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Scars (Feat. Leximus)
Scars
By: Nash & Lex
Nash - Older Brother
Lex - Younger Brother
optimistic hatred, leaves me as an unprepared other
You left me scared Inside, why did you leave brother
& now you know relief'll never touch her ..
.. your on that long ride, think about our mother
^no you're wrong! it's cruel how we'll end up!
& the hatred between us'll leave our ends corrupt
Didn't you know, pot wont do anything for you
Where did you go, a move that made you look like a fool?
what move?!? i don't understand you, that wasn't me
you never called mom! you think that wasn't mean?
Who do you think I look up to? dont say our father
he's dead now cuz of dumbshit you'd do, talk? Dont bother
you're makin my temper hotter, shut your mouth ..
.. you know DAMN well how it is in the south
You wont answer my prayers, I drowned in my tears
can we just be normal? you use to pull on my ears!!
yeah, i remember, but i fear i can no longer be ya savior
you know that i've done you enough favors ..
Mom cried and dad walked away, how do you feel
Hows it feel to fly away from the flock? cuz it's REAL!
are you implying my life is lying? kid you'll be crying
younger brother or not, speak any longer you'll be dying
God wont let you back, not after that lil stunt
What was next? sellin' crack? You ill Cunt ..
i'll fucking kill you man! don't make me do it!
see my life over here? don't make me put you threw it!
I fucking hate you now, you dont give a shit
One question.......are you happy bout` what you did?
yes, you wouldn't shut your mouth, i had to silence
doesn't matter what you say, you brought me to violence
All you did was complain, nothing made you happy
You were a real damn pain, your attitude was crappy
crappy? happy? you don't compare our lifes very well ..
i may have put you THREW hell, but my LIFES a living hell!
i'll rest in peace, but i cant vistit cuz its to far
but I want you to stop the madness, and heal these scars
rest in peace bro, don't give a fuck who you are ..
.. i'll think of you, whenever i remember my scars
peace.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=280781
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=297755
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=297610
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This Was A Nice Peice. The Topic Was Well Chosen, I Wouldnt Have Thought It Would Of Been About 2 Brothers Though. Even Though, It Had Depth And Good Emotion Set From The Start. The Rhymeskeem Flowed Almost Effortlessly And Helped My Read Easier. The Structure Was Tight With Both Of You Focusing On The Topic In Hand. Good Peice, Well Done To The Both.
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Rise! I loved this peice you two did great. I loved the flow and structre....Bleh leh bleh. Lol Rise.
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Rise! Dont let this dope peice go to waste. :mad:
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good shit you'll, was really feelin the whole topic and everything, from beginning to end it was good, keep it up
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eh, this was such a peice...very dope
the topic was interesting and it caught my eye
this peice had a great deal of emotion
that was nice, so was the flow and rhyme scheme
i enjoyed reading this peice, good job guyys
overall i'd say this was like a 9/10
keep it up~
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meh it was alright. try being more creative 'n flip stuff dont just go at a conversation 'n leave without saying shit. nothin raised my eyebrows just average but it was ok
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This was good, it kinda like dragged the reader into the characters problems and this made it interesting, rhymeshceme was good and so was the vocab, not as in high vocab but vocab that seemed authentic for this situation. Very well done and do check this OM thanks
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=299270
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Eh.
This piece was very boring. I'm sorry, but it really didn't keep my attention. It was basic too, and I really didn't like it. Mainly because I've seen the concept too many times, and this wasn't very original. The vocabulary was very mediocre, and I don't know. It was serious, and I just didn't think this was very creative.
Overall, be more original next time.
See this:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=299216
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This, although looks like it would be very interesting, really wasn't. I mean, the approach and structure was fairly creative but undernieth the superficial it was just a bland story of adolesance that really didn't achieve or do to much throughout its course. Cry's lines werent to bad, but Lex's lines just messed up Cry's status as being average due to the fact they were just lame and often corny. I don't know, overall it was just an average drop that you can see from any newb, plus alittle smoke and mirror. Wasn't really feeling the piece.
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Mannn good read, nice imagery.
Was interesting to read and the concept was fantastic.
But yeah, I always enjoy reading your peices and stuff because they always are something that grab my attention. Cool man.
