Bandanas, Top Pop, and Looseys

Pleasure, pain and persistence .. Trying to refrain from my visions ..
Visions of set trippin' .. flamed up for a mission ..
War is my ambition .. invison painting the town red ..
Imagine my confrontations .. mothers heartbroken and upset ..
Yet ..
You see not what I'm saying, paying me not much mind
playing up them benches ; moving them nicks and dimes
At night; i'm sighing, crying, vying for any relief
False beliefs in the street; friends buried beneath our feet
Yet ..
We're BLATIN, WOOP WOOPIN .. SOO WOOP in to the 5 ..
An everlastin' memory .. of who's who and down to ride ..
Screamin' out eastside! .. as we driveby and the guns bust ..
Schemin' on our next high .. reciting "In Blood We Trust" ..
Yet ..
You can't comprehend, how I could ride out for my Nine-Treys
Speakin in that swahili, Tamu Damu - Trey Trey Olay
Our actions are irresponsible, with our motives and our motions
Causing commotion; we're hopin' our true emotions wont get opened
Yet ..
I'm gonna hide behind this image .. almost like a taboo ..
Lies beside this gimmick .. if you see me you better move ..
I live for nothing .. i'm an antenna for hoodrat groupies ..
And my whole life .. I lived off Bandanas, Top Pop, and Looseys ..

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...=1#post4330011
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...29#post4330029

Damn, I can't get one piece of feedback.

Diz was an overall good drop in my opinion. Nice vocab,multi's, nd real good flow if u kno how 2 read it correctly nd i think i did. Da vocab was real good in diz piece. Keep droppin dat hot ish

not really my style or choice of content, but to be completely honest with you I thought this piece was pretty hard. It had a nice flow, organized idea, emotional and meaningful reasoning behind it, and an overall insightful feel to it. As a whole I'd have to say for what its worth this piece was excuted well. Good job!

nice ine mani like this peace it was dope
word play would be cool puns and such

i liked the vocab. in this piece, it fit well with what you were sayin and actually made sense....i loved the flow too and the concept was great, sumthin original which is hard to come by these days...overall, it was a nice piece of work, and i look forward to readin more of your stuff in the future....keep writin :)

itz straiitttt

This was a real nice piece man. I liked the way you were creative in the approach of going after a very, over-done topic. The whole streets, gangstah life type of concept is pretty played, but you came about it very originally and I really liked the piece to my own surprise. A few lines I've heard almost exactly before, but something about the way you worded them and put it all together still somehow made it all something very yours. Uuuuum ya, nice piece overall man.

I'd apreciate it if you could return the favor:
"L.A. Reed Bought my Soul"
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=287417

Thanks everyone for leaving feed.

it was a decent piece i like the word play and u really did have a nice flow to it keep doin ya thang

Jac', good to see you dropping again, man. Enjoyed this a lot. Nice message you sent out, as thats what most people are like.. just hiding behind a gimmick. Actually, thats why most people come on this board. Aside from the concept, your rhyming was really nice for one of your first drops since being back. Flowed really nice all the way, probably due to it being pretty basic, but that isn't a bad thing at all. You kept me interested throughout teh piece, which is hard to find these days.. short but sweet. Props and kep dropping, dude. Oh, and check out my latest piece in my sig. 10,000 tales.

-Brix.

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Pleasure, pain and persistence .. Trying to refrain from my visions ..
Visions of set trippin' .. flamed up for a mission ..
War is my ambition .. invison painting the town red ..
Imagine my confrontations .. mothers heartbroken and upset ..

nice way to open this its dope already lol

ur flow was really good i have never seen anything from u but i kno ur dope this drop was very creative
u had such good wordplay it like never fell off on this piece

You see not what I'm saying, paying me not much mind
playing up them benches ; moving them nicks and dimes
At night; i'm sighing, crying, vying for any relief
False beliefs in the street; friends buried beneath our feet

see^
and ur vocab was very good to i was impressed wit seein that
ur topic was great u stayed on it thru tha whole drop
i`ll be lookin forward to seein ur next drop

plz leave some feed on tha om in my sig

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nothin ppl?

I'm still going to press it.