Art of Murder

To Kill
Unethical horror to the torture in tormented living
w/more vivid growth of gore enhances demented killing
Chilling?
ax murdering maniacs attack back;presenting unusual cases
where blood graces killers with smiles creepin apon their faces
Veins emerge from the skin while they slowly strip human flesh
who put you to the test of survival; ending grim in a horrid mess
To Kill?
never processes the possessed minds seeking the stench of a carcass
who start this as an amatuer only believe next there no less of an artist
who paint grotesque "scenes" with blood
not a job..
a hobby doing deadly "deeds" for fun

How To Kill....

The antics are endless, dependent to tactics or a death despensing reflex
sensing a menace venting an instant kill is when white light reflects next
but death from a vet inflicts pain ending sick, not easy and quick
world full of pricks playing mind games and phsyically harmful tricks
chains and whips blades slit taped wrists just to begin the deadly intention
with bodly incisions, including fluent bruising to suffocation to ease the tention
next testing blunt objects that connect to necks paralyzing an escape
planning to rape? sizing your "date" tied in place and silent with duct tape
or torture slowly by slicing parts of a body enduring through screams of pain
seeing there own slaying, begins to fade into a tainted bloody phase of haze
black and blue face runs cold, one more cut to show the impacts made
searchers parade for the rotting body taped tight in a plastic garbage bag
blood infests the entrity of the murder scene soon to be clean of it
now a killer fleeing in a blood painted fleece already knows.....
...this is not the last we will see of him

To kill.....means a victim is found

body bound in materials managing to seal a hiding corpse; is key
ofcourse the remorse for the family is towards the horrible horror story
Stench makes you gag of all the victims who show a terrible way to go
authority believes we can deface these killers through there victims
....How so?
when the victims face dont show!

Links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...89#post4651089
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...14#post4651114

Fuck the links.


Structre = dope. Wordplay = Great. Flow = Wonderfull. Metaphores = Kick Ass. Story =Killer lol. Spekz = A God.

10-10

~Lex

thanx for the feedback..

upping

Wow...this was a really dope piece. The flow was perfect and the emotion was there the entire time.

never processes the possessed minds seeking the stench of a carcass
who start this as an amatuer only believe next there no less of an artist

^^^favorite part, I loved the rhyming and use of vocabulary throughout that really brought this piece to a whole other level, stay dope lol

Thanx for the feedback...

upping for some more!

Quick up before i get off work lol...

..ill return all favors ..when i get the time!!

feed up

bomb bomity...good read. um starting with structure, that hot...the verses came clear, held meaning, kept rythm, felt artistic. the concept of murder as an art, is rather ironic, but holds a truth i guess, the message was fathomable. i mean i got it right. the adlib of your piece was off the wall. every sentence you threw out a punch with a verb, two nouns, adverbs, adjectives, particibles. the piece had a lot of color, not much personification...nor any similies or metaphor...but still a good read. lookin foward to reading another, or maybe doin a collab, review my piece and let me know.

^^thank you for the good feedback..

ill do my best to get at ur piece..

kinda plain, kinda complex in a good way. nothin was wrong with the piece. it was alittle short but it was great. the flow was nice and the lines werent too long.

I left some wack feed earlier lol.

I liked this peice mainly cuz ity was a great story and flow. The worplday was very mature and the creativity was nice. The structre was the only thing I didnt care for but oh well lol. I like the fact that you did a great topic unlike most heads now days.
10-10

~Leximus

Upping cuz im bored..and can!

^^I liked this piece, and never got the amount of feedback i would have liked..

so i bring new light to this write!

peze

wow...just wow....this om was dope...not much to say...flow was really good..a couple of lines were off...this had some nice multies...vocab was nice not simple but not over done...strutre was off....i didnt like it one bit...a very creaitve drop...deff not played...this was really good...the whole story line was impressive...i aint see much work like this...just wow not much to say lmao...good shit homie...rtf if u can..

Thanx Dj... i take a looksy at ur piece...but boo at you boo'n my structure lol ..j/p

Thanx again.

this is a great peice one of the best peices ive read i really liked the topic it it really haunted you after you read it and kept me interested through out the whole thing it was grusome at some points but just enough to make it intresting the flow was perfect i could hear this being played on a beat i have to one of my peices saw some nice vocab in there and all of it was fitted in place well the structure was good i like how you were direct about it and sperated everything the word play was ill i liked it especilly at the end so great peice hope to see more of ur writing
leave feed on the om in my sig

Upping this HOF piece lol j/k..or am i.

at work kinda bored

feedonme..and ill feedonyou

kinky shit.

