As their stripes were enigmas babies nightmares were Ascendants
A crescent moon..a fishing pole hung from the oceanic Matter
Splattered as his brain was salted with blades his thoughts? chapters
Jailbirds flying with bars as their feathers chirping soapy letters
Their sexuality...too late Confiscated by Violent, abused lectures.
Someone die with me...
Come on....
I got married...on a day where it rained and poured in masses
I invited Satan, and Eve to my reception...killed them...nothin happened
So it pains me to say this as the heart is a blood bank of changes
I will cry as I shit on myself while splitting my head with Axes
Mesmerized as my eyes show pores of stars sprinkled on my Flesh...
Replacements of armageddon...by popular demand my death is incorrect...
BLOOD OUT
good battle.
Pak- Your topic was very nice, good use of multis, your piece flowed consistently, good use of vocabs, I liked your topic, it was strong, and you really stayed on point throughout your whole verse, you kind of trailed off in some parts of your verse, and there was a lack of emotion in a piece of it. Other than that I thought it was an interesting piece, and overall a good drop.
X- I really liked your topic, a lot of thought was obviously put into it, and everything came out well. Wording was nice, your piece flowed consistently from start to finish, and you really portrayed good imagery throughout your piece. You had a strong start and you finished strong. I didn't like a couple lines because they felt pointless though. There was a lot of emotion in this piece, and the topic really helped that. Overall this was a good piece, and a good read.
My vote goes to X for a little bit better drop, good battle guys.
V/ X
Yup thanks for voting.
Shit man;
Close battle hear:
X: Nice wording. You're flow was great. Kept it nice and steady. You're Structre was Meh but I dont vote upon that..you know me. The Creativy was alright. The Imagenary was wonderful. Left plenty of images in my head. i felt you could have done alot better in this battle with a topic like that. Guess you werent feeling it or something. You're ending was some much better then the start and middle. I just felt you didnt resease the same shit that you brought out against Exact and Spekz. Keep trying man. Look for you're light once more.
Pak:
Fucking Great! You're wording was perfect. You're flow was perfect. Loved the constant rhyming and what not. The Structre wasgreat; like a true poet would have it. The Creativty was very nice. Emotions was good. The Peice itself drove me into a edited Bible of some sort. I think you found you're light man. This was SS and HoF material right here. Overall I loved it. Saw no flaws what so ever. Perfect.
Vote/ Baron for a better peice. I love you both. We family. But my vote goes to the Baron. Keep it up guys. X you need to find you're light once more man. And Baron...Look no farther. For you found it.
this battle was really nice on both sides...this was a topical champ match...pak you came really good...with some nice rhyming....and almost perfect flow...it was strutred nice and easy to read...the pics got some more intrest in your drop..you have the nice sense of vocab...with the right words in the right spot...verse was almost perfect..X you came your best in this battle..had some really good flow with nice rhyming on every line...had a really good sense of vocab...but you couldve stepped it up a notch...the only thing i didnt really like was your strutre which really doesnt matter..but this was a very close and good battle..but in the end the vote goes to pak...if you could hit my topical with paper chase honest that would be great.
1-1 this is gonna be nice as fuck mann
PAK look at it honestly
2 minutes of Hate is takin the topical belt lmao
2-1
Yup 2 minutes all the way na mean...It twas a good battle..DJ me and/or X will get the link as soon as possible.
uppin fo more votes keep em comin RB
i voted PAK
come on rB if you drop links well hit em up asap
its suppose to say good job Pak i vote ona battle ina different window my bad pimpin delete that smoka
Yup i deleted my own one lol.
Vote - Xplict_talent
Pak - Dont get me wrong, i liked your piece bro. It's just in parts it seemed as if you rushed through it. And i felt like you forced your rhyme-scheme a little too much on this one. I did like the creativity... im a sucker for that so that was a plus.
Xplict - You came in here an underdog, and well... i think this is the best i read from you yet. Nice imagery and i also liked the twist at the end. Topic was blah... but you really worked with it here and stayed on topic.
No hate dude.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312484
Honest vote^
peace..
