Is It Real...?

Is It Real....?

Can I touch, taste, see, smell, or hear, this so called love?
Or do my senses, deny me, the facts of what reality signifies
It seems materialistic, but only to be embraced by emotions
Can an individual really be ready for such complex devotion?

For one to give their all, in search for the same equality
Pour their hearts and souls into this pit of equavilent exchange
The notion of honor, and faithfulness, spoiled unto do parts
For foul acts, splits a whole beat, sadly into two hearts

Does it bleed when injuired, or when foriegn seek hospitality?
Why does it burries itself to find shelter when abandon?
To once be clear, and then oddly complicate itself emensely
Then to bear a harder shell, however to float light but densely

I understand that it's only an idea, but why implicate it physically?
Changes the most cruel of men, and stone spirited of females
I see it's not a person, but questions honestly reveal........
............If it can't be touched, tasted, seen, heard or smelt.....

..................can it possibly be real......?

my second poem....feed

ok u did ya thizzle..i really liked that poem..how long u been writin? :coolio:

this is my second one lol up'n for feed

this was a nice poem...very defined and well written...lines seemed a bit long but its coo....your vocabulary was amazing....u had alot of creative words in this poem.....i like the opener it was makin me think for a second.."is love really what i think it is?"...but yo nice piece...keep it up

*Definitely feelin it homie, like the imagery, and wordplay throughout, i like the way you used the concept and played around with your paragraphs and n lines, i was feelin your vocabulary homie, real nice and inventive with creative thoughts, was consistent and thorough, for your 2nd drop homie on poetry, yea you definitely duz ya-ting. Keep it up holmez, can't wait till you have the time so we can do a collab sometime when ur done w/ training n shit, by then youll prolly be in iraq tho` who knows, keep droppn homie.

thanx for the feed up'n for more

Yeah i liked the imagery in this, very clear and to the point, although that made the poem as good as it is, to me it also slightly gave it a downfall, only because i PERSONALLY like to see a poem where i have to read through a few times to grasp the full picture of the poem, complexity is appreciated in my reading taste, but to the mass audience this would have appealed to them very well, and don't get me wrong i really enjoyed it, and i'm glad to see you are writting more poetry and kepping your talent for it sharp... the vocabulary was very well placed and in some places excellant, i really like your trhyme scheme in this, it wasn't forced atall, and i'm not even sure you actually ment to make it rhyme, but either way it worked very well and kept me interested in reading on further.

There was alot of imagery in this poem that i really enjoyed, and onve again it kept me intersted in reading further... i think if you carry on writting your ability will reach it's highest, this was very good and i hope to see more poetry coming from your direction man, well the hell done.

Good job.

in the questions asked...of where most of us have ventured or been....this was well put into the question we must ask...is it real?...to you i ask...how does it feel...and only you can fit your answer....i like ya depiction tho...wording was clear and decisive..nice

Yo

thanx.........continue feed

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Originally Posted by ~*c0c0amam1*~

ok u did ya thizzle..i really liked that poem..how long u been writin? :coolio:

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I laughed out at the world "Thizzle"...O shit...:laugh:

Let's Start With Saying That Your Emotion In Writing This Was Great. I Liked The Way How You Clearly Started The Poem An Finished It With The Taste, Touch, And Smell Ect. Your Vocabulary Fit Perfectly In This Peice. It Brought Out Imagery With Just The Word's. How You Put The Whole Poem Together Was Another Story.

I Enjoyed Reading This Peice Of Art. I Entend To Keep An Eye Out For More Writings

this poem is good...your on the come up...wanna see wat else your going to bring to the table...keep it flowing though...pea$e

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I liked 'equivalent exchange,' it sounds good, and is interesting. Pouring your heart into a pit was an idea I liked as well. The exchange isn't always equal though, maybe you can play around with that.
"Does it bleed when injuired, or when foriegn seek hospitality?"
I wanted to see this continued. Go into something that bleeds when injured, an athlete for example. The foreign person was an inclusion that also could have been extended, talking more in depth about the comparison.

ups and gets ready to drop another one lol

this was hot
i liked the the first paragraph the most though
you used big ass words thru out the entire thing and thats all good but sometimes big words doesnt always make the shit come out hot feel me?
but this was good though to me you didnt rhyme shit but all poems dont necessarily have 2 rhyme i was feelin this thru out though i was kinda confused while reading it cuz im kinda slow 2 catch on 2 shit when its written in some other type shit from another's mind but good though