Dear Grandma.

Dear Grandma.
Infant years still play heavy on my heart,
Times of your presence…Still remain
fresh to the senses; memories of wine
now suddenly dry…Relentless to subdue
to your love light, sweet caress of good bye.
Whisper in my ear, to tell me I was loved
and to hold my head up high…Yet through
a subtle kiss of my head as I slept, you still
remain by my side, strong in my mind.

A proud woman, backed to sleep to gods grace
by a tender age of sixty…Her love already fallen
to the sands of time, alone in her retracted step…
Yet never once did your love for family lessen,
heart remained true…Preserved for all to see,
and believe me, we all adored you too…
Even now, zero distorted view, I just wish
I could have been there, one last time, to hug,


I long for your embrace, nights are cold, silent
Whilst reminiscing the smile to face…Scent of
the flowers beside your grave, remain true to my
scent, never to pass, ever to last, in memories of past.
Taken from the grasp of youth, by power unforgivable
to forget…Gave life to 7 children of god,
one of which gracefully gave birth to a poet.

It was whispered that I was your favourite,
but I refuse to embrace… As you loved all of your family
none of which in first or last place…In the knowing
you are safe in gods grand, I’m secure in love…
In the knowing angel over my being,
watching down with eyes of gold, smiling above.

As the tears wept from sorrow of loss in heart,
passes into the mist of time…My head rises with
a smile as I feel your love sill wrapping me in
warmth…Sweet in sound, your voice remains
to linger in my head, to comfort in the solemn nights.

Lost in emotion, lead me home to thought of happier
times…Dancing in the street, playing in the park, passing
days and weeks, in our stride, never to know truly…
How much your love meant to my up bringing.

Through poverty strived, arisen victorious through mist…
Brought days of sun shine in your path, we laughed…
As the world passed us by, patch our self on a patch of grass.

You kept our family together, the thread that bind our hearts close…
Yet since you’ve left, the thread broke, no longer are words spoke.

In loving memory, of a woman that remains in our hearts for ever more.

Catherine Power… the salt of the earth.

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Hell Yea, I Dont Normally Visit Poetic Scriptures But I Seen Your Name And Thought, D'ya Know What, Its Probably I'll, And D'ya Know What, I Werent Wrong, Damn This Piece Was Dope Fo Real, I Lost My Gran Jus Before XMas So I Could Re-Late To This Poem, Everything About It Was Ill...The Emotion You Put Into It Almost Had Me Crying And Imma Hard Az Nails Type Of Guy..

You Did Ya Gran Real Proud Wid This Piece,


10-10,

Thanks alot man, that actually means alot to me... So thank you.

No Prob's Bro, Fo Real She'll Be The Happiest Women In Heaven Knowing You Thought That Much Of Her,

I Jus Showed Ma Gurl It And She's Almost In Tears Too, Hounestly, Get That Shit Published Holmez,

As i said, thank you and i apreciate it man...

Also say thanks to your girl friend dude.

u jus have,


yo el, look up ma open mic in ma sig, (Open Eyes) lemme know what you think, guys be sleeping on it,

What a lovely poem. You expressed every thought delicately, elecantly and clearly. I was touched by this heartfelt poem and im glad you decided to share it, being that it is more of a personal subject.

Her love already fallento the sands of time
I felt this line was the center piece of the poem.

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What a lovely poem. You expressed every thought delicately, elecantly and clearly. I was touched by this heartfelt poem and im glad you decided to share it, being that it is more of a personal subject.

Her love already fallento the sands of time
I felt this line was the center piece of the poem.

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Thanks alot man, I apreciate it.

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Beautiful piece there.........I liked the Poetic flow to it and though i'm more of a topical type poetry comes as a secondhome therefore i can appreciate the effort and emotion you must have poured into creating this. The emotion was the foundation to which your language was the catalyst. The wording of sentences allowed you to creat a flow which like a chain, connected one link/line to the other. However, there was a weak link, probably some patchy lines used.....but that can be easily disregarded to the Grandeur......Excellent

Thanks alot man...

I like extensive feed, so keep it coming people :)... Thanks.

Upping... Thank you people.