Yup 2-2 i think.
man super dope both of you i was hungry for more when I finished but I felt baron emotion fueled words and his imagery was outstanding i can visualise jesus dieing slowly both pieaces flowed well and had great use of vocabulary but i personally choose baron pieace because im more of an religious type persona and he had some good quotes from the battle and i feel that he played the topic the best and he had an nice use of multis good job dope pieaces.
v/baron - both v
dam meant to say both vote honestly on my battles with in my sig please and thank you lata agin dope pieaces famo
3-2 thanx for the vote
Ayo Ex it's becoming a bit of a race lol...1-0...1-1...2-1...2-2...3-2...let's see who gets to 5.
Lmao chea i see this is the best topical yet lmao but chea this should be an Hall Of Fame battle lmao Greatest of All time
Pak- nice work, every time u drop it seems as u improve ur writing every time....wit this one ur structure was great, alot of emotion was brought out and imagery as used in the pictures that u posted, vocab was great and all the words flowed nicely together....nothin much bad that i can point out about ur Topical verse....pretty good drop indeed
X- same wit u....seems like u are proven urself to everybody that u aint no light push over and i like that about u....u structure was great, vocab was nice and emotion flowed in nice as well....imagery was ok i thought u could have put a lil more into ur imagery but all and all it was a dope drop....i feel that u will be one of the top topical heads in this if u just keep writing
v/Pak.....for more imagery and a lil bit more enjoyable peace.....
props to both
4/2 Pak good job mann this is close like we said it was gonna be
i'm surpiresed i scored 2 but chea only the voters knows wats next
uppin for more votes
Your good that's why you scored......Yup Yup thanks for the votes everyone.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312189
^^ topical linkage... you two vote up please
baron - wow... first thing i noticed about this peice was the large amount of emotion you put tinto this.. you delivered a very well point of view from that area alone... your vocab was good.. nothing to rave about.. multies i really don't care about i figure as long as it flow's right who cares really... structure was str8 but in all reality structure can be screwed and it still flow well or be a good peice ya kno..
Xplict - well dude i don't know where you came from but this peice was good.. i never read non your stuff before.. so let this be my first time saying keep it up man.. you attacked this peice good also and reading the other votes.. i have to dis agree.. i think this battle came down to who's approach did you like better cuz exicution was one well by you and baron so blah.. nice peice man
Final - IMO this is a who's story do you prefer battle as both of these drop's were very good but in all honesty i felt barons a lil more due to his approach.. damn good jobs fellas.. anybody say this was a one sided or easy battle tell them to go fuck themselves
V/baron
^^ i will never put that much into a vote ever again unless it's a champ match :o
hit top linkage
v - pakaveli...
he just had more emotion in this thing than xplicit did, he had a more complex take on the topic with some heavier worded bars, that showed off his swrtiing ability more than x's did. the twist was mediocre, but your story was better than pak's, however he definitely showed a prowess for writing.. vote - pakavel
good battle pak
Yup thanks for the votes...links will be checked.
Yup don't worry philly..links WILL be checked lol
Quote:
Originally Posted by Baron P. Mortuus
they better be or else...
*does throat slice jester*
Time Out
Stop upping stickied threads
new to the board so my vote probably don't count but definetely feeling the topic
Baron-simple structure less metaphors with more direct adjectives, felt more like a battle piece at points. kinda lost my interest half way thru but still a decent piece
Xplicit- more of a poetic structure definetely more on point topically. feeling your style overall. some lines were so visually mind enlightening i had to re-read it. that's how i know a good piece.
V-Xplicit
LiQuiD MeTaL
Need 2 BATTLE.....no need 2 prove nothin no newbs apply....some1 with skill PLZ!!!
6-3...thanks for the votes.
baron nice piece not your strongest from what i am used to but it really does work for your you came simple straight to the point with the story and topic and hand which is a good thing X same with you i felt a poetic vibe from your piece which showed the emotion in it i liked how you used imagrey also to show what was up a good thing also.
so i have it a draw what i like in both but i really do have to vote someone so
vote......Baron
just had a better verse that entertained me
Big Tim in the house house...7-3.
Closed...Baron will be unable to show next week, so the championship match will be determined by the next two in line besides the two whom just battled...when Baron returns...he will get a shot when he asks for it...whether it be by ranks or if he wants to be added for a 3 way topical champ match