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...Am I Guilty...?
An articulate and respected individual who's secrets are appalling
Up 2 GOD I'm calling, life moving fast but it seems like I'm crawling
(Am I Guilty?)
Intentionally, why did I choose to rob that man of his possessions
Was it my mental adolescence, or me exhibiting my inner criminal essence
(Am I Guilty?)
However, once I even tampered w/ a woman who was legally taken
She divorced, got her pregnant, then I left, leaving her lethally aching
(Am I Guilty?)
Also, lets not forget my duties as a curb pharmacist
Kept my boy mom doped up, then had the nerve to charm his sis
(Am I Guilty?)
Sadly, I shot the guy after jacking his whip for the 22's
I'm ashamed to say, I knew him then told him mom of the tragic news
(Am I Guilty?)
These are just a few incidents mentioning some of my bad times
After committing everyone, I went home and composed some sad rhymes
(Am I Guilty?)
For someone so intelligent and driven, how could this be?
When my resume lists many jobs, military service, and a college degree
(Am I Guilty?)
To walk a day in my shoes, man, if you only knew
The main question is, is this story really true
(Am I Guilty...Nah)
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Feelin the finish to say the least. Man YOU GUILTY! Give it up, lol, just playin. I like how it breaks to that question, although the bars self, were to simple, even with the vocab use. To predictable, but the story telling made it good. It woulda been cool if you kept going, it was sounding pretty good. You got the rhyme scheme down, kept it flowing good, and the overall structure could use a LITTLE work. I think the creativity on the subject was tight, and the only thing I'd say, is use more effort in building the bars, and it'd be even better. Stay up doggy.
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Uppin for feed, peeps...will return the favor...
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yo i liked this you got potenial to be a great storyteller the next pac man keep this coming
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'ppreciate the feed peeps...Uppin again...for more...
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Damn, a nig can't get some feed or comments...uppin
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this was alright i didnt like the (Am I Guilty?) between almost everyline
rhymes were good. iight multies. flow was smooth throughout
vocab was pretty good. imagery was alright coulda been better
i see you have potential to be pretty good. just elevate on strucutre
vocab and imagery. that would help u. peace
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this piece was beautiful it could ve a been at little more complexed with wording more multies but i loved and if was longer because i was just getting into it when it was over
much love
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bleh this was alright, nothing special at all, and not 'certified' as you put it. If this is your best you have a long way to go still. Keep elevating my man.
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this was a good verse.. i liked how it questioned ur every action, telling a short story in a way.. scheme was kinda of simple but the content was good and it flowed ok as well. favorite line was...
Also, lets not forget my duties as a curb pharmacist
Kept my boy mom doped up, then had the nerve to charm his sis
the verse seems like your asking for forgiveness for the things you have done.. or asking were you wrong. are you guilty is question for yourself. how do you feel.. anyway liked it aside from the one word rhyme scheme shit was nice had some emotion to... keep it up
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