I think this may be the best peice I have ever seen from you,it was 100% dope. what really struck me,before the emotion or vocab in this peice,was the structure,it was really amazing.You have always told me that the regular structure was noobish and herbish looking,I was a bit sceptical about that,but now that I have seen this,I can see just how much a complex structure can do for your Poem/OM's.Your emotion was extremely strong and evident in this peice,I could feel your pain.It was so touching,I'll admit,without feeling ashamed,that it did make my eyes water,because I know you well,and after seeing just how much this hurt you,I can't beleive that I didn't do more to help you through it,for which I am sincerely sorry.You really do have such an unbeleivable passion for writing,and I beleive that one day you will DEFINITELY become a published poet.Another thing that I liked about this peice is that your vocab was very good (as always),I enjoy reading your peices,not just because you're my friend, but because I am genuinely blown away by your work,you continue to amaze me every time you drop something,without fail.There is one thing that I feel I need to point out,it seems to me like you dumbed down for your audience,but that I suppose is a good thing because if you used all of the intellect you have,not many people would know what the fuck you were talking about,this is their fault,not yours lol.The fact that this was a real life story made it even more sad and hard hitting,and it is also asomething thaat everyone can relate to,but also something that nobody wants to be able to relate to,you showed a softer side of you that not many people apart from myself and a few other members on this site have seen before (well except for when you are talking about Josie).I loved the description in this,it was so amazing,you did not let any paryt of this poem turn out vague,anything you said,you described it amazingly,which I know is an extremely difficult thing to do for most writers.I absolutely loved this peice,although one thing that didn't really make this any worse at all,but I still feel that I have to comment on it was that the first two lines of the 3rd stanza seemed to be a little bit forced to me,but as I have said this to me does not matter at all,it did not make the peice any worse.I genuinely loved this peice,you showed raw emotion unlike nearly anything I have ever seen on this site,you have developed you own style ,and it is absolutely fantastic,and entertaining to read.I'm sure your Grandma would be extremely touched by this,I sit here with my heart softened,and I know that if your Grandma read this she would not be able to hold back the tears,it was hard enough for me to do it,never mind the person you were writing about.She is seriously lucky to have such a caring Grandson like you,and I'm sure she would be mightily touched by this poem.This was a very good read,and in my opinion it is definitely worthy of a place in the hall of fame,so I will be nominating it,this was a hart touching peice,and I would love to see more of this from you,keep writing,your dream of being a published poet will come true.I would rate this peice 10/10 it was truly fantastic

great work :2thumb:

Wow, just wow, seriously i thank you so much for taking the time to read this fully and take consideration in reading, dude coming from you that means alot, it's much apreciated... damn, now thats feed, thank you.

Upping for more feed. Thank you people, it means alot.

dope piece! i lost all my grandparents too,
so i can definately associate. extremely well
written and heart felt as usual. you really
know how to bring it w/ the tear jerka'z brotha.
reguardless, this piece was great, keep em comin!

loved it! :2thumb:

Thanks man, once again i apreciate it alot.

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Upping... I would apreciate it people. Thank you.

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Very elegant piece Po. I felt like you did a great job with this. None of the content came off as overtly abrupt or shocking... Everything just had it's own subtle charm and itelligence to it. It actually reminded me alot of a piece I wrote awhile back called "Picture Perfect" where I wrote about a dieing grandmother aswell. See, I got nervous about coming in here because alot of times with topics like this, readers will just bull shit you so bad because really... Who wants to critisice someones efforts to honor a loved one? But this came out very very authentic and heartfelt. Never once did I feel like you were just pulling something out of your ass, yet on the other hand I never once got bord with the content either. I feel like you're really starting to come into your own man. Great job.

Feed my poem... "Monsters Under the Bed" please.

Thanks alot man... I'll be sure to hit that poem up, you know i enjoy your work dude. Thanks alot.

Ok Wow once again you have astonished me in every single way.Your writing is flawless and has so much emotion and creativity.You imagery is unbelievable and it just makes a great read.Every time I click to go into one of your poems or pieces,I know i'm in for a treat and actuually read something that I will actually remember.Thats what you did here for me bro and I would actually like to thank your for writing it.Great piece bro and i'm sure you will keep it up ;)

Upping, And atty, I'll feed on yours in the morning dude... Damn late here in sunny england :).

Upping. Thanks guys so far i really apreciate everything, especially the comments that 'your grandma would be proud of you if she could read this'... That actually means alot.

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Ok Wow once again you have astonished me in every single way.Your writing is flawless and has so much emotion and creativity.You imagery is unbelievable and it just makes a great read.Every time I click to go into one of your poems or pieces,I know i'm in for a treat and actuually read something that I will actually remember.Thats what you did here for me bro and I would actually like to thank your for writing it.Great piece bro and i'm sure you will keep it up ;)

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I agree man your just dope in all areas this
is another hof piece man emotional..........
your the best yet poet on this site............

Today.a Tear Has Fallin For You............................beautiful......simp ly Beautiful...................

Thanks dude... Upping.

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