Coded Descriptions

The descriptive emotive encrypted
Depicted in words yet unpredicted
The letter lies at the mercy of time
Creator ringing the deathly chime
Read oh reader what you read
Heed oh I reader what I heed
The humming of crickets
On top the barbed thickets
Willows lilting underweight
Damming their seeders to hate
Yachts of old farmers united in pain
Follow the stars to attain material gain
Red herring amaze reader in many games
Lovers internally bleed, yet name no names
Coordinated auditions of irregular ideals
Malfunctions matter damns loves and steals
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Melancholy matters, mind knows no better
....See oh reader….
If you can decode this letter!

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this was a very creative peice..i liked it
even though this was a bit short it was nice
good flow, rhymes and creativity in this
overall this was good...keep it up..

by the way i decoded it, that was pretty cool

yeah i know, i read da vinci ish before making it lol, uppin'

I like how this mad man thinks. Very creative, would have liked it longer but it was still good. Good voacb used and nice imagery. Flow was a little off but was still easy to understand. I liked the whole idea. Only thing I can say is I was mad it was so short. :mad:

Anyway good drop man. Peace

lol preciate it, i'm still in writers block phases na mean

Wordplay: 8
Creativity: 8
Flow: 9
Structre: 8
Story: 9

I thought this was a great peice. Short. But great. Keep it up.

Preciate it

Uppin'

I loved the concept and the word choice, and the whole code thing was very creative and set this on a whole other level. The flow wasn't perfect but it still rolled right off my tongue (in my mind lol). Too bad it was so short but maybe you could use this concept on another, longer one. Anways good job on this

Yeah i'll prolly make a longer one once i get my creativity back lol, but yeah preciate the comments

Stay up

iy made me think...
it was nice flow i was confesued at the beginnin
i got it now
nice flow mettas and multies

nice drop..i liked this shit dude....

preciate it

ha ha . yeah you crazy for real. nice artistic drop.i've done similar with the codes n ish a while back......... nice set up. poetry flowing f'sho...... yeah was an interesting take
.nice way to fuck around w/ sum wordplay . rythym was tite........imagery was ace...
all-in-all a short but hot joint....... keep em poppin

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preciate it na mean

How do you feel reading the lines of a Mad Man.

I liked it. Clever little rhyme and amusing with the code, thats cool. Although, i think the coding could have been more complicated, but that has nothing to do with the piece, just my opinion. The vocab use was good...the word placement you chose and story line was used for a poem style om, just short. Cool topic name to match the style, i like it, good job, also with the encoding, that was cool. Stay up.

lines were too short

rhymes werent that good

nice vocabulary though

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Originally Posted by bestdeepthroatalive

lines were too short

rhymes werent that good

nice vocabulary though

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WEll, have you heard of structure and Form