Schizophrenic Conversation

pain and misery i wrought, while the alter egos i fought
the many voices in this head weren't thinkin the same thoughts
another insane brain brought to u by our god the creater
i don't hate her but i stood with a knife in hand to await her
i'm not a hater, and yet i am, am i a murderer, maybe
some would call this condition biological, most call it crazy
her name was stacey, the mommy, tommy and I hid quietly
silently we agreed that her death would be a neat site to see
i guarentee it was me, tommy was just an influence
a nuisence, only there to give away his two cents
it made sense, hence my willingness to agree with him
be with him, even meet his friends jim and tim
they busted in, completely random, the tandem stopped the fun
said we were insane still wanting death, your the son!
we were stunned, all of us standing in this portal to nowhere
i was told to beware of their glare, so i dared not go there
it wasn't fair, the debate could create a state of nothing
something in my head wanted to leave this fucking..
...place, i raced to the face of death, taking breaths
i wouldn't dare to mess with or confess this guess
we were all related in some way, shape, or form
informed of this disturbance, i rushed out like a storm
they were controlling, i had no say in any matter
so it didn't matter what i said in this constant pitter patter
i looked back and saw them fighting, this might be the end
no need to mend, i'll just send my farewells to this friend
i wont defend, i reminded myself that i was simply entwined
so i killed myself..
...and now theres one less alter ego in this little boys mind

Thanks for reading.

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this was very good man. I loved the story liner and the wordplay. It was very mature in many ways. The flow was straight throughout the whole OM which is very good. The rhyme Skeme was very well done and that is kinda hard to do now-a-days. I give this peice a 10-10. Keep writing man. *Goes To Nominate*

~LeX

thanks for the feed and nomination homie, much appreciated.

rise.

i agree with Lex this is HoF material ima nominate it

can u please leave feedback on the link in mah sig

thank u thank u

rise

I don't think it's HoF material honestly....Tim and Atticus and Ta2 have been dropping dope and they ain't getting nominations...no hate...but toher than that...it was an excellent read Auto. I liked the wording and imagery...some emotion, but there could have been a little more. I liked the topic and concept...good title for it too....not bad at all. Like I said I liked it, not HoF material IMHO though. Peace...hit my OM Divine Intervention.

cool

u whores

lol can you Return The favor by leaving feed in thwe OM called "Incredible? Part One" Please. It aint dope but its a peice.

W00t, i loved this peice, you really imagined yourslef being inside his mind and made every detail as good as possible

something in my head wanted to leave this fucking..
...place, i raced to the face of death, taking breaths
i wouldn't dare to mess with or confess this guess
we were all related in some way, shape, or form
informed of this disturbance, i rushed out like a storm

I loved that bit, almost the best bit in the whole rap, apart from

don't hate her but i stood with a knife in hand to await her
i'm not a hater, and yet i am, am i a murderer, maybe
some would call this condition biological, most call it crazy

that bit, now that was the best part, for sure

I liked this peice. Exspecially the wordplay, and the scheme. Decent way to put this om' together. Vocab was good an fitted decently. Keep up the work my friend.

-mc mystique

thanks

yep

look at my nigga auto, this shit was good son, nice piece good flow, i can see what ur talking about, it was a well writen piece, structure was good n' the set up, the wordplay was on point, & the rhyme scheme, vocab fit well with the flow, u didn't use to much or not enough which is good, again nice piece

thanks. last up.