Holy shit. This is a dope piece. The imagery was like a violent painting. Multis made the flow like water. I could read this again and again. HoF materital. Keep writing.

Thanx upping for some more feedback..

up.

Spekz are you a murderer man all your song about killing rape lol lmao

this is just pure skill. very nice vocab and the grusome was good cause it put a lil twist into it. keep droppin and ill be on the look

"next testing blunt objects that connect to necks paralyzing an escape
planning to rape? sizing your "date" tied in place and silent with duct tape''

Unethical horror to the torture in tormented living
w/more vivid growth of gore enhances demented killing
Chilling?
ax murdering maniacs attack back;presenting unusual cases
where blood graces killers with smiles creepin apon their faces
Veins emerge from the skin while they slowly strip human flesh
who put you to the test of survival; ending grim in a horrid mess
To Kill?
never processes the possessed minds seeking the stench of a carcass
who start this as an amatuer only believe next there no less of an artist
who paint grotesque "scenes" with blood
not a job..
a hobby doing deadly "deeds" for fun
^^
this was a nice opener.

you had a nice conept and the originality in this was great..yes the topic is played or used alot but you twisted it in your own ways and turned it up a noth with your metaphors and multies that were put together to create a creative stroyline and flow. this was done nicely and the image that you put in percpective was great and nicely done.

keep writing dude!.
RTF links in the sig

very good it sounded as if you really knew how to kill somebody ....lol i like the structure it was perfect very original to a point the flow was great the rhyme scheme was incredible as with the vocab the emotion was just right you should just keep dropping like that and you lll be named king for sure ;p

PEACE

would also like some seasoned feedback on this one

This was a nice piece of material. I like the sturcture of the battle and how everything was set up in your verses. Wordplay and all of your lines was dope never knew what line was gunna be next, keep up what your doing man, looking forward to reading some more stuff from you

^^thank You

holy shit.. this whole thing was ill.. my type of evil. have u tried spitting this to a beat?? my fav part was the "how to kill" portion.. if u listen to my audios i talk about killing, and morbid shit of that sort quite often.. keep droppin that murderous shit yo.1

oh n this is my first time in the text section so i dont know how this works but if u want u can peep my track.. has a lot of graphic shit in it about killing n what not..

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-391499p3.html

Holy fuckin shit... (i would like to mention a few things)

First of all, the chances of me seeing this where like winning the lottery... i havent been in the OM forum in months, only reason i peeped it was to read the diss pieces by AI, so for me to come in here at the very time you up'd a piece of mine that is nearly 2 n half years old...blows my mind.

secondly, Thank you - and no ive never tried recording...not much of audio head myself....(although we prob. could work out something - if ud like to spit it) ...show me how its done lol....

3rdly.... since we are in scytzo together eventually ill be getting around to listening/reading e/bodies work...it is a goal of mine to get a lil mroe familiar with my fellow crew members... so stay on me [nohomo] about feedback and ill get to it...

right now...im not focused..

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Originally Posted by Spekz.

Holy fuckin shit... (i would like to mention a few things)

First of all, the chances of me seeing this where like winning the lottery... i havent been in the OM forum in months, only reason i peeped it was to read the diss pieces by AI, so for me to come in here at the very time you up'd a piece of mine that is nearly 2 n half years old...blows my mind.

secondly, Thank you - and no ive never tried recording...not much of audio head myself....(although we prob. could work out something - if ud like to spit it) ...show me how its done lol....

3rdly.... since we are in scytzo together eventually ill be getting around to listening/reading e/bodies work...it is a goal of mine to get a lil mroe familiar with my fellow crew members... so stay on me [nohomo] about feedback and ill get to it...

right now...im not focused..

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word, no prob.. i was on the scyts's forum in the thread where we posted all of our work.. and the title caught my eye.. dope shit man.. glad i peeped it. but yo no rush, peep my shit when u ready. yeah hopefully i can inspire u to spit that to a beat.. me, i dont spit no lyrics unless its mine.. i'd feel like dr.dre or something if i did,lol.. aight fam.