Ramdon i dont give a FUCK you can rap this to any beat

YO MY FIRENDS SAY SOME SHIT ABOUT ME
IM FUCKIN PARANOID I GOT HIT BY AN ASTROID
SO I WORTE IT DOWN ON A PICE OF PAPER,
FIRDENS SAY IM A FAKER SHIT’, NO PAPER!
I USED BLOOD AND HAIR TO WRITE EM
I HEAR LIGHTING I GET FRIGHT END
I FEEL IN SECURE
THAT’S WHY I DRINK LACQUER
DISPOSE OF YOUR BODY IN THE SEWER
LYRICAL CONTENT WORSE THEN THE CURE
SERIOUS, SEROUSLY
WHEN YOU SEE ME O D
YOULL RUN UP A TREE
THEN ILL COME AFTER YA
CRAFTER
USING A CHAIN SAW FROM MASSACRE
GIVE YOU A MASSIVE SCAR
Kidnapping a movie star
From ER in a police car
WATCH OUT IM A CLASS ACT RAPER
GRIM REAPER PUSH YOU OFF A CLIF STEEPER
IM FUCKIN STANDIND IN THE LUNCH LINE
READY TO STRANGLE YOU WITH FISHIN LINE
SO FUCKIN GET YOUR CREW AND YOUR NINE
IM NOT SCEARED THE DIVEL IS PREVIENTING ME FROM DIEIN
That’s why when you here sirens
I’m always lien firing off, firing shots
To stop these massive blood clots
FIGHTS WITH WIVES WHO WILED KNIVES


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I don't know what to say, I'm speechless...

what y ?

That was just straight up freestyle? If so, it's aight... It's pretty creative and shit, can't really fuck with the structure. But like I said, if its just freestyle, it's good. Peace

CRAZY KILLER, IMA KILLER BUT WHEN I GROW UP IM GOING TO BE A DRILLER,
WHO SAW THAT MOVIE THILLER, WAS THAT FUNNY DUDE IN IT? BEN STILLER. I LIKE PAM ANDERSON I WANNA CHILL WITH HER.

random, i loved it. you inspired me. keep coming

I dont think so.

this piece was kinda free style material but it wasn't that good.

I liked the creativity and you had some nice lines in this piece. I would say loose the CAPS LOCK and make it lower case. Tidy up your structure and widen your vocab. Your vocab was a lil scrappy over some places of this piece.

I would give you top marks for a free style and creativity but i dont know if its just me but i like reading pieces with strong vocab and your piece didnt really have that. You had an ok topic but my advice for you is in future use better vocab and it will better the outcome of your piece.

shit was garbage

rof

sry, SOMEONE needed to tell you

thx fot the comments

Umm.....

Flow: 6
Vocab: 5
Structure: 4
Creativty: 7

Basically I Didnt Like It. Nothing Appealed To Me. You Need To Work On It More, Like The Structure, Some Short Lines, Then Outstreched Ones.

Umm Yea This Wasn't Good Nor Wicked Bad But Still In The Middle Kind Of
I Wasn't Feeling The Topic With The Randomness It Was All Over The Place
Rhymes Were Nice I Suppose, Impressive Multies Even Though There Were A Few
Flow Was Meh, No That Good..Vocab Wasn't good, Elevate On That
Overall This Was Like A 6/10.

i aint even gonna leave feed because this isnt good at all....some bullshit....are you being serious kid?

0.5/10 for trying

What he said^

I'm 'posted' on the 'block' in amry fatigues with 'steel sparkin'
Translate the 'slang' when I'm 'barkin'...
The 'M.J. throwback'll' penatrate ya 'shootin gaurd' and have 'boxed in'
The 'paint' decorating the 'hardwood's' goin' be thicker
When I 'pull off the shot' ya whole 'squad' goin' pour 'liqour'
'Mah nigga'... I 'work the crops' like 'slaves' to drape the 'whitest cottons'
I know it might be a 'Shaka' but this cypha's a 'Pro Club'...
so scrub, tell me how your ass got in
I go through 'withdrawls' after installing smacked 'crack' on every track I'm 'rockin'
On the mic I'm a 'gorilla black' and your a 'notorious imposter'
Of 'papa' slash biggie with 'momma titties' like 'Brittney'...

IM FUCKIN PARANOID I GOT HIT BY AN ASTROID

^LMFAO! Good lord this was wack.

Flow: 6.5
Vocab: 6
Structure: 3
Creativty: 6

not bad..some parts needed work

overall=21/30

0.1/1000 dawg that shit was weak