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I dropped 'New Comer', & the attention to my name start expanding
It's defeats I'm handing , it's my words now the public demanding
I'm reprimanding these pitiful MC's with lyrics that are so intense
I spit flames that can't be rinsed, ya'll kept fire extinguishers ever since
The consequence u suffer from me in a rap battle is devastating
I love to eradicate the elite and newbz, so of course I'm never hating
A flawless record I'm anticipating, but there might be 1 that's eligible
But they say if my lyrics wasn't already marvelous, they'd be incredible
Conceited...nah, I just a fella with immense knowledge fully embraced
Now go set up that battle, because I'm already waiting trully in-place
I've received 2 much flak, stating this piece was a self-glory
It's a few of u all worth hearing, obviously everyone else bore me
It takes time 2 elevate, yeah, the process may be slow
I can tell when u cats mad, ya'll be in the background singin' Ne-Yo
4 those that I've demolished lately, believe that I meant well
These O-M's isn't braggin' about me, just giving ya'll a little intel

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NOw that's a Nice piece put together well......:2thumb:

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This piece was pretty good, it fell off in some places but you were quck to pick it back up. The flow was decent, structure was good, you had some metas, i think you could have added some more multis to the piece. It was creative in some places and some places could have been more creative. THe imegry was okay. Over all this was a pretty good read. Keep up the good work.

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I'm just not feeling any good rhythm to this, it's very much like your last piece, short and kind of simple... You fail to use multies in your rhymes to the tune that I think helps guide the reader to the flow of your beat.

I finally believe that the corner is turned-
I've binded my cleaved heart disorder and learned...

That is an example of good multies - they can help structure your piece and make it sound better rhythmically. What you are doing is simply italicizing the words that rhyme and seperating them out between a bunch of off-syllable counted lines, with word choices that either draw out or shorten the lines.

Keep it up, there's potential and room for improvement, I just always tend to get pretty honest with my feedback.

I'm always willing to listen to feed...but with my O-M's, I'm not that driven to use alot of multi's...if u want to see how I use my multi's...go to my battle in Front Lines vs. LickWid...vote if u can...

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umm will your topic choice i didn't like its kinda played out an you took the same spin on it..line length wise it was kinda stretched for me and everyone else i think but you had some multies in their and shit just should wrote on a better topic and such no hate and shit

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this piece wasnt your greatest but it seemed like you put this together in about 10 minutes...your lines were a little stretched which made it hard for me to follow the flow...no real creative concept...just self-glorification...ummm overall i wasnt really wowed with this piece...it was just a simplistic drop for the most part...overall it was okay...rtf plzz...links in sig.

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yo this shit droped like what eill cha say ye good, the flow was aiight ure multies were aiight, like the way u put the words tagether man, fuckin keep it up aiight.